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katekyo hitman reborn was one of my favorite anime and I'm happy to see that there's a fanfic of it. it's kinda cool thinking about reborn characters fighting against one piece characters
biggest cons are MC is a herbivore basically he would let enemies go and is a saint (we only protect is his Moto) one guardian even betray the family because of this. MC is weaker then his subordinates. he won't kill enemies like juzo and Marco even though they are at war and they would definitely kill him in this war 100+ of his people died and he let them retreat.
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I've read a Chinese fanfic about this kind vongola the question is fanfiction updated with the main series like Kaido and Luffy being nika?
typical Chinese story, i.e. a slave to the system who aspires to become the strongest due to his trust issues and delusions of persecution, he has a group of slaves following him who are as flat as possible, the rewriting helps to swallow . this story but it does not eliminate the rest of the problems
Si pudieran sacar muchos más capitulos este fanfic está muy bueno y es el único lugar donde se puede leer sin errores ..................................,
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I just came to ask what is the problem that Chinesse authors have with Oden, why do they always make him dirty and kill him in a bad way without even trying to save the guy?
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The translation is readable. Story Development was meh, typical One Piece ff, fight the same enemies as Luffy and barely add anything new to the story. The MC is likeable, but most characters just exist to fight. Updates were fast enough. The World Background is quite skewed, Undying Flame should be a power system weaker than Haki since it's not the origin force of the One Piece world. But Author kinda equate it to somewhat like mixed Armament and Conqueror's Haki.
if you can't wait and want to read ahead go to Paetrion but if your poor like me then go to mtl nation and search up "Vongola in Grand Line"
the author made a mistake using the original chinese cover. gives the impression of a lazy translation. but this novel was translated pretty well all things considered.
i love the beginnings, it was interesting seeing the vongola primo establish the vongola famiglia. it gets a bit monotone towards the newest chapter since the tone and focus of the conflict never changes that much, but it's still fine though. also, I feel like the development of the famiglia feels a bit too fast for me. it's like the the mc keep getting more enemy and never settle down interacting with other characters to build chemistry. Kinda a bit hollow I guess. the mc's background is confusing as well, he just suddenly in one piece in primo's body and not even one of his guardians found it weird to be there. there's just many plot hole. although it doesn't mean this is bad or anything, I hope there's more revelation or something to plug the plot hole. this is just my opinion. overall I like it, but improvement is possible.
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An enjoyable read. The fanfic follows Giotto adventure in One Piece world. He has a system that allows him to summon members of the Vongola family (so far, arcobaleno, varia, primo guardians, staff working for vongola) Now, this is interesting but it kinda breaks the immersion when the vongola guardians arrive in the world at their peak and have the power to fight against the strongest pirates in the world with just their dying flame. Would have been much more interesting if instead of skipping directly to the strongest forces of Vongola, he got instead Tsunayoshi and his guardians when they just received their ring. Training them with reborn, going on missions on the sea, making allies and enemies, fighting for influence... Right now there's no plot and honestly, the Vongola family is too op.
Muito bom, a única fan-fic de KHR até agora que eu vejo que é TOP. Por favor continue com o ótimo trabalho.,................. ........ ........... .........
The story is very interesting and easy to read, I look forward to each chapter. Author, keep up the good work![img=coins][img=recommend][img=coins]
If You love one piece and you didn't read this fanfic, Then I have bad news for Ya Pal .... You are what I call UD. What's UD? Let me explain it to you, you know what dust means Righ? What is the use of Dust? Its use is simple really, it only indicates that something is dirty and you need to clean it. Now, how about the dust that you don't see? That's useless dust as it failed its only job. And that's UD, useless dust. And that you if you didn't read this fanfic.
Great great great. Will Daemon Spade appear? Will he become loyal to Vongola Family or no? What family's going to appear next as a fulfilment of the reward? Love it so far. The only weird thing is the way Giotto seems surprise/amazed when visiting Skypia/Mermaid Island. He already went there with Roger Pirates no?
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I never thought to see these two animes share a fanfic... but I suppose that everything is possible in the multiverse... I totally recommend it to read. [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
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In this fanfic dying will flame can be easily explained as someone with lunarian bloodline ... !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
It's good and quite in character, quite believable as well as the seas are enormous, having some hidden powerhouse are nothing of note.
