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Quite a remarkable and compelling book, interesting to the fullest, and more. Enjoy every scene involved, and the MCs. Well done Author, Good Luck.
Honest review after reading 50+ chaps. No words, its already becoming one of my favorite series. The grammar is on point, and the way the author writes is unique and easy to understand. The characters… I love them all especially Ren and Sean, they’re my top 1-s rn. As for fight scenes... SIMPLE PERFECTION, what the heck bro, are you fighting with monsters daily yourself?! And also… honestly, again, you’re good at writing, its been like 3-4 times that i teared up while reading it… And for the end… I truly wish to see Elias reach the end of the dungeon…
For me... the fact that I simply enjoyed the story without having triggers about grammar had me in a state of shock. Just gonna say, it's that good. The pace is just right. Characters got some depth to them. Story progression is quite smooth~ nothing but praises from me! Mad respect to you Author!!
I really felt sorry for Elias. The story is well written. I loved the interactions of the characters. It was fun reading this. Keep up the good work.
great book and an honest review. looking forward to more chapters and do love the characters, it is so fun to read. honestly feel the author is doing a great job.
Very nice intro to the story! Also the plot twist!?? Fantastic! Would like it more if there's less telling and more showing though (I know old saying but really important!) Goodluck to the author and I'll be looking forward to new adventures with them especially Elias Ayla and Serendipity (love her name so much) !! ><
The description towards the story is so refreshing to read, It feels so calm to imagine the protagonist's thoughts and movements like I can see it as an anime. I do hope you can get more chapters, so with that said I'll be binging some more chapters byeeeeeeeeeee.
This takes an all-rounder five's, I have read the prologue which seems to tell us a little of what to expect for the future. The story, right now even tho the mc just came to another world, and is getting used to being here, is interesting. The interactions with Sean Seren and Luke are really funny too. So i also give the story 2 power stones, and i think i will keep giving it. I am definitely excited for the future of Nexus and Earth, and the synopsis i wonder how we'll reach to those certain points?
I just love everything about this book, though I just started reading it. I love the way the author describes the characters and the expression of every person. just the title alone has already taken my attention. I really can't wait for the next chap
The Story line is pretty good and I like the characters I find that the story is going a great direction, I am really excited to read more chapters , good luck
As far as i read it is good still have to read it , the story is great , the writing is great and im expecting is going to be better and better after some chapters.
I like the book, I like how you describe everything , it's amazing how you put everything together, I also love the setting , it's wonderful
I just started reading this novel... and already in love with it!!! Although theres only 5 chapters (including the prologue) the story is really nice so far! Thanks author!
Gave a whole 5 star review since the synopsis was promising, not revealing the whole story but I at least knew what to expect. The switch in POV's was interesting, so the book was intriguing after each chapter. There are only 4 chapters but they're totally worth a read! Good luck for the competition author 🤗
The book seems really well written with several possibilities as to where it could go. The characters seem interesting each with there own backstory. I would actually enjoy a history chapter
Having read the original work it crazy too see how much better the author is, and it's the same story. it's almost like I'm reading a brand new novel. I wish I could give it my power stone!
I like how the story gets into action within the first chapters which makes me want to read more and more of it As a newbie reader of these genres i’ll give this storyline 5stars Can’t wait to read and discover more of Elias’ journey
I can't wait to start reading tgis novel, it seems very promising just from the prologue. I can't wait to see how his journey will be to reach transcendant stage!
So, 4 stars across the board. 1. Writing Quality: The writing quality is okay. The author kinda switches weirdly between POV's sometimes, and even in the middle of some sentences. Other than that, the writing quality is good. 2. Stability of Updates: 4 stars because it is a new novel, so I can't really rate this right now. 3. Story Development: Again, it's a new novel, but from what I am seeing right now, the novel's pace is pretty good, but generic, basically the same as an isekai. Also, Author info dumps a little in the first chapter, I would recommend that you use the first chapter to hook the reader before info dumping in the second or third chapters, just to keep the newer readers from dropping. 4. Character Design: Character is good so far, again, generic revenge driven MC, but he's good and believable, which is better than most novels on the platform. 5. World Background: I have yet to see that much of the world yet, and from the power system shown in the first chapter, it's pretty unique, but there are some generic things, another 4 stars. Overall, pretty good novel so far.
Okay, as the author myself, I’ll add a whole thick big 5 stars here and also explain to you all that the story, in the beginning stages-mostly up to chapter 10, will look a little like slice-of-life, though magic training and stuff like that will also be shown, so I don't particularly think it will be boring, instead, there will be development for the mc and the side cast, the true plot will not begin late, so don't give up in the story. I just have too much planned about it, that it will have to be a little more slow-paced, in order for things to add up to each other, so the occurrences make sense. Also, reviews and power stones help a lot since I’m tryna reach a high point this WSA competition, I’ve been preparing for it since last year’s WSA after all--Well then, Enjoy!!
