Reviews of I Received System to Become Dragonborn by Diyen_Pi - Webnovel

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3.76

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Korstar26

loving the novel so far. would love to see a chapter or few detailing the lore of the two worlds at some point, like is there anything more than the walled city or what happened in the early days of the war with the elves. maybe even a few details about the elves world just so we have a better understanding of what might be happening in the world d even of the Mc doesn't.

2yr
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Amadeo_Trevino

the story is great I just feel like the MC is an idiot he keeps falling for the same thing like things covering his face but doesn't call the slime or takes a beating when he doesn't have to by withholding his transformation..... But other wise good job Author

2yr
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MoreMercury76

This novel was awfully written. The characters' interaction with one another feels fake, and the fight scene is just terrible and brain-dead.

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Ethan_Hanley

love the story so far - really hoping for the love interests bear fruit

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Fallen_Daoist2

The story had potential but the author made all the characters brain dead. In the battle against the unicorn riders the so called elite troops, the MC fights against them, and kills most of them by simply blocking their vision and stabbing them and their Elite troops? Even if they couldn't personal defend themselves, your telling me that the don't have the teamwork necessary to block an attack for their comrade? And as an army commander, you believed that an ordinary soldier fought off elven troops that almost killed your entire squad, walked away practically unharmed and you don't suspect anything? And now the elven princess, she told her enemy when her soldiers would attack, (putting aside the fact that our MC readily believed her), and has the power to talk to MC from like another dimension but can't even defend herself when the MC rushes her? It makes no sense that whoever taught her magic didn't even teach she common spells like magic shield and magic missile

