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It's a good read, although there were many POV confusions and gender mistakes the story was well written.I especially liked your divergence from canon and not creating a tag along story character
feel so rushed, lame and boring tho at first 10 chapters it's quite interesting but as you progress reading it became so boring, so many pov of other characters to the point where I even doubt wether the MC is still the MC. It has grammar and errors but it's readable I'm not that perfectionist about Grammar and such, it's just the context, the scenario, the events on the story is plain and boring.
Haven't read the story yet, but a request to the author After writing the main synopsis, kindly write some info about the mc, what's the name, which village will he get reincarnated into, the clan (if any), etc so that we can think whether we want to read it or not coz some settings are too much of a deal-breaker for me to read fan-fics
what a waste of time , it was dropped out of nowhere , giving us a massive skip to show the ending of the story Author gave up on the story
It has a refreshing take on the Shinobi world and the MC's personality. The constant change of the POV is intriguing, and interesting twists arise. Even though it is fast-paced from Chunin exams, the logical probability of the events is high. The author can add the jutsu development as a side story as some jutsus are harder to visualize, like the wind jutsus after the Chunin exam.
Read up to chapyer 32 here is my review. Characters: pretty good, oter than some aspects such as romance which is extremely rushed and awkward at times Writing: of good quality (grammatically) but personally I dislike the style. This is barely a story about the MC, this is just a story of the naruto world imo, as of the past few chapters it’s just been random POV’s if naruto, Jiraya and even Sakura and tenten… We barelt know what the MC’s personality even is! We know nothing about him other than he is kind, smart and a good cook Story: pretty much stuck to canon other than some characters are powered up
I really like this story you should give me the newest chapter................................................................................................................................
A great Naruto fanfiction!! I like it!! 👍👍 I like Shinso character.. He cautious, but will do everything for his loved one.. I also like that he's good at sealing (maybe you should show more of his sealing expertise in battle not just lightning).. He's development is good.. Story is good.. Romance also good.. But author san make this story too fast (maybe a bit more training his jutsu and sealing. More interaction with his friends and matron at orphanage. More romantic scene with Karin. Etc) It's become so different with canon story now, but I don't mind it.. Can't wait to see next chapter though.. Keep up the good work author san 😁😁😍😍👍👍
Great story! Good MC, characters development, and powers. Story deviates from Canon.
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It was a good read initially but it felt rushed after the first 30 chapters. Plot was all over the place and a lot was happening that it was difficult to follow .The romance also felt rushed and i can't get behind the idea of a reincarnated person dating a child.
The story is neither better nor worse than others. And everything is as usual for everyone, like a good character, everything is going at a normal rate of development and then bam. Romance and most importantly made her forced. And the choice is disgusting and banal. The plot is very mediocre like most. I recommend it to those who like romance with the character Karin.
the only fanfic where the characters have life and do relevant actions for the unfolding of the story. the original characters are not just useless pieces of paper, they have an active participation in the plot with significant and consistent changes as the story unfolds good work
Like 60-70% of the chapters are from other people POV’s so i quit after 14 chapters. Its annoying to constantly read about What others think, feel etc. When well done and sprinkled throughout the story others POV’s can be a welcome break from the MC and expand on the world around hIm/her . However, this story doesnt do it that well
I like it. The MC has good mentality and his signature Jistu is so strong. Honestly, the grammar needs to be reviewed and there is even a whole chapter with paragraph grouping issues. But... it's a good fanfic
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It is difficult for me to read a story where children fall in love, especially when one of those alleged children is a reincarnated person with memories and values from their previous world. Your fiction has pedophilia vibes if I'm being honest, which is partly why I dropped it. PS: It was good until karin appeared and I must admit that your writing in the first chapters was interesting.
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A refreshing take on naruto after constant op characters. Looking forward to the story.
A gem im happy to have come across. I love the path the MC is on. Im fine with his origin. I love his powers. And I appreciate the authors daring and choice deviate from the plot and plan ahead to cover any plot holes made by the deviation. Shows great creativity and commitment to the story. Honestly there isn't anything I've disliked so far. actually love it. as long as there aren't any great twists where he suddenly changes of allegiances, ill definitely become a pat reon member. Many authors who can't deviate from plot usually throw in surprise plot twists that ruin so much. im looking forward to more. Keep it up!
Its good......................................................................................................................................
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This is obligatory author review. FRhis is going to be a cool story with a lot of focus on conpletion. Have first half planned up so read on.