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I like all the system novel it really makes me excited what might happen next. Your novel is one of the best that i read even though there are only few chapters. You have full support
Woah .... I had just been through the synopsis which was so appealing I decided to add your book to my library. The story seems very promising and I can't wait to read ahead . 😃
I like how the author explain the detail while telling the story flow of MC. They said that a good introduction builds good and exciting story line. It's new for me to read. I'm sure that I will stay tone about this unique story line.
Seemed pretty good, the world building aspect of the story is done pretty well, and overall seems like a pretty interesting novel, can tell the author put some thought into it.
This looks like a promising chapter, the prologue had some useful explanations to tell us how OP the mc has potential to be, and the first chapter was released just minutes later, three other characters were also introduced in chapter 1, how they looked was also explained and quite some world building was shown for Nexus, so the only guess is that Elias is the MC of a novel, right? I definitely want to see where this story goes from now on. I want to give a Power stone but I don't see the button, will definitely do so when it appears!!!!
This work is still budding, yet I was already enchanted by it. The starting lines, complemented by the beautiful and neat writing, made this novel worthy of praise. I'm looking forward to the continuation.
sample:Chapter One: AwakeningThe night sky above the city of Neo-Tech was aglow with the neon lights of holographic billboards, casting a surreal, ever-shifting rainbow of colors onto the bustling streets below. It was a world where technology had reached the pinnacle of human imagination, and yet, beneath the surface, secrets waited to be uncovered.In a dimly lit alleyway, a figure leaned against a wall, their breaths heavy as they tried to catch their composure. This was Alex Mercer, a young man in his mid-twenties with jet-black hair and piercing blue eyes. His lean frame and rugged appearance hid a past filled with struggles, loss, and a relentless drive for self-improvement.Alex had always been different, an outcast in a society where everyone sought to embrace technology to enhance their lives. He preferred the old ways, the ways of martial arts, discipline, and cultivation. It was a path that his family had followed for generations, one that had been passed down from father to son.As he leaned there, panting, a soft glow emanated from his wrist. He glanced down to find a holographic display materializing above his skin, a translucent interface filled with information."[System: Qi Convergence System activated. Greetings, Host. Your journey begins now.]"Alex blinked, his heart pounding. This was it—the mysterious artifact he had stumbled upon in an ancient temple, a relic from a time long forgotten. It had fused with him, becoming a part of his very being."[Quest: Meditate to unlock your Qi channels. Reward: 10 Qi Points.]"The system's voice echoed in his mind, and he hesitated for a moment before nodding. He found a secluded spot in the alley, crossed his legs, and closed his eyes. As he delved into meditation, he felt a surge of energy coursing through his body, as if unlocking hidden potential.Time passed in a blur, but when he opened his eyes, he knew something had changed. His body felt lighter, his senses sharper. He flexed his fingers and could sense a newfound power within them."[Quest Complete. Rewarding 10 Qi Points.]"The system's voice rang out again, and Alex's excitement grew. It was as if a door to a world of endless possibilities had been opened to him.As he continued his journey through the city, Alex couldn't help but overhear snippets of conversation from the people around him. They spoke of the Grand Tournament, a competition where individuals with extraordinary abilities showcased their talents and competed for fame and fortune. It was the perfect opportunity for Alex to test his newfound powers and prove himself.But he knew he had to keep the system a secret. It was his advantage, his edge in a world that had forsaken the old ways. He couldn't risk anyone discovering the truth.Days turned into weeks as Alex honed his skills, mastering the art of Qi manipulation. The system provided him with quests, each one pushing him to his limits. He endured grueling training sessions, faced deadly challenges, and emerged stronger each time.One evening, as he stood on the rooftop of a skyscraper, gazing out at the city below, the system's voice interrupted his thoughts."[Quest: Infiltrate the TechCorp Research Facility. Retrieve classified data. Reward: ???]"Alex's curiosity was piqued. What could be so valuable that the system couldn't even reveal the reward? He knew it was a dangerous mission, but the prospect of uncovering hidden truths and gaining more power was too tempting to resist.With a determined glint in his eyes, he nodded. "I accept."And so, the stage was set for Alex Mercer's journey into a world of technology, cultivation, and secrets. Little did he know that his actions would set in motion a series of events that would shake the very foundations of Neo-Tech and lead him to confront the enigmatic forces that lurked in the shadows.As the city's neon lights continued to dance in the night, Alex took his first step towards a destiny that would change everything.[End of Chapter One]
Quite a remarkable and compelling book, interesting to the fullest, and more. Enjoy every scene involved, and the MCs. Well done Author, Good Luck.
