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the story is boring, slow and full of all sorts of ridiculous made up cliche nonsense, just to railroad the plot.
It's good from what I've read so far but there's a lot of spelling errors. To errors when it comes to Sirius's animagus form that is a dog not a Grimm. Also family tree errors Bellatrix, Narcissa, and Andromeda are his cousins not his sisters.
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please dont drop its a really good story (in my opinion) so please dont drop .....................................................
Voy a ser sincero es un asco de fanfic la historia no tiene sentido en muchas maneras da cringe en todos los capítulos no es que sea mala historia es que está mal narrada con muchos pero muchos agujeros en la historia y para cualquiera que diga que no tengo razón y bla bla bla leí hasta el capítulo 25 y aún no se pone buena lamento haber desperdiciado tiempo leer esto y si eres nuevo y quieres una reseña buena la mía no lo es pero algo cuenta aunque no creo que dure mucho ya que algunos autores borran o denuncian reseñas cómo estás para que no les afecte en el futuro y si se que el autor es nuevo y bla bla bla o eso dice pero la verdad es que no nos importa ya que está historia está reescritaaa
FINALLY!!!!!! A FF where Bellatrix gets the D! Bellatrix is Bae, then comes fleur, then luna. But most of all its a good read. props to you author for dicking down Bellatrix. GOD finally. I was tired of all the lovegood and Hermione ships. need more Bellatrix and Fleur.
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Author ruins the story immediately by making hogwarts start at 18. Then he just has sirius do rituals that apparently no one else ever did, just so he could be the male fantasy. “Adonis” appearance super soldier with enhanced “stamina”. Then another to make him only under dumbles and voldy in terms of magical ability. Just lazy writing for a power fantasy harem. The lemons was written well tho.
This is really good!! I love me a Sirius Black fic. It’s a bit fast paced but the angle you took is dope. Also, think about getting the Tonks involved because Ted is a wizard if lawyer in most fanfictions!!
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Overall I found it boring. Sirius method to gaining power was simplistic and cliche, and the logic behind explanations is lacking. The story was bland and everything came to Sirius very easily, so far there was no struggle.
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I love it and I hope this 3ch per week that webnovel shows in right, can't wait for more.
It's a great Harry Potter fanfiction!! 😁👍👍 I like how different Sirius here, and I think the plot will be so much different too.. I don't mind a harem.. But I hope Sirius doesn't have a minor (like Harry whose women in this story, or others whose age is so far different from Sirius) in his harem.. Can't wait to see next chapter.. Keep up the good work author san 😁😁👍👍👍
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so will rise potter have to deal with the dursleys till she's 18 I'm confused based on your synopsis
the story is boring, slow and full of all sorts of ridiculous made up cliche nonsense, just to railroad the plot.
It's good from what I've read so far but there's a lot of spelling errors. To errors when it comes to Sirius's animagus form that is a dog not a Grimm. Also family tree errors Bellatrix, Narcissa, and Andromeda are his cousins not his sisters.
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Keep up the good work brother!!!👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍☕️👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍🙏👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
please dont drop its a really good story (in my opinion) so please dont drop .....................................................
Voy a ser sincero es un asco de fanfic la historia no tiene sentido en muchas maneras da cringe en todos los capítulos no es que sea mala historia es que está mal narrada con muchos pero muchos agujeros en la historia y para cualquiera que diga que no tengo razón y bla bla bla leí hasta el capítulo 25 y aún no se pone buena lamento haber desperdiciado tiempo leer esto y si eres nuevo y quieres una reseña buena la mía no lo es pero algo cuenta aunque no creo que dure mucho ya que algunos autores borran o denuncian reseñas cómo estás para que no les afecte en el futuro y si se que el autor es nuevo y bla bla bla o eso dice pero la verdad es que no nos importa ya que está historia está reescritaaa
FINALLY!!!!!! A FF where Bellatrix gets the D! Bellatrix is Bae, then comes fleur, then luna. But most of all its a good read. props to you author for dicking down Bellatrix. GOD finally. I was tired of all the lovegood and Hermione ships. need more Bellatrix and Fleur.
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Author ruins the story immediately by making hogwarts start at 18. Then he just has sirius do rituals that apparently no one else ever did, just so he could be the male fantasy. “Adonis” appearance super soldier with enhanced “stamina”. Then another to make him only under dumbles and voldy in terms of magical ability. Just lazy writing for a power fantasy harem. The lemons was written well tho.
This is really good!! I love me a Sirius Black fic. It’s a bit fast paced but the angle you took is dope. Also, think about getting the Tonks involved because Ted is a wizard if lawyer in most fanfictions!!
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Overall I found it boring. Sirius method to gaining power was simplistic and cliche, and the logic behind explanations is lacking. The story was bland and everything came to Sirius very easily, so far there was no struggle.
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I love it and I hope this 3ch per week that webnovel shows in right, can't wait for more.
It's a great Harry Potter fanfiction!! 😁👍👍 I like how different Sirius here, and I think the plot will be so much different too.. I don't mind a harem.. But I hope Sirius doesn't have a minor (like Harry whose women in this story, or others whose age is so far different from Sirius) in his harem.. Can't wait to see next chapter.. Keep up the good work author san 😁😁👍👍👍
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so will rise potter have to deal with the dursleys till she's 18 I'm confused based on your synopsis
Uhm his rise to power is cliche but it was good writing??