It's a good read, although there were many POV confusions and gender mistakes the story was well written.I especially liked your divergence from canon and not creating a tag along story character
feel so rushed, lame and boring tho at first 10 chapters it's quite interesting but as you progress reading it became so boring, so many pov of other characters to the point where I even doubt wether the MC is still the MC. It has grammar and errors but it's readable I'm not that perfectionist about Grammar and such, it's just the context, the scenario, the events on the story is plain and boring.
Haven't read the story yet, but a request to the author After writing the main synopsis, kindly write some info about the mc, what's the name, which village will he get reincarnated into, the clan (if any), etc so that we can think whether we want to read it or not coz some settings are too much of a deal-breaker for me to read fan-fics
what a waste of time , it was dropped out of nowhere , giving us a massive skip to show the ending of the story Author gave up on the story
It has a refreshing take on the Shinobi world and the MC's personality. The constant change of the POV is intriguing, and interesting twists arise. Even though it is fast-paced from Chunin exams, the logical probability of the events is high. The author can add the jutsu development as a side story as some jutsus are harder to visualize, like the wind jutsus after the Chunin exam.
Read up to chapyer 32 here is my review. Characters: pretty good, oter than some aspects such as romance which is extremely rushed and awkward at times Writing: of good quality (grammatically) but personally I dislike the style. This is barely a story about the MC, this is just a story of the naruto world imo, as of the past few chapters it’s just been random POV’s if naruto, Jiraya and even Sakura and tenten… We barelt know what the MC’s personality even is! We know nothing about him other than he is kind, smart and a good cook Story: pretty much stuck to canon other than some characters are powered up
I really like this story you should give me the newest chapter................................................................................................................................
A great Naruto fanfiction!! I like it!! 👍👍 I like Shinso character.. He cautious, but will do everything for his loved one.. I also like that he's good at sealing (maybe you should show more of his sealing expertise in battle not just lightning).. He's development is good.. Story is good.. Romance also good.. But author san make this story too fast (maybe a bit more training his jutsu and sealing. More interaction with his friends and matron at orphanage. More romantic scene with Karin. Etc) It's become so different with canon story now, but I don't mind it.. Can't wait to see next chapter though.. Keep up the good work author san 😁😁😍😍👍👍
Great story! Good MC, characters development, and powers. Story deviates from Canon.
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It was a good read initially but it felt rushed after the first 30 chapters. Plot was all over the place and a lot was happening that it was difficult to follow .The romance also felt rushed and i can't get behind the idea of a reincarnated person dating a child.
The story is neither better nor worse than others. And everything is as usual for everyone, like a good character, everything is going at a normal rate of development and then bam. Romance and most importantly made her forced. And the choice is disgusting and banal. The plot is very mediocre like most. I recommend it to those who like romance with the character Karin.
the only fanfic where the characters have life and do relevant actions for the unfolding of the story. the original characters are not just useless pieces of paper, they have an active participation in the plot with significant and consistent changes as the story unfolds good work
Like 60-70% of the chapters are from other people POV’s so i quit after 14 chapters. Its annoying to constantly read about What others think, feel etc. When well done and sprinkled throughout the story others POV’s can be a welcome break from the MC and expand on the world around hIm/her . However, this story doesnt do it that well
I like it. The MC has good mentality and his signature Jistu is so strong. Honestly, the grammar needs to be reviewed and there is even a whole chapter with paragraph grouping issues. But... it's a good fanfic
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It is difficult for me to read a story where children fall in love, especially when one of those alleged children is a reincarnated person with memories and values from their previous world. Your fiction has pedophilia vibes if I'm being honest, which is partly why I dropped it. PS: It was good until karin appeared and I must admit that your writing in the first chapters was interesting.
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A refreshing take on naruto after constant op characters. Looking forward to the story.
A gem im happy to have come across. I love the path the MC is on. Im fine with his origin. I love his powers. And I appreciate the authors daring and choice deviate from the plot and plan ahead to cover any plot holes made by the deviation. Shows great creativity and commitment to the story. Honestly there isn't anything I've disliked so far. actually love it. as long as there aren't any great twists where he suddenly changes of allegiances, ill definitely become a pat reon member. Many authors who can't deviate from plot usually throw in surprise plot twists that ruin so much. im looking forward to more. Keep it up!
Its good......................................................................................................................................
moreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeemoreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeemoreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
This is obligatory author review. FRhis is going to be a cool story with a lot of focus on conpletion. Have first half planned up so read on.
I forget what I read and want to write here. But The author is missing (-★).