HP: MAGICAL LIFE

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Raul_Romero

There are a few things that seem a little out of tune to me, why do you have to make others threaten him to say things, even if it's joking, why make the mc so beta? If you don't want to say something, don't say it, honestly friendships delay more than they enrich, for example, almost 100% sure that you will nerf the mc on certain occasions to show "the importance of others" when fighting or solving a problem , just look how you mention the "talents" of others, I understand that you want to give him a strong partner in his adventure to accompany him, but let's be honest, nobody reaches the level of someone reincarnated and motivated knowing what is coming, it is not It is necessary that they accompany you in strength, there is more than power in life, you just have to be there and now. I'm bothering to write this because I feel that it has a lot of potential, I don't want it to be ruined by signs of "low self-esteem" or giving away knowledge of power to others, my friend, individuality exists. As for the couple, Fleur is honestly my favourite, her character faces many facets of individuality, pride, loneliness, excessive affection due to that, support and going to the end, I hope you portray her well, not like a teenager blushed by others or shy, it's okay for her partner, because normally only your partner shows your "weak" sides. That being said, I like your fic, I would like to help you review logic and reasoning, for free of course.

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Thehighest_throne2

an average story for HP fic, nothing special and unique here, it's pretty bland in my own opinion. maybe a little spoiler so that those who read this comment can understand. 1, the story begins on Mc his seventh year at Hogwarts. 2, Slytherin's house But his attitude does not reflect it. 3, he's Dumbledore's dog. 4, I think he lacks creativity (I mean he has been in the wizarding world for a long time and is still following Dumbledore). 5, mc hero (Helping the golden trio). And most of the five stars above are spam, you should be careful if the author deletes my comment

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hero4hire

same person is spamming 5 stars, author have a little shame

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hero4hire

i dont like it.

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Max_Dreamscape

Quite an unexpected but fresh beginning by the author. There is a lot of potential considering it begins at the turning point of the series. Looking forward to more updates.

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Gilgamos

It was pretty good until the end of chapter 25 and throughout chapter 26 Hermione is now the half blood daughter of regulus black

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Jonathan_Lam_2034

NTHputaox17 is spamming 5 stars...........

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Bob_Uchiha_XD

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Gaming_shadows

how can people read this i mean it starts off half way through the story giving you info about him without showing you how he gets there at all, it also doesn't even give any background about him or his friends/family, if you want to read a story that builds the character from the start dont read this as it just throws you into it halfway through

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LGK_maore

you have my full support for thd amazing writtings reaaly appreciate what you do🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥 me:big fan if harry potter ff🙋‍♂️🙋‍♂️🙋‍♂️❤❤

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Darkiling

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Jai_pareek

this is one of the good ff with a lot of twist and story development is pretty good as well.I'd say don't read other reviews and read the story then form your own opinion.the romance part is well written is well.

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Rizki_Caturianto

It's a great Harry Potter fanfiction!! I like the story about MC which muggleborn orphan in Slytherin and he show them who's the boss (not been bullied by the others pureblood bigot in Slytherin house).. I also like about many Pov you use.. 😁👍👍 I don't mind he's pairing with whoever.. But I think same with you that Fleur and Tonks deserve better (not that Remus and Bill is bad, they great, but they deserve better)... Can't wait to see next chapter.. Keep up the good job author san 😁😁👍

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TinyBookDragon

All the spam reviews had me worried but this is great. The writing quality is top notch and the start is a refreshing change of pace from most fanfics so that's a huge plus. Definitely recommend giving this a try.

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Jaghatai_Kahn

an absolute gem of a read, and the only thing I don't like is the way the last chapter tried to end.other than that, it's a must-read for H.P. fans.

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Humbuub

The thing I like the most about this fic is the world changes. However the writing and storytelling is all over the place. Author uses 2 timeline narrative, but badly executed since the difference is just a few minutes. Either it was that, or author is just bad at linear narrative since most of the time some characters are on two different scenarios. I also can't root the MC since we never really got the chance to get to know them.

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Jetboy76

This novel is great love the story and the changes on the Harry Potter universe. I’m just wondering about the MC’s love life it seems like he is going for the one women rout but there are many women around him that seem interested?

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epao

Me encantó tu fic ,el personaje la historia y la pareja ya que me gusta el personaje de fleur, como se inspira en la magia de grindelwald porque seamos honesto era el puto amo y tenía estilo elegancias todo,

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Reader117

Love your Unique writing style and creating Divergence in the plot.Not many writers give attention to the consequences of their character's actions

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Mrjedi

Read a lot of Harry Potter fanfictions and this is probably top 5 for me.