Honest review after reading 50+ chaps. No words, its already becoming one of my favorite series. The grammar is on point, and the way the author writes is unique and easy to understand. The characters… I love them all especially Ren and Sean, they’re my top 1-s rn. As for fight scenes... SIMPLE PERFECTION, what the heck bro, are you fighting with monsters daily yourself?! And also… honestly, again, you’re good at writing, its been like 3-4 times that i teared up while reading it… And for the end… I truly wish to see Elias reach the end of the dungeon…
For me... the fact that I simply enjoyed the story without having triggers about grammar had me in a state of shock. Just gonna say, it's that good. The pace is just right. Characters got some depth to them. Story progression is quite smooth~ nothing but praises from me! Mad respect to you Author!!
I really felt sorry for Elias. The story is well written. I loved the interactions of the characters. It was fun reading this. Keep up the good work.
great book and an honest review. looking forward to more chapters and do love the characters, it is so fun to read. honestly feel the author is doing a great job.
Very nice intro to the story! Also the plot twist!?? Fantastic! Would like it more if there's less telling and more showing though (I know old saying but really important!) Goodluck to the author and I'll be looking forward to new adventures with them especially Elias Ayla and Serendipity (love her name so much) !! ><
The description towards the story is so refreshing to read, It feels so calm to imagine the protagonist's thoughts and movements like I can see it as an anime. I do hope you can get more chapters, so with that said I'll be binging some more chapters byeeeeeeeeeee.
This takes an all-rounder five's, I have read the prologue which seems to tell us a little of what to expect for the future. The story, right now even tho the mc just came to another world, and is getting used to being here, is interesting. The interactions with Sean Seren and Luke are really funny too. So i also give the story 2 power stones, and i think i will keep giving it. I am definitely excited for the future of Nexus and Earth, and the synopsis i wonder how we'll reach to those certain points?
I just love everything about this book, though I just started reading it. I love the way the author describes the characters and the expression of every person. just the title alone has already taken my attention. I really can't wait for the next chap
The Story line is pretty good and I like the characters I find that the story is going a great direction, I am really excited to read more chapters , good luck
As far as i read it is good still have to read it , the story is great , the writing is great and im expecting is going to be better and better after some chapters.
I like the book, I like how you describe everything , it's amazing how you put everything together, I also love the setting , it's wonderful
I just started reading this novel... and already in love with it!!! Although theres only 5 chapters (including the prologue) the story is really nice so far! Thanks author!
Gave a whole 5 star review since the synopsis was promising, not revealing the whole story but I at least knew what to expect. The switch in POV's was interesting, so the book was intriguing after each chapter. There are only 4 chapters but they're totally worth a read! Good luck for the competition author 🤗
The book seems really well written with several possibilities as to where it could go. The characters seem interesting each with there own backstory. I would actually enjoy a history chapter
Having read the original work it crazy too see how much better the author is, and it's the same story. it's almost like I'm reading a brand new novel. I wish I could give it my power stone!
I like how the story gets into action within the first chapters which makes me want to read more and more of it As a newbie reader of these genres i’ll give this storyline 5stars Can’t wait to read and discover more of Elias’ journey
I can't wait to start reading tgis novel, it seems very promising just from the prologue. I can't wait to see how his journey will be to reach transcendant stage!
So, 4 stars across the board. 1. Writing Quality: The writing quality is okay. The author kinda switches weirdly between POV's sometimes, and even in the middle of some sentences. Other than that, the writing quality is good. 2. Stability of Updates: 4 stars because it is a new novel, so I can't really rate this right now. 3. Story Development: Again, it's a new novel, but from what I am seeing right now, the novel's pace is pretty good, but generic, basically the same as an isekai. Also, Author info dumps a little in the first chapter, I would recommend that you use the first chapter to hook the reader before info dumping in the second or third chapters, just to keep the newer readers from dropping. 4. Character Design: Character is good so far, again, generic revenge driven MC, but he's good and believable, which is better than most novels on the platform. 5. World Background: I have yet to see that much of the world yet, and from the power system shown in the first chapter, it's pretty unique, but there are some generic things, another 4 stars. Overall, pretty good novel so far.
Okay, as the author myself, I’ll add a whole thick big 5 stars here and also explain to you all that the story, in the beginning stages-mostly up to chapter 10, will look a little like slice-of-life, though magic training and stuff like that will also be shown, so I don't particularly think it will be boring, instead, there will be development for the mc and the side cast, the true plot will not begin late, so don't give up in the story. I just have too much planned about it, that it will have to be a little more slow-paced, in order for things to add up to each other, so the occurrences make sense. Also, reviews and power stones help a lot since I’m tryna reach a high point this WSA competition, I’ve been preparing for it since last year’s WSA after all--Well then, Enjoy!!
