洗手间

LV 15

Jeri_

Okay, so your first chapter was a bit confusing… Things seemed to be rushed and some parts were really blank. Don’t rush your story, it’s okay to take your time slowly sometimes. I understand that English is not your first language and sometimes it can be hard to expound sentences and phrases, however I would advise you to take that into consideration, reread your own chapters and you will know what I mean. Talking about the plot, it’s still hard to understand Mc’s pov sometimes, he looks challenging at first, but then he gives up too easily… Having a twin sister and being compared to her can be harsh, I understand, but I’m still hoping for some character development to happen. It might trigger some English readers when it comes to grammar, but the story itself isn’t bad. It’s readable and a little bit more investment into your work would lead you to some bigger accomplishments. I liked Nora, she looked relatable and made you remember that all humans have feelings. Some parts were perfectly designed and some were too rushed, but I still think that people shouldn’t sleep on this story. I’m following. 👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻

LV 15

_Tea_Lover_

Good novel, but it very badly needs an editor.

LV 1

QahnaarinQ

I am really enjoying your world Author. As a writer myself I understand how hard juggling everything can be, so please know I am coming from a good place when I say that there's a lot to be improved on, however, the stage is set and I cannot wait until the crescendo. I just know I'll improve my rating as you Improve. Keep pushing past your limits!

LV 4

ShatteredMusic

This is a good read and also comes with a bonus of a non idiotic mc. The ability of his also comes with a flaws. Hope this keeps updating, if it does ill keep reading