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Definetly one of the best fanfics i have ever read props to the author as well as the pacing and development of the mc I recommend picking this novel up
It was very good in the beginning but in the later chapters it became a very ordinary dxd ff. I don't know if I'll finish the ff as the quality of the story has gone down a lot since the meetings with the Greek gods, especially with the incident in the underworld and the satans. And as far as I understand it, chapters will only be uploaded if they are paid for, which is also a bit problematic as they are fanfics.
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Todo iba bien, hasta que llegó al panteón olímpico y parece como si el autor hubiera cambiado de persona y no se entiende nada de lo que sucede
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Your chapters don’t even rate as paragraphs and they need to actually have some plot advancement. You just posted 3 chapters and they got nowhere
Too lazy to write a proper review, but give it a read - it's a great story and you won't regret it.
the reality about this fic and other works by the author. your stories are good, but if you expect you to start reading and one day you will finish one of your stories forget it, unless you commission all the chapters. author has more than 10 stories in progress and none have concluded, all are on hiatus no commission no stories, I even think it's right for him to charge for his works but at least the author should write original works not fanfic, in the end he charges commission from his character in the stories of others, and not the story itself.
揭示劇透To be honest, compared to your other stories, i really felt that this version of Jake doesn't really make it fun to read. His interaction with the other jake and the situation he was told made him feel like a simp. It would have been fine if certaim actions he did take the interest of girls but he pretty much easily caught the interestn of Rias by appealing to ehat she enjoyed. That is why i really liked Jake from My Upgrades are Invincible. He did actions to become strong which had the effects of women loving him. He created weapons that he could use to get strong which caught the attention and Hephaestus. He didn't do it to gain her affection. Heck, the msre fact that what he immediately did was hide from Freya shows that women wasn't his main priority. As much as i like your stories, a main character like this just doesn't reaply make it enjoyable to read.
It's not bad. The story itself is exactly what you would expect from DXD wish fulfillment so nothing groundbreaking, but the only major issue is how ugly the wiring is. It's not unreadable by any means, in fact, the grammar is one of the better aspects of the story, but the sentence structure is abhorrent. Run on, after run on, after run on with commas acting in place of periods like that somehow makes it a complete sentence. It doesn't. But aside from that it's fine.
I like the kind of powers that the mc has. 100% recommended. there are harems waifus from other animes confirmed. I hope you keep updating it author
Honestly, I love the story. I like how the other takes the time to build a relationship between the mc and his individual harem members and explain why they are attracted to him instead of how some authors just make them magically fall in love. The only complaint is that I wish the author would update more.
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The idea of a fleshcrafter in DXD is nothing new however it holds much potential! Sadly the MC is way too Op already due to the apparent lack of limits on his ability. The moment he touched Rias/Sona/Akeno/Koneko he wouldn't even need to be near them anymore as he would theoretically be strong enough to fend of most opponents and combined with his sacret gear he wouldn't even have to become a devil as he could make himself a dragon and with his ability he can already make every waifu imaginable without causing the suspicion of the powerhouses of that world. He just needs biomass and honestly he doesn't even need humans for that. A way too op protagonist with a broken ability just drains the appeal of most fics and all romantic appeal the story might have had is gobe considering him being able to create new waifus out of nowhere. He has tge same abilities as Kuro but without his yolo attitude and his charm, intelligence and ambition.
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Fried Frog's Legs recipe: Delicious fried frog legs! This simple recipe involves coating frog legs with cracker crumbs and cornmeal, then briefly frying them in oil for a tender and crispy treat. Ingredients: 24 frog legs, skin removed 1 cup all-purpose flour ½ cup cornmeal 1 (4 ounce) packet saltine crackers, crushed 1 tablespoon ground black pepper 2 teaspoons salt 1 teaspoon minced onion 2 eggs ½ cup milk 2 cups vegetable oil for frying 1 cup peanut oil for frying Cooking Instructions: Step 1. Rinse frog legs and pat dry; set aside. Combine flour, cornmeal, saltine cracker crumbs, pepper, salt, and onion in a large resealable bag; shake well to mix. Whisk eggs and milk together in a shallow bowl. Step 2. Heat vegetable oil and peanut oil in a large skillet over medium-high heat. The oil should be about 1/2 inch deep. Step 3. Dip legs into egg mixture in batches, then press into cracker mixture until evenly coated. Place the breaded legs, unstacked, onto a plate. Repeat with remaining legs. Step 4. Lower breaded legs carefully into the hot oil in batches. Fry until golden brown, about 4 to 5 minutes on each side. Transfer to a paper towel-lined plate to drain. Repeat with remaining frog legs. Enjoy fellow frog eater enjoyers.
You need to work a lot on your writing. Your sentences are generally 3-5 times as long as they should be, periods nowhere in sight, and it makes it really problematic to read. I'm not going to comment on the content, but your actual writing ability/skill in general needs a fair bit of training before it's even at a somewhat acceptable level. Right now, I'm constantly pulled out of your story and have to re-read things at times because it's so poorly put together. It's not worth the bother to keep reading. Of course you will be spammed with 4-5 stars because this is Webnovel, but don't believe them: they're starving and would eat literally anything. Both for your future readers' as well as your own sake, go back to the basics and learn how to write legibly before sharing more stories.
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this story is decent but I simply can't take it seriously the main character's name is Jake whenever someone says his name I can only ever think of Jake from State Farm
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Definetly one of the best fanfics i have ever read props to the author as well as the pacing and development of the mc I recommend picking this novel up
It was very good in the beginning but in the later chapters it became a very ordinary dxd ff. I don't know if I'll finish the ff as the quality of the story has gone down a lot since the meetings with the Greek gods, especially with the incident in the underworld and the satans. And as far as I understand it, chapters will only be uploaded if they are paid for, which is also a bit problematic as they are fanfics.
