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It's a gold mine y'all, I'm going to see how much gold (chapters) I can mine (read) before it runs dry (before the story starts to suck) I'll keep you all updated.
This FF is a hidden gem 🔥! Great writing quality, very few grammar mistakes, and amazing story development. The most thing I like about this book is the improvement in terms of writing. There is a huge difference in quality if you compare the first two chapters to the last two ( chapters 39 and 40). The Author is obviously improving his writing skills with each chapter which is really great. You have my respect Author! Keep up the good work sir!
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Very good fic, in my 10 one piece fan fictions atm. Pace of him and his crews strenghting is very good. Though I feel that MC should be on his way to the Red line as the pace of the adventure is very slow, except if the author is trying to make this a very long fanfic, thought I don’t mind due to the good writing and character pacing and dialogue. Very very good!! Keep it up author, I hope you don’t drop.
Good story keep it up...................................................................................................and if you can plz make the mc's character a little change as too much arrogant makes character cheesy and don't forget he was a soldier before don't make him too disrespectful as a character
Some people think that writing on computers is easy. But I know how difficult it is to come up with ideas and turn them into meaningful and interesting content. Never give up, bro!❤️
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Great story it has a huge potential probably one of the best and unique One Piece FF I read so far right now I hope the author will make stable update and not drop this.
,😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅 There is no character development. It had a nice beginning, but the story is falling into oblivion. It lacks plot... It is not a very charismatic mc
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I haven't read it yet but I read the synopsis and I just wanted to clarify Luffy or anyone other than Sabo and the Five Elder Stars know of Imu's existence, once I finish reading it the rating may change
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It’s pretty good I only have a few problems •It seems the crew is going to be only oc’s that the mc creates and that makes it come of as super bland in my opinion because one of the things I love about one piece is the interaction between the characters but with this FF there is very brief interactions between the mc and canon characters and those interactions are all along the lines of (I’m strong and mysterious so you should respect me and my crew also teach one of my crew mates this skill you possess so I essentially have a copy of you without needing you specifically) which I wouldn’t mind if the interactions between him and the oc’s were interesting but it’s not they are all super respectful towards mc and when not the interactions are just super bland or the oc’s competing amongst each other for ”our lord’s praise” or it’s all about the crew being a family but the thing is the oc’s see each as brothers so what does that make the mc? father? And those interactions come off super awkward for me just because it came from no where and is just not needed considering the fact the oc’s couldn’t betray mc even if they wanted so the whole family thing is supposed to be their bond ig but they already have the master/servant bond • a small thing that kinda annoys me about his crew learning from ppl like nami and I assume what is going to happen to robin is that they learn things way to fast • this one is probably only me but why does he constantly speak in a deep voice every time he uses all for one like is that required I just feel it doesn’t need to be mentioned every time I imagine it in my head it just makes this “serious” moment look ridiculous • why is there a harem tag??? The only romance has been a 1 night stand with some random oc and nojiko (probably misspelled that but I mean nami’s sister) and all his crew are male so far • the oc’s are mostly just overlord characters or at least their appearance (not a complaint just felt the need to mention that)
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.... author has absolutely no F idea what he is doing.. the system is so broken that im 99% sure he will drop this within 100 chapters. Author made a completely linear system so broken... mc only needs to beat up 183 level 1 people/pirate/marine... i repest just pure levels 1 and he can reach level 60.... its ridiculous... lets not forget thst this amount is reduced to 36 people if they are between leveld 10-20.... or a mere 18 persons if they are between 20-30.... author definitely had no idea what he was doing. Took a random guess on how level up works, picked something easy and hoped for the best... lets not mention thar by chapter 4... mc has been in one opiece for less than 1 week and he has so manh broken abilitied and his stats are so high that it breaks the whole story.
I am at ch. 19 and Its one of the best one piece stories i have read, story i detailed and i cant stop reading. 😝
yo, imma give this 5 stars just because he has the same name as me Austin hehehahahaha
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In the info of fic it was written what will a person from our world will do in the place of luffy Well guess what he does Same thing as cannon luffy nothing else I don't know why people do this if they want to copy paste cannon
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In term of writing quality, it's better than most. Seem to have a good stability of updates (stopped reading so I don't realy look it up anymore). World background is One Piece but the mc in itself isn't properly developed (come from the small number of chapters currently available). For Story Development and Character Design, it's blanc, only OC in the crew... OC that the MC "create". The MC also seem to be one of the "don't change the main character crew" making the story useless to follow if you want to see how the character from the original book would develope with another setting.
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Ok It is very good start but I have one problem why does he not train and does the skills only evolve by system? I mean I don't think thats a good idea ,I have seen him just dumping points no traoning at all so please do that ,Not lazy MC and Why not develope what he already has except giving new one ? Master The rokushiki or even swordsmanship? MC is Like wannabe Jack of all trades ,I understand I truly do and also he is giving all his minions same powers its not bad but lacks varoety,,Also Can You post power levels about how his stats is compared to others in this world Thank you ,This is my rant but I doesnot mean I hate your story
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Well.... i am not good with review but i really loved idea and story so go on author ^^
Good story! I'm really liking the idea and the story so far with 10 chapters in. The quality of writing is pretty good and the MC seems promising. I just hope he doesn't become stupid at some point, but so far things look good. Overall it's a fantastic start, so keep up the good work, Author-san!