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Blazzing18

THIS BOOK WOULD BE GRATE IF IT DIDNT GO BACK AND FORTH BETWEEN WORLDS!! ITS DEFINITELY DIFFERENT BUT I JUST DONT LIKE HOW ALL OF THIS OS GOING ON!! AND HONESTLY THE MC SHOULD DIE AND GO TO THERE WORLD AS A HUMAN AND THEN START TO CHANGE AND ALL THAT THIS MAKES IT INTERESTING BUT FOR ME IT JUST DOESNT FEEL RIGHT... I LIKE IT BUT I DONT AT THE SAME TIME ITS REAL HARD TO EXPLAIN!! I HOPE Y CAN COME OUT WITH ANOTHER BOOK WHERE THE PERSON FINDS SO CRACK IN SPACE ON THERE OWN WORLD AND GOSE THROUGH OR IT EVEN IN A CAVE AND AS HE GOSE THROUGH HE GETS TO TALK TO GODS AND GODDESSES AND TELLS THEM THAT HE DOESNT WANT TO BE A WEAK HUMAN ANY MORE THAT THE HUMAN RACE SHOULD DIE BUT THEY ALL KNOW HOW MUCH HE HAS BEEN THROUGH THATS Y HES ALLOWED TO GO THROUGH THE PASSAGE AND ALL THAT AND HAVE HIM BE REBORN AS A REALLY SMALL KID MAYBE NOT A BABY BUT A SMALL KID TO WHERE HE CAN BOND WOTH THE FAMILY AND MAKE IT HIS OWN AT SOME POINT AND THIS HE CAN GET POWERS WITH THE SYSTEMS HELP AND HAVE HIM GET POWERS LIKE LIKE THE DRAGON AND LIKE IN THIS BOOK SLOWLY BUT HAVE HIM GET OTHER AND EVEN HAVE HIM GET A BEAST TAMING POWER THIS WAY EVEN WITH OUT A CONTRACT HE CAN HAVE ALL THE BEAST LISTEN TO HIM AND HE WOULD ONLY MAKE A CONTRACT WITH THE STRONGEST OF RACES THIS WAY HE CAN HAVE ALL PERSON GUARDS THAT R THE STRONGEST FROM THERE RACE AND HE CAN EVEN HELP THEM BECAUSE STRONGER AND AFTER THAT HER CAN FALL FOR A PRINCESS OR BUILD HIS OWN KINGDOME OR FIGHT IN A TOURNAMENT FOR A PRINCESS OR HAVE HIM BUILD A KINGDOME WHERE HE GETS ALL OF THE MONEY FOR IT AND RESOURCES HAVE HIM STEAL THEM FOR OTHER KINGDOMES AND NO ONE CAN SEE HIM BECAUSE ITS ONE OF HIS ABILITIES AND HAVE HIM FIND TREASURE TOMBS AND SO ON AND THIS WAY HE WILL HAVE ENOUGH OF EVERYTHING AND LET HIM FIND A PLACE BETWEEN 2 OF THE STRONGEST KINGDOMES OR HAVE HIM FIND A PLACE WHERE PEOPLE DONT LIKE TO GO ON THE OUTSKIRTS OF A PIECE OF LAND AND HAVE HIM BUILD OT THERE AND ONE ITS BUILT HE CAN FIGHT IN THE TOURNAMENT AND WIN AND MAKE HIS KINGDOME KNOWN AND HE CAN GET A PRINCESS BUT HAVE MIH NOT FORCE HER HE CAN TAKE HIS TIME TO GET TO KNOW HER AND ALL THAT AND MAYBE HAVE HIM FIGJT IN OTHER TOURNAMENTS TO GET OTHER PRINCESS TO PUT PRESSURE ON THE OTHERS 1 OR 1S TO EITHER STAY OR GO OR THEY CAN ALL STAY AND HIS KINGDOME CAN THRIVE HAVE HIM HAVE HIS HAND IN MANY BUSINESS TO BECOME EVEN RICHER AND HAVE A POERT CITY THE BIGGEST ONE EVER THIS WAY IT BECOMES THE BIGGEST PLACE FOR SHIPS TO COME IN AND OFF LOAF AND LOAD THERE RESOURCES TO HIS KINGDOME THIS WAY HE CAN THRIVE EVEN MORE AND HAVE HIS KINGDOME KINDA IN A HIGH PLACE TO HAVE A NICE SCENERY SO PEOPLE WILL WANT TO GO SEE SOMETHING BEAUTIFUL BUT ALSO HAVE A SAFE PLACE BECAUSE IT WOULD BE HARD FOR ARMYS TO GET UP THERE AND HE CAN HAVE OTHER CITYS DOWN THE MOUNTAIN OR A VERY BUG HILL SO THIS WAY THERE SAFTT CHECKPOINTS AND HAVE THE MOUNTAIN NOT BE SUPPER COLD BUT NOT SUPPER HIT ITS RIGHT ALL YEAR FOR THE MOST PART IT WILL DROP AND RISE A LITTLE BUT IT WILL BE MANAGEABLE AND MAYBE HAVE HIM FIND IT WHEN HE IS GROWING UP LOOKING FOR TREASURE TOMBS AND WORKING FOR THE GUILD BUT ITS JUST AN IDEA AND WOULD REALLY LOVE IT TO COME TO LIFE IF POSSIBLE WITHOUT IT BEING TO MUCH OR TO LITTLE AND NOT HAVE IT NOT FEEL RIGHT OR WRONG LIKE THIS BOOK ITS JUST SO CONFUSING ON HOW TO EXPLAIN THIS BOOK... ITS GOOD AND HAS GOOD POTENTIAL BUT JUST FEELS LIKE ITS CONFUSING OR THE FEELING ISNT RIGHT IDK LIKE I SAID ITS CONFUSING TO PUT IN WORDS... BUT I HOPE U KEEP GOING WITH UR BOOK!! AND DONT MIND THE CAPS MY PHONE IS BROKE!

