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I couldn't make it past the first chapter with how god awful the flow of reading went. I felt like I was reading an elementary school students fantasy story. Grammar is hardly used or just used incorrectly, and the sentences are hard to comprehend due to how unnecessary some of the lines are. I feel like the author was adding more words to a sentence to make it longer. (EX from ch1: My name is Alex Walker. I was a college student who led a normal life, except that I'm an orphan. Who grew up in an orphanage until school and moved to college dorms for college and doing part-time jobs for money. It all worked out well until today) this could have been way simpler as this instead. (EX: My name is Alex Walker, I was a full-time collage student getting by through part-time jobs. I grew up as an orphan, so there was little money to fund my living expenses, so I opted to live in the collage dorms. It all worked out well, until today, that is.)
Everyone else: "You have superpowers?!" Mc: "Yes I have powers but that is not important right now." Everyone else: "ah yes you right"
Grammar needs to be readable could not understand conversation between mc and alice 😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅
I will just say MC is not the MC, he just follows the story and original MC's like a NPC, no character development.
well the book leaves a lot to be desired but one that you can appreciate about the book and the author that at least he isn't dropping. well as for everything else he can improve and build his skills in due time
If I am being honest here it feels like a kid is writing this novel. But for some reason it works for me. Not my fav novel out there but still a good read though
Great fanfic, beginning a little difficult, but after chapter 40+ it gets much better. keep going it's really good! I think it's amazing how good it is to see a protagonist unconcerned about things, making the story without the anti-cliché, which I see in most fanfic, a bad thing is the little interaction between the MC and the girls! But nothing that spoils the story itself.
good novel except it is not readable for the first 60 chapters,but after that it was readable
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Writing Quality is bad. Editing is essential. Overall good story. No bad points.
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No me gusta juzgar tan pronto, pero solo desde el primer capitulo la lectura ya es incomoda. Parece como si me estuviese contando un resumen rápido de los hechos que se supone e están ocurrieron do en tiempo de narración, lo cual quita toda la inmersión y sabor a la historia
How should I say this.... everything is all over the place, Think the main issue is how the MC is portrayed. NURF fest to the point its like what's the point even getting power, it's like he took 1 step forward just to get nurfed 20
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Capitulo 35. Actualizaré cuando avance más.👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👏👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
It is not a Fic for those who want something serious, consistent and meaningful. The Fic is from a first-time author just for the purpose of entertaining without overthinking things, and as the author said, it's a bit difficult to read with his English If you want to complain about everything when reading, don't read it
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good novel the personality of our mc is funny the writing is simple and not that bad I only wish for two things first never dropped this novel second can you make him goes to twilight world and makes Alice cullens his love interest
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I would dare say this fanfic is gold except for the mc being way too childish and acting immature at every turn. His actions and op powers makes him an object of fear and headache for the more paranoid people inspite of being a relatable, funny and likable character. To be fair if mc met batman in the dc verse the latter would get a migraine large enough to put him into a coma indefinitely.
it seems like it would be a good quality novel but the writing quality is so bad I just can't continue reading you can tell English isn't their first language and they didn't get a native English speak to edit and make it readable imo
I couldn't make it past the first chapter with how god awful the flow of reading went. I felt like I was reading an elementary school students fantasy story. Grammar is hardly used or just used incorrectly, and the sentences are hard to comprehend due to how unnecessary some of the lines are. I feel like the author was adding more words to a sentence to make it longer. (EX from ch1: My name is Alex Walker. I was a college student who led a normal life, except that I'm an orphan. Who grew up in an orphanage until school and moved to college dorms for college and doing part-time jobs for money. It all worked out well until today) this could have been way simpler as this instead. (EX: My name is Alex Walker, I was a full-time collage student getting by through part-time jobs. I grew up as an orphan, so there was little money to fund my living expenses, so I opted to live in the collage dorms. It all worked out well, until today, that is.)
Everyone else: "You have superpowers?!" Mc: "Yes I have powers but that is not important right now." Everyone else: "ah yes you right"
Grammar needs to be readable could not understand conversation between mc and alice 😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅
I will just say MC is not the MC, he just follows the story and original MC's like a NPC, no character development.
well the book leaves a lot to be desired but one that you can appreciate about the book and the author that at least he isn't dropping. well as for everything else he can improve and build his skills in due time
If I am being honest here it feels like a kid is writing this novel. But for some reason it works for me. Not my fav novel out there but still a good read though
Great fanfic, beginning a little difficult, but after chapter 40+ it gets much better. keep going it's really good! I think it's amazing how good it is to see a protagonist unconcerned about things, making the story without the anti-cliché, which I see in most fanfic, a bad thing is the little interaction between the MC and the girls! But nothing that spoils the story itself.
good novel except it is not readable for the first 60 chapters,but after that it was readable
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Writing Quality is bad. Editing is essential. Overall good story. No bad points.
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No me gusta juzgar tan pronto, pero solo desde el primer capitulo la lectura ya es incomoda. Parece como si me estuviese contando un resumen rápido de los hechos que se supone e están ocurrieron do en tiempo de narración, lo cual quita toda la inmersión y sabor a la historia
How should I say this.... everything is all over the place, Think the main issue is how the MC is portrayed. NURF fest to the point its like what's the point even getting power, it's like he took 1 step forward just to get nurfed 20
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Capitulo 35. Actualizaré cuando avance más.👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👏👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
It is not a Fic for those who want something serious, consistent and meaningful. The Fic is from a first-time author just for the purpose of entertaining without overthinking things, and as the author said, it's a bit difficult to read with his English If you want to complain about everything when reading, don't read it
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good novel the personality of our mc is funny the writing is simple and not that bad I only wish for two things first never dropped this novel second can you make him goes to twilight world and makes Alice cullens his love interest
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I would dare say this fanfic is gold except for the mc being way too childish and acting immature at every turn. His actions and op powers makes him an object of fear and headache for the more paranoid people inspite of being a relatable, funny and likable character. To be fair if mc met batman in the dc verse the latter would get a migraine large enough to put him into a coma indefinitely.
it seems like it would be a good quality novel but the writing quality is so bad I just can't continue reading you can tell English isn't their first language and they didn't get a native English speak to edit and make it readable imo