It's a gold mine y'all, I'm going to see how much gold (chapters) I can mine (read) before it runs dry (before the story starts to suck) I'll keep you all updated.
This FF is a hidden gem 🔥! Great writing quality, very few grammar mistakes, and amazing story development. The most thing I like about this book is the improvement in terms of writing. There is a huge difference in quality if you compare the first two chapters to the last two ( chapters 39 and 40). The Author is obviously improving his writing skills with each chapter which is really great. You have my respect Author! Keep up the good work sir!
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Very good fic, in my 10 one piece fan fictions atm. Pace of him and his crews strenghting is very good. Though I feel that MC should be on his way to the Red line as the pace of the adventure is very slow, except if the author is trying to make this a very long fanfic, thought I don’t mind due to the good writing and character pacing and dialogue. Very very good!! Keep it up author, I hope you don’t drop.
Good story keep it up...................................................................................................and if you can plz make the mc's character a little change as too much arrogant makes character cheesy and don't forget he was a soldier before don't make him too disrespectful as a character
Some people think that writing on computers is easy. But I know how difficult it is to come up with ideas and turn them into meaningful and interesting content. Never give up, bro!❤️
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Great story it has a huge potential probably one of the best and unique One Piece FF I read so far right now I hope the author will make stable update and not drop this.
,😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅 There is no character development. It had a nice beginning, but the story is falling into oblivion. It lacks plot... It is not a very charismatic mc
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I haven't read it yet but I read the synopsis and I just wanted to clarify Luffy or anyone other than Sabo and the Five Elder Stars know of Imu's existence, once I finish reading it the rating may change
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It’s pretty good I only have a few problems •It seems the crew is going to be only oc’s that the mc creates and that makes it come of as super bland in my opinion because one of the things I love about one piece is the interaction between the characters but with this FF there is very brief interactions between the mc and canon characters and those interactions are all along the lines of (I’m strong and mysterious so you should respect me and my crew also teach one of my crew mates this skill you possess so I essentially have a copy of you without needing you specifically) which I wouldn’t mind if the interactions between him and the oc’s were interesting but it’s not they are all super respectful towards mc and when not the interactions are just super bland or the oc’s competing amongst each other for ”our lord’s praise” or it’s all about the crew being a family but the thing is the oc’s see each as brothers so what does that make the mc? father? And those interactions come off super awkward for me just because it came from no where and is just not needed considering the fact the oc’s couldn’t betray mc even if they wanted so the whole family thing is supposed to be their bond ig but they already have the master/servant bond • a small thing that kinda annoys me about his crew learning from ppl like nami and I assume what is going to happen to robin is that they learn things way to fast • this one is probably only me but why does he constantly speak in a deep voice every time he uses all for one like is that required I just feel it doesn’t need to be mentioned every time I imagine it in my head it just makes this “serious” moment look ridiculous • why is there a harem tag??? The only romance has been a 1 night stand with some random oc and nojiko (probably misspelled that but I mean nami’s sister) and all his crew are male so far • the oc’s are mostly just overlord characters or at least their appearance (not a complaint just felt the need to mention that)
揭示劇透 .... author has absolutely no F idea what he is doing.. the system is so broken that im 99% sure he will drop this within 100 chapters. Author made a completely linear system so broken... mc only needs to beat up 183 level 1 people/pirate/marine... i repest just pure levels 1 and he can reach level 60.... its ridiculous... lets not forget thst this amount is reduced to 36 people if they are between leveld 10-20.... or a mere 18 persons if they are between 20-30.... author definitely had no idea what he was doing. Took a random guess on how level up works, picked something easy and hoped for the best... lets not mention thar by chapter 4... mc has been in one opiece for less than 1 week and he has so manh broken abilitied and his stats are so high that it breaks the whole story.
I am at ch. 19 and Its one of the best one piece stories i have read, story i detailed and i cant stop reading. 😝
yo, imma give this 5 stars just because he has the same name as me Austin hehehahahaha
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In the info of fic it was written what will a person from our world will do in the place of luffy Well guess what he does Same thing as cannon luffy nothing else I don't know why people do this if they want to copy paste cannon
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In term of writing quality, it's better than most. Seem to have a good stability of updates (stopped reading so I don't realy look it up anymore). World background is One Piece but the mc in itself isn't properly developed (come from the small number of chapters currently available). For Story Development and Character Design, it's blanc, only OC in the crew... OC that the MC "create". The MC also seem to be one of the "don't change the main character crew" making the story useless to follow if you want to see how the character from the original book would develope with another setting.
揭示劇透 Ok It is very good start but I have one problem why does he not train and does the skills only evolve by system? I mean I don't think thats a good idea ,I have seen him just dumping points no traoning at all so please do that ,Not lazy MC and Why not develope what he already has except giving new one ? Master The rokushiki or even swordsmanship? MC is Like wannabe Jack of all trades ,I understand I truly do and also he is giving all his minions same powers its not bad but lacks varoety,,Also Can You post power levels about how his stats is compared to others in this world Thank you ,This is my rant but I doesnot mean I hate your story
Why can't you just train yourself? 🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔__________________________________________________________________________________
Well.... i am not good with review but i really loved idea and story so go on author ^^
Good story! I'm really liking the idea and the story so far with 10 chapters in. The quality of writing is pretty good and the MC seems promising. I just hope he doesn't become stupid at some point, but so far things look good. Overall it's a fantastic start, so keep up the good work, Author-san!