1yr
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jonathan_wise

So I kind of liked it at the beginning, like the first 5 chapters because I felt the mc was cautious and would develop well. Then, the power he gains is poorly developed, and by power, I don't mean the dragon powers. I mean the system, it had serious potential, but the way it is designed leads to werid and unable to be understood power, and the way he gains exp is simple but bad in the grand scheme of things only allowing slow growth. plus, nothing is explained at all. How much power do you gain when activating your dragon power? oh, I don't know, a lot, I think.. oh then, how much speed do you gain when you put points into agility? oh, I don't know, but now I'm faster than a human. OK, how fast is a normal human in this fantasy setting, then? oh, I don't know. listen, I know that humans, on average, are around the 20 to 25 mph mark, but this doesn't have to be true in his world. as an example, the elf guy prince is so fast that it's hard to see him move. Next is the world in the first 40 chapters isn't flushed out, all you get to know is that there is 2 worlds and on the human side they have a wall and a palace and on the elf side there is fantasy land with a elf palace and other races.next is the Mc doesn't have a reason to do anything. He says he has a family but can't see them. he saves the elves for no reason. he trusts 3 randos just because and fights for humanity with blind faith for no reason, never even questions humanity even when shown evidence. I get that he is human and has been fighting for 5 years, but the people behind the wall and the people defending are different and have a sorta mistrust between them. it could have shown that Mc isn't blinded and is just cautious if he had doubts about the inside of the wall. if for a moment he didn't trust the upper echelon of the military and stayed awake because of it. all of these points are from 1ch to 35ch. Now, the story has potential for growth, but I must drop this because I won't pay for a maybe. I wish that the author continues to write but adds more info and really describes the abilities and how they affect the Mc more.

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JumpsFromCliff

Good idea but author threw it out the window, but deceide for yourself:-MC gets OP system that helps him turn into the only dragon, from early on-The elves attacked the humans because one puny thief stole some key-MC with his new powers, helps the elves(for no reason,he also says that). And waits for human commands because he is a soilder...-The president protects the thief........so yeah i really dont know how stupid the MC can be to not kill at least some of them. No brainer.

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Northsouth

sorry to say this bro because i hate to be a bad guy. but your story pace is so slow and fighting is too slow and prolonged i feel like MC and every good guy is stupid and idiot beyond reason. you may enjoy a long and winding and slow and very very delayed battle but i sure not enjoy it. . i give honest star review at least, but for now i dropping your story for good

1yr
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Adam_Peterson_0377

I haven’t read yet but I’m commenting cause I’m 90% sure there was another author that got their novel taken down after using ZeniMax properties. The term Dragonborn is almost directly related to Elder Scrolls. Idk if author knew this, but it might be better to use different vocabulary. Synopsis looks really interesting though.

2yr
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nebula
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Im not sure if I'm qualified to be reviewing this, having only read the 40 free chapters, but I need to write reviews for my badge so here goes anyway. This book has potential. Or at least it did up until I stopped. The problem came with consistent boughts of contradictory statements by both characters and author, as well as these characters having personalities I would never believe to exist even if they were in my most realistic dreams(leading to a 2-star for character development). For one the MC and his military buddies have fought together for 5 years and yet he still acts like a complete idiot when it comes to anything to do with fighting, be it technique, tactics, mentality, discipline, or anything else. And by idiot, I don't mean average civilian idiot- I mean worse than probably 80 percent of the general population. And then there's the dementia. Why does everyone just forget everything? The MC even forgot to do his daily quests!! His only true way to get stronger, which is the best way to solve all of his problems up until now!! Not up to date, so updating stability is 5 stars. World background is nothing special, but decently well executed up to paid chapters start. I think that's all I want to say. If I want to add anything I'll reply to this review.

2yr
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isn1_
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pretty good. Should have used Dovahzul tho but u know just saying

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Astralek

First off, the title is very deceptive. The Author used the term 'Dragonborn' to draw in people thinking it'd be linked to The Elder Scrolls. It isn't. It's a sh*tty cliche ridden story with as much creativity and depth to it as a five year old's crayon drawing. The Protagonist is a insufferable fool with no spine, there is no proper world building or background AT ALL, and it uses so many tropes that if this novel were a building it would be foreclosed then bulldozed. One of the examples is how the protagonist supposedly was fighting on the front lines against the Elves for five years, witnessing the deaths of many friends and fellow humans but he fell in love at first sight with a Elven Princess from the race that murdered millions of Humans in an unprovoked war of aggression. Not only that but the Princess of the Elves somehow knew that he was the system user, teleported to him then then betrayed her race by telling him about an upcoming attack on that city simply because she felt his magic dragon transformation due to her super special secret talent and desperarely wanted his dragon c*ck-*cough* I mean dragon magic. Even worse is how Erend is STILL an incompetant coward that shakes in his boots and freezes up when the Elves attack after five years of fighting on the frontline. He even gets shouted at to remind him to shoot at the enemy in the first chapter! 2/5 Stars.