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katekyo hitman reborn was one of my favorite anime and I'm happy to see that there's a fanfic of it. it's kinda cool thinking about reborn characters fighting against one piece characters
biggest cons are MC is a herbivore basically he would let enemies go and is a saint (we only protect is his Moto) one guardian even betray the family because of this. MC is weaker then his subordinates. he won't kill enemies like juzo and Marco even though they are at war and they would definitely kill him in this war 100+ of his people died and he let them retreat.
揭示劇透 I've read a Chinese fanfic about this kind vongola the question is fanfiction updated with the main series like Kaido and Luffy being nika?
typical Chinese story, i.e. a slave to the system who aspires to become the strongest due to his trust issues and delusions of persecution, he has a group of slaves following him who are as flat as possible, the rewriting helps to swallow . this story but it does not eliminate the rest of the problems
Si pudieran sacar muchos más capitulos este fanfic está muy bueno y es el único lugar donde se puede leer sin errores ..................................,
揭示劇透 I just came to ask what is the problem that Chinesse authors have with Oden, why do they always make him dirty and kill him in a bad way without even trying to save the guy?
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The translation is readable. Story Development was meh, typical One Piece ff, fight the same enemies as Luffy and barely add anything new to the story. The MC is likeable, but most characters just exist to fight. Updates were fast enough. The World Background is quite skewed, Undying Flame should be a power system weaker than Haki since it's not the origin force of the One Piece world. But Author kinda equate it to somewhat like mixed Armament and Conqueror's Haki.
if you can't wait and want to read ahead go to Paetrion but if your poor like me then go to mtl nation and search up "Vongola in Grand Line"
the author made a mistake using the original chinese cover. gives the impression of a lazy translation. but this novel was translated pretty well all things considered.
i love the beginnings, it was interesting seeing the vongola primo establish the vongola famiglia. it gets a bit monotone towards the newest chapter since the tone and focus of the conflict never changes that much, but it's still fine though. also, I feel like the development of the famiglia feels a bit too fast for me. it's like the the mc keep getting more enemy and never settle down interacting with other characters to build chemistry. Kinda a bit hollow I guess. the mc's background is confusing as well, he just suddenly in one piece in primo's body and not even one of his guardians found it weird to be there. there's just many plot hole. although it doesn't mean this is bad or anything, I hope there's more revelation or something to plug the plot hole. this is just my opinion. overall I like it, but improvement is possible.
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An enjoyable read. The fanfic follows Giotto adventure in One Piece world. He has a system that allows him to summon members of the Vongola family (so far, arcobaleno, varia, primo guardians, staff working for vongola) Now, this is interesting but it kinda breaks the immersion when the vongola guardians arrive in the world at their peak and have the power to fight against the strongest pirates in the world with just their dying flame. Would have been much more interesting if instead of skipping directly to the strongest forces of Vongola, he got instead Tsunayoshi and his guardians when they just received their ring. Training them with reborn, going on missions on the sea, making allies and enemies, fighting for influence... Right now there's no plot and honestly, the Vongola family is too op.
Muito bom, a única fan-fic de KHR até agora que eu vejo que é TOP. Por favor continue com o ótimo trabalho.,................. ........ ........... .........
The story is very interesting and easy to read, I look forward to each chapter. Author, keep up the good work![img=coins][img=recommend][img=coins]
If You love one piece and you didn't read this fanfic, Then I have bad news for Ya Pal .... You are what I call UD. What's UD? Let me explain it to you, you know what dust means Righ? What is the use of Dust? Its use is simple really, it only indicates that something is dirty and you need to clean it. Now, how about the dust that you don't see? That's useless dust as it failed its only job. And that's UD, useless dust. And that you if you didn't read this fanfic.
Great great great. Will Daemon Spade appear? Will he become loyal to Vongola Family or no? What family's going to appear next as a fulfilment of the reward? Love it so far. The only weird thing is the way Giotto seems surprise/amazed when visiting Skypia/Mermaid Island. He already went there with Roger Pirates no?
揭示劇透 I really like it please don't drop it 😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
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I never thought to see these two animes share a fanfic... but I suppose that everything is possible in the multiverse... I totally recommend it to read. [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
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In this fanfic dying will flame can be easily explained as someone with lunarian bloodline ... !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
It's good and quite in character, quite believable as well as the seas are enormous, having some hidden powerhouse are nothing of note.
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