Uma história muito divertida e empolgante, com uma grande vira no mínimo surpreende. Meus parabéns autor [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
Todo iba bien, hasta que llegó al panteón olímpico y parece como si el autor hubiera cambiado de persona y no se entiende nada de lo que sucede
AU [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=fp][img=fp][img=fp]
Your chapters don’t even rate as paragraphs and they need to actually have some plot advancement. You just posted 3 chapters and they got nowhere
Too lazy to write a proper review, but give it a read - it's a great story and you won't regret it.
the reality about this fic and other works by the author. your stories are good, but if you expect you to start reading and one day you will finish one of your stories forget it, unless you commission all the chapters. author has more than 10 stories in progress and none have concluded, all are on hiatus no commission no stories, I even think it's right for him to charge for his works but at least the author should write original works not fanfic, in the end he charges commission from his character in the stories of others, and not the story itself.
揭示劇透To be honest, compared to your other stories, i really felt that this version of Jake doesn't really make it fun to read. His interaction with the other jake and the situation he was told made him feel like a simp. It would have been fine if certaim actions he did take the interest of girls but he pretty much easily caught the interestn of Rias by appealing to ehat she enjoyed. That is why i really liked Jake from My Upgrades are Invincible. He did actions to become strong which had the effects of women loving him. He created weapons that he could use to get strong which caught the attention and Hephaestus. He didn't do it to gain her affection. Heck, the msre fact that what he immediately did was hide from Freya shows that women wasn't his main priority. As much as i like your stories, a main character like this just doesn't reaply make it enjoyable to read.
It's not bad. The story itself is exactly what you would expect from DXD wish fulfillment so nothing groundbreaking, but the only major issue is how ugly the wiring is. It's not unreadable by any means, in fact, the grammar is one of the better aspects of the story, but the sentence structure is abhorrent. Run on, after run on, after run on with commas acting in place of periods like that somehow makes it a complete sentence. It doesn't. But aside from that it's fine.
I like the kind of powers that the mc has. 100% recommended. there are harems waifus from other animes confirmed. I hope you keep updating it author
Honestly, I love the story. I like how the other takes the time to build a relationship between the mc and his individual harem members and explain why they are attracted to him instead of how some authors just make them magically fall in love. The only complaint is that I wish the author would update more.
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The idea of a fleshcrafter in DXD is nothing new however it holds much potential! Sadly the MC is way too Op already due to the apparent lack of limits on his ability. The moment he touched Rias/Sona/Akeno/Koneko he wouldn't even need to be near them anymore as he would theoretically be strong enough to fend of most opponents and combined with his sacret gear he wouldn't even have to become a devil as he could make himself a dragon and with his ability he can already make every waifu imaginable without causing the suspicion of the powerhouses of that world. He just needs biomass and honestly he doesn't even need humans for that. A way too op protagonist with a broken ability just drains the appeal of most fics and all romantic appeal the story might have had is gobe considering him being able to create new waifus out of nowhere. He has tge same abilities as Kuro but without his yolo attitude and his charm, intelligence and ambition.
Mmmmm la historia es buena, es entretenida y aunque no veo errores por qué estoy usando traductor para poder leerlo en español [img=coins][img=exp][img=update][img=recommend]
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Fried Frog's Legs recipe: Delicious fried frog legs! This simple recipe involves coating frog legs with cracker crumbs and cornmeal, then briefly frying them in oil for a tender and crispy treat. Ingredients: 24 frog legs, skin removed 1 cup all-purpose flour ½ cup cornmeal 1 (4 ounce) packet saltine crackers, crushed 1 tablespoon ground black pepper 2 teaspoons salt 1 teaspoon minced onion 2 eggs ½ cup milk 2 cups vegetable oil for frying 1 cup peanut oil for frying Cooking Instructions: Step 1. Rinse frog legs and pat dry; set aside. Combine flour, cornmeal, saltine cracker crumbs, pepper, salt, and onion in a large resealable bag; shake well to mix. Whisk eggs and milk together in a shallow bowl. Step 2. Heat vegetable oil and peanut oil in a large skillet over medium-high heat. The oil should be about 1/2 inch deep. Step 3. Dip legs into egg mixture in batches, then press into cracker mixture until evenly coated. Place the breaded legs, unstacked, onto a plate. Repeat with remaining legs. Step 4. Lower breaded legs carefully into the hot oil in batches. Fry until golden brown, about 4 to 5 minutes on each side. Transfer to a paper towel-lined plate to drain. Repeat with remaining frog legs. Enjoy fellow frog eater enjoyers.
You need to work a lot on your writing. Your sentences are generally 3-5 times as long as they should be, periods nowhere in sight, and it makes it really problematic to read. I'm not going to comment on the content, but your actual writing ability/skill in general needs a fair bit of training before it's even at a somewhat acceptable level. Right now, I'm constantly pulled out of your story and have to re-read things at times because it's so poorly put together. It's not worth the bother to keep reading. Of course you will be spammed with 4-5 stars because this is Webnovel, but don't believe them: they're starving and would eat literally anything. Both for your future readers' as well as your own sake, go back to the basics and learn how to write legibly before sharing more stories.
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this story is decent but I simply can't take it seriously the main character's name is Jake whenever someone says his name I can only ever think of Jake from State Farm