2yr
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Apns444
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Childish, naive and average. There is literally no background to anything. No information about the world or how it came to the state it is now. No information about any sort of past of our MC. The MC himself is naive and beta. Alien race (elves) attacks earth, kills millions of ppl, kills his comrades in arms in a prolonged war, and he decides to trust and help the aliens, because of a woman he met twice and barely even spoke to. The entire idea that a random lieutenant can agree to an invitation to peace talks from enemies, without reporting anything or orders from high command is a joke. There is no immersion, and all the characters, MC included, are 2D (not only do we have no background, the entire plot is rushed and fast paced, we have no idea about MCs feelings or inner thoughts). The plot itself, at least until what I've read (30 chapters) was cliche.

2yr
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Deaboro
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the story is good and all but like come one... so many things just don't make sense and are so stupid and frustrating 😫

2yr
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Minxminx

Heretic Heretic Heretic Heretic Heretic

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JesusMan

Nice book . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .

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Geicho

Things were fun and game until you died and wake up to the sound "Hey you, finally awake?"

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Shanew07

The system is kind of a mess of leveling up could be good but average

2yr
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AllWhite

Just commenting to tell you there’s 2 errors in your cover.

2yr
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Latidy
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So far the story is really enjoyable, but I feel like at the beginning it was too fast-paced. Everything felt a little rushed. But other than that it's a good read.

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_BLACK

hi author I just want to ask if there will be harem or no ..............................................................................

2yr
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Howtofoxxy

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Epic_Buddie123

Nice novel with and interesting story. Recomanded to read! nothing: 5igjy4e7irtd6hiv6d4d6vivtg7b7h6zjuh7h7g7vug7hug6h7czg67u9jug7hohe6tofw6gug7vzg7hic6v7v7vivuvijih7h7vibibibi

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mnc777
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Korstar26

loving the novel so far. would love to see a chapter or few detailing the lore of the two worlds at some point, like is there anything more than the walled city or what happened in the early days of the war with the elves. maybe even a few details about the elves world just so we have a better understanding of what might be happening in the world d even of the Mc doesn't.

2yr
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Amadeo_Trevino

the story is great I just feel like the MC is an idiot he keeps falling for the same thing like things covering his face but doesn't call the slime or takes a beating when he doesn't have to by withholding his transformation..... But other wise good job Author

2yr
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MoreMercury76

This novel was awfully written. The characters' interaction with one another feels fake, and the fight scene is just terrible and brain-dead.

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Ethan_Hanley

love the story so far - really hoping for the love interests bear fruit

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10mth
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Fallen_Daoist2

The story had potential but the author made all the characters brain dead. In the battle against the unicorn riders the so called elite troops, the MC fights against them, and kills most of them by simply blocking their vision and stabbing them and their Elite troops? Even if they couldn't personal defend themselves, your telling me that the don't have the teamwork necessary to block an attack for their comrade? And as an army commander, you believed that an ordinary soldier fought off elven troops that almost killed your entire squad, walked away practically unharmed and you don't suspect anything? And now the elven princess, she told her enemy when her soldiers would attack, (putting aside the fact that our MC readily believed her), and has the power to talk to MC from like another dimension but can't even defend herself when the MC rushes her? It makes no sense that whoever taught her magic didn't even teach she common spells like magic shield and magic missile