揭示劇透 I like all the system novel it really makes me excited what might happen next. Your novel is one of the best that i read even though there are only few chapters. You have full support
Woah .... I had just been through the synopsis which was so appealing I decided to add your book to my library. The story seems very promising and I can't wait to read ahead . 😃
I like how the author explain the detail while telling the story flow of MC. They said that a good introduction builds good and exciting story line. It's new for me to read. I'm sure that I will stay tone about this unique story line.
Seemed pretty good, the world building aspect of the story is done pretty well, and overall seems like a pretty interesting novel, can tell the author put some thought into it.
This looks like a promising chapter, the prologue had some useful explanations to tell us how OP the mc has potential to be, and the first chapter was released just minutes later, three other characters were also introduced in chapter 1, how they looked was also explained and quite some world building was shown for Nexus, so the only guess is that Elias is the MC of a novel, right? I definitely want to see where this story goes from now on. I want to give a Power stone but I don't see the button, will definitely do so when it appears!!!!
This work is still budding, yet I was already enchanted by it. The starting lines, complemented by the beautiful and neat writing, made this novel worthy of praise. I'm looking forward to the continuation.
sample:Chapter One: AwakeningThe night sky above the city of Neo-Tech was aglow with the neon lights of holographic billboards, casting a surreal, ever-shifting rainbow of colors onto the bustling streets below. It was a world where technology had reached the pinnacle of human imagination, and yet, beneath the surface, secrets waited to be uncovered.In a dimly lit alleyway, a figure leaned against a wall, their breaths heavy as they tried to catch their composure. This was Alex Mercer, a young man in his mid-twenties with jet-black hair and piercing blue eyes. His lean frame and rugged appearance hid a past filled with struggles, loss, and a relentless drive for self-improvement.Alex had always been different, an outcast in a society where everyone sought to embrace technology to enhance their lives. He preferred the old ways, the ways of martial arts, discipline, and cultivation. It was a path that his family had followed for generations, one that had been passed down from father to son.As he leaned there, panting, a soft glow emanated from his wrist. He glanced down to find a holographic display materializing above his skin, a translucent interface filled with information."[System: Qi Convergence System activated. Greetings, Host. Your journey begins now.]"Alex blinked, his heart pounding. This was it—the mysterious artifact he had stumbled upon in an ancient temple, a relic from a time long forgotten. It had fused with him, becoming a part of his very being."[Quest: Meditate to unlock your Qi channels. Reward: 10 Qi Points.]"The system's voice echoed in his mind, and he hesitated for a moment before nodding. He found a secluded spot in the alley, crossed his legs, and closed his eyes. As he delved into meditation, he felt a surge of energy coursing through his body, as if unlocking hidden potential.Time passed in a blur, but when he opened his eyes, he knew something had changed. His body felt lighter, his senses sharper. He flexed his fingers and could sense a newfound power within them."[Quest Complete. Rewarding 10 Qi Points.]"The system's voice rang out again, and Alex's excitement grew. It was as if a door to a world of endless possibilities had been opened to him.As he continued his journey through the city, Alex couldn't help but overhear snippets of conversation from the people around him. They spoke of the Grand Tournament, a competition where individuals with extraordinary abilities showcased their talents and competed for fame and fortune. It was the perfect opportunity for Alex to test his newfound powers and prove himself.But he knew he had to keep the system a secret. It was his advantage, his edge in a world that had forsaken the old ways. He couldn't risk anyone discovering the truth.Days turned into weeks as Alex honed his skills, mastering the art of Qi manipulation. The system provided him with quests, each one pushing him to his limits. He endured grueling training sessions, faced deadly challenges, and emerged stronger each time.One evening, as he stood on the rooftop of a skyscraper, gazing out at the city below, the system's voice interrupted his thoughts."[Quest: Infiltrate the TechCorp Research Facility. Retrieve classified data. Reward: ???]"Alex's curiosity was piqued. What could be so valuable that the system couldn't even reveal the reward? He knew it was a dangerous mission, but the prospect of uncovering hidden truths and gaining more power was too tempting to resist.With a determined glint in his eyes, he nodded. "I accept."And so, the stage was set for Alex Mercer's journey into a world of technology, cultivation, and secrets. Little did he know that his actions would set in motion a series of events that would shake the very foundations of Neo-Tech and lead him to confront the enigmatic forces that lurked in the shadows.As the city's neon lights continued to dance in the night, Alex took his first step towards a destiny that would change everything.[End of Chapter One]