1yr
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Blazzing18

THIS BOOK WOULD BE GRATE IF IT DIDNT GO BACK AND FORTH BETWEEN WORLDS!! ITS DEFINITELY DIFFERENT BUT I JUST DONT LIKE HOW ALL OF THIS OS GOING ON!! AND HONESTLY THE MC SHOULD DIE AND GO TO THERE WORLD AS A HUMAN AND THEN START TO CHANGE AND ALL THAT THIS MAKES IT INTERESTING BUT FOR ME IT JUST DOESNT FEEL RIGHT... I LIKE IT BUT I DONT AT THE SAME TIME ITS REAL HARD TO EXPLAIN!! I HOPE Y CAN COME OUT WITH ANOTHER BOOK WHERE THE PERSON FINDS SO CRACK IN SPACE ON THERE OWN WORLD AND GOSE THROUGH OR IT EVEN IN A CAVE AND AS HE GOSE THROUGH HE GETS TO TALK TO GODS AND GODDESSES AND TELLS THEM THAT HE DOESNT WANT TO BE A WEAK HUMAN ANY MORE THAT THE HUMAN RACE SHOULD DIE BUT THEY ALL KNOW HOW MUCH HE HAS BEEN THROUGH THATS Y HES ALLOWED TO GO THROUGH THE PASSAGE AND ALL THAT AND HAVE HIM BE REBORN AS A REALLY SMALL KID MAYBE NOT A BABY BUT A SMALL KID TO WHERE HE CAN BOND WOTH THE FAMILY AND MAKE IT HIS OWN AT SOME POINT AND THIS HE CAN GET POWERS WITH THE SYSTEMS HELP AND HAVE HIM GET POWERS LIKE LIKE THE DRAGON AND LIKE IN THIS BOOK SLOWLY BUT HAVE HIM GET OTHER AND EVEN HAVE HIM GET A BEAST TAMING POWER THIS WAY EVEN WITH OUT A CONTRACT HE CAN HAVE ALL THE BEAST LISTEN TO HIM AND HE WOULD ONLY MAKE A CONTRACT WITH THE STRONGEST OF RACES THIS WAY HE CAN HAVE ALL PERSON GUARDS THAT R THE STRONGEST FROM THERE RACE AND HE CAN EVEN HELP THEM BECAUSE STRONGER AND AFTER THAT HER CAN FALL FOR A PRINCESS OR BUILD HIS OWN KINGDOME OR FIGHT IN A TOURNAMENT FOR A PRINCESS OR HAVE HIM BUILD A KINGDOME WHERE HE GETS ALL OF THE MONEY FOR IT AND RESOURCES HAVE HIM STEAL THEM FOR OTHER KINGDOMES AND NO ONE CAN SEE HIM BECAUSE ITS ONE OF HIS ABILITIES AND HAVE HIM FIND TREASURE TOMBS AND SO ON AND THIS WAY HE WILL HAVE ENOUGH OF EVERYTHING AND LET HIM FIND A PLACE BETWEEN 2 OF THE STRONGEST KINGDOMES OR HAVE HIM FIND A PLACE WHERE PEOPLE DONT LIKE TO GO ON THE OUTSKIRTS OF A PIECE OF LAND AND HAVE HIM BUILD OT THERE AND ONE ITS BUILT HE CAN FIGHT IN THE TOURNAMENT AND WIN AND MAKE HIS KINGDOME KNOWN AND HE CAN GET A PRINCESS BUT HAVE MIH NOT FORCE HER HE CAN TAKE HIS TIME TO GET TO KNOW HER AND ALL THAT AND MAYBE HAVE HIM FIGJT IN OTHER TOURNAMENTS TO GET OTHER PRINCESS TO PUT PRESSURE ON THE OTHERS 1 OR 1S TO EITHER STAY OR GO OR THEY CAN ALL STAY AND HIS KINGDOME CAN THRIVE HAVE HIM HAVE HIS HAND IN MANY BUSINESS TO BECOME EVEN RICHER AND HAVE A POERT CITY THE BIGGEST ONE EVER THIS WAY IT BECOMES THE BIGGEST PLACE FOR SHIPS TO COME IN AND OFF LOAF AND LOAD THERE RESOURCES TO HIS KINGDOME THIS WAY HE CAN THRIVE EVEN MORE AND HAVE HIS KINGDOME KINDA IN A HIGH PLACE TO HAVE A NICE SCENERY SO PEOPLE WILL WANT TO GO SEE SOMETHING BEAUTIFUL BUT ALSO HAVE A SAFE PLACE BECAUSE IT WOULD BE HARD FOR ARMYS TO GET UP THERE AND HE CAN HAVE OTHER CITYS DOWN THE MOUNTAIN OR A VERY BUG HILL SO THIS WAY THERE SAFTT CHECKPOINTS AND HAVE THE MOUNTAIN NOT BE SUPPER COLD BUT NOT SUPPER HIT ITS RIGHT ALL YEAR FOR THE MOST PART IT WILL DROP AND RISE A LITTLE BUT IT WILL BE MANAGEABLE AND MAYBE HAVE HIM FIND IT WHEN HE IS GROWING UP LOOKING FOR TREASURE TOMBS AND WORKING FOR THE GUILD BUT ITS JUST AN IDEA AND WOULD REALLY LOVE IT TO COME TO LIFE IF POSSIBLE WITHOUT IT BEING TO MUCH OR TO LITTLE AND NOT HAVE IT NOT FEEL RIGHT OR WRONG LIKE THIS BOOK ITS JUST SO CONFUSING ON HOW TO EXPLAIN THIS BOOK... ITS GOOD AND HAS GOOD POTENTIAL BUT JUST FEELS LIKE ITS CONFUSING OR THE FEELING ISNT RIGHT IDK LIKE I SAID ITS CONFUSING TO PUT IN WORDS... BUT I HOPE U KEEP GOING WITH UR BOOK!! AND DONT MIND THE CAPS MY PHONE IS BROKE!

1yr
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jonathan_wise

So I kind of liked it at the beginning, like the first 5 chapters because I felt the mc was cautious and would develop well. Then, the power he gains is poorly developed, and by power, I don't mean the dragon powers. I mean the system, it had serious potential, but the way it is designed leads to werid and unable to be understood power, and the way he gains exp is simple but bad in the grand scheme of things only allowing slow growth. plus, nothing is explained at all. How much power do you gain when activating your dragon power? oh, I don't know, a lot, I think.. oh then, how much speed do you gain when you put points into agility? oh, I don't know, but now I'm faster than a human. OK, how fast is a normal human in this fantasy setting, then? oh, I don't know. listen, I know that humans, on average, are around the 20 to 25 mph mark, but this doesn't have to be true in his world. as an example, the elf guy prince is so fast that it's hard to see him move. Next is the world in the first 40 chapters isn't flushed out, all you get to know is that there is 2 worlds and on the human side they have a wall and a palace and on the elf side there is fantasy land with a elf palace and other races.next is the Mc doesn't have a reason to do anything. He says he has a family but can't see them. he saves the elves for no reason. he trusts 3 randos just because and fights for humanity with blind faith for no reason, never even questions humanity even when shown evidence. I get that he is human and has been fighting for 5 years, but the people behind the wall and the people defending are different and have a sorta mistrust between them. it could have shown that Mc isn't blinded and is just cautious if he had doubts about the inside of the wall. if for a moment he didn't trust the upper echelon of the military and stayed awake because of it. all of these points are from 1ch to 35ch. Now, the story has potential for growth, but I must drop this because I won't pay for a maybe. I wish that the author continues to write but adds more info and really describes the abilities and how they affect the Mc more.

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JumpsFromCliff

Good idea but author threw it out the window, but deceide for yourself:-MC gets OP system that helps him turn into the only dragon, from early on-The elves attacked the humans because one puny thief stole some key-MC with his new powers, helps the elves(for no reason,he also says that). And waits for human commands because he is a soilder...-The president protects the thief........so yeah i really dont know how stupid the MC can be to not kill at least some of them. No brainer.

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Northsouth

sorry to say this bro because i hate to be a bad guy. but your story pace is so slow and fighting is too slow and prolonged i feel like MC and every good guy is stupid and idiot beyond reason. you may enjoy a long and winding and slow and very very delayed battle but i sure not enjoy it. . i give honest star review at least, but for now i dropping your story for good

1yr
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Adam_Peterson_0377

I haven’t read yet but I’m commenting cause I’m 90% sure there was another author that got their novel taken down after using ZeniMax properties. The term Dragonborn is almost directly related to Elder Scrolls. Idk if author knew this, but it might be better to use different vocabulary. Synopsis looks really interesting though.

2yr
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nebula
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Im not sure if I'm qualified to be reviewing this, having only read the 40 free chapters, but I need to write reviews for my badge so here goes anyway. This book has potential. Or at least it did up until I stopped. The problem came with consistent boughts of contradictory statements by both characters and author, as well as these characters having personalities I would never believe to exist even if they were in my most realistic dreams(leading to a 2-star for character development). For one the MC and his military buddies have fought together for 5 years and yet he still acts like a complete idiot when it comes to anything to do with fighting, be it technique, tactics, mentality, discipline, or anything else. And by idiot, I don't mean average civilian idiot- I mean worse than probably 80 percent of the general population. And then there's the dementia. Why does everyone just forget everything? The MC even forgot to do his daily quests!! His only true way to get stronger, which is the best way to solve all of his problems up until now!! Not up to date, so updating stability is 5 stars. World background is nothing special, but decently well executed up to paid chapters start. I think that's all I want to say. If I want to add anything I'll reply to this review.

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Suprava_Bai

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isn1_
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pretty good. Should have used Dovahzul tho but u know just saying

2yr
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Astralek

First off, the title is very deceptive. The Author used the term 'Dragonborn' to draw in people thinking it'd be linked to The Elder Scrolls. It isn't. It's a sh*tty cliche ridden story with as much creativity and depth to it as a five year old's crayon drawing. The Protagonist is a insufferable fool with no spine, there is no proper world building or background AT ALL, and it uses so many tropes that if this novel were a building it would be foreclosed then bulldozed. One of the examples is how the protagonist supposedly was fighting on the front lines against the Elves for five years, witnessing the deaths of many friends and fellow humans but he fell in love at first sight with a Elven Princess from the race that murdered millions of Humans in an unprovoked war of aggression. Not only that but the Princess of the Elves somehow knew that he was the system user, teleported to him then then betrayed her race by telling him about an upcoming attack on that city simply because she felt his magic dragon transformation due to her super special secret talent and desperarely wanted his dragon c*ck-*cough* I mean dragon magic. Even worse is how Erend is STILL an incompetant coward that shakes in his boots and freezes up when the Elves attack after five years of fighting on the frontline. He even gets shouted at to remind him to shoot at the enemy in the first chapter! 2/5 Stars.

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Apns444
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Childish, naive and average. There is literally no background to anything. No information about the world or how it came to the state it is now. No information about any sort of past of our MC. The MC himself is naive and beta. Alien race (elves) attacks earth, kills millions of ppl, kills his comrades in arms in a prolonged war, and he decides to trust and help the aliens, because of a woman he met twice and barely even spoke to. The entire idea that a random lieutenant can agree to an invitation to peace talks from enemies, without reporting anything or orders from high command is a joke. There is no immersion, and all the characters, MC included, are 2D (not only do we have no background, the entire plot is rushed and fast paced, we have no idea about MCs feelings or inner thoughts). The plot itself, at least until what I've read (30 chapters) was cliche.

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Deaboro
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the story is good and all but like come one... so many things just don't make sense and are so stupid and frustrating 😫

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Minxminx

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JesusMan

Nice book . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .

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Geicho

Things were fun and game until you died and wake up to the sound "Hey you, finally awake?"

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Shanew07

The system is kind of a mess of leveling up could be good but average

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AllWhite

Just commenting to tell you there’s 2 errors in your cover.

2yr
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Latidy
LV 12 Badge

So far the story is really enjoyable, but I feel like at the beginning it was too fast-paced. Everything felt a little rushed. But other than that it's a good read.

2yr
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_BLACK

hi author I just want to ask if there will be harem or no ..............................................................................

2yr
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Howtofoxxy

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Epic_Buddie123

Nice novel with and interesting story. Recomanded to read! nothing: 5igjy4e7irtd6hiv6d4d6vivtg7b7h6zjuh7h7g7vug7hug6h7czg67u9jug7hohe6tofw6gug7vzg7hic6v7v7vivuvijih7h7vibibibi

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CorrosiveNetwork

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mnc777
LV 13 Badge

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