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The time travel thing is kind of a turn off but everything is gold, shame this is probably dropped :(
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This was a fun read, I was thinking of doing a story like this on Wattpad but you took it too a whole nother level, can't wait for more chapters.
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good novel for a DxD fic, enjoyed his character alot and the concept of human magic and the system he created, although their where a few parts thar was slightly cingy to me but nothing that would stop me from reading. hope this can still be continued 🙏
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I love the concept of making his own system by taking the refrence from modern technology...I hope he will add grafia too in the harem...hope update frequency improves
The MC is likeable and very creative. I absolutely love how he utilizes his abilities later on, keikaku doori. I would also recommend this story if you'd like something that doesn't just retread canon.
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Great fanfiction don't give up on it 👍 great fanfiction don't give up on it 👍 great fanfiction don't give up on it 👍 great fanfiction don't give up on it 👍
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@author -san Just clocked this, Mc Ability has the potential to be op(Great red level) think about its ability to make a conceptual CAD(casting adding device. irregular at magic high school) If Mc Can raise the functionality of index to levels such that it can -slowly use senjutsu to train touki and magic pathways, with minor compulsion/mind control and spread it through the human population attesting it to be a gift of Solomon or merlin, basically making 100m human mages eventually comparable to mid class devils since the human will start believing in themselves due to ability to cast insta magic thereby believing in mc, is it possible to attain divinity then feed it back to the connected indexes(Assceesion to godhood might become problematic))
Amazing. Plot twists, funny gag and reference moments. Hints of lustful interaction (need a bit more of those scenes *hint hint*). Overall, at least as of Ch 36, this story is just a “feel-good” ride. Highly recommend this to anyone looking for a funny yet surprisingly complex story.
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Unique fanfic of motohama,,,,mc has make his own system...but mc doesn't get any longinus sacred gear...if you are in Rome than do what Romans do..If you go one piece eat devil fruit,if you go rwby then open your aura...and if your in dxd than get a sacred gear because its is one of the reason dxd is famous another is oppai...
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Extremely original and well thought out fic with good grammar and language; to be honest it has immense potential and I hope the author keeps up this level of writing because it is one of the few well written fics out there. Only minor issues I have are personal to me and not prevalent to the story (for example a few decisions that I didn't like, but author's logical execution won me over anyway) so I recommend this as a good read :)
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you have my interest........ moar update please 🙏🙏🙏~~~ is MC DaVinci incarnation?................. ................................ ................................
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The time travel thing is kind of a turn off but everything is gold, shame this is probably dropped :(
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This was a fun read, I was thinking of doing a story like this on Wattpad but you took it too a whole nother level, can't wait for more chapters.
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good novel for a DxD fic, enjoyed his character alot and the concept of human magic and the system he created, although their where a few parts thar was slightly cingy to me but nothing that would stop me from reading. hope this can still be continued 🙏
Magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico
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,........................................ divino ........................................,😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍
I love the concept of making his own system by taking the refrence from modern technology...I hope he will add grafia too in the harem...hope update frequency improves
The MC is likeable and very creative. I absolutely love how he utilizes his abilities later on, keikaku doori. I would also recommend this story if you'd like something that doesn't just retread canon.
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Great fanfiction don't give up on it 👍 great fanfiction don't give up on it 👍 great fanfiction don't give up on it 👍 great fanfiction don't give up on it 👍
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@author -san Just clocked this, Mc Ability has the potential to be op(Great red level) think about its ability to make a conceptual CAD(casting adding device. irregular at magic high school) If Mc Can raise the functionality of index to levels such that it can -slowly use senjutsu to train touki and magic pathways, with minor compulsion/mind control and spread it through the human population attesting it to be a gift of Solomon or merlin, basically making 100m human mages eventually comparable to mid class devils since the human will start believing in themselves due to ability to cast insta magic thereby believing in mc, is it possible to attain divinity then feed it back to the connected indexes(Assceesion to godhood might become problematic))
Amazing. Plot twists, funny gag and reference moments. Hints of lustful interaction (need a bit more of those scenes *hint hint*). Overall, at least as of Ch 36, this story is just a “feel-good” ride. Highly recommend this to anyone looking for a funny yet surprisingly complex story.
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Unique fanfic of motohama,,,,mc has make his own system...but mc doesn't get any longinus sacred gear...if you are in Rome than do what Romans do..If you go one piece eat devil fruit,if you go rwby then open your aura...and if your in dxd than get a sacred gear because its is one of the reason dxd is famous another is oppai...
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Extremely original and well thought out fic with good grammar and language; to be honest it has immense potential and I hope the author keeps up this level of writing because it is one of the few well written fics out there. Only minor issues I have are personal to me and not prevalent to the story (for example a few decisions that I didn't like, but author's logical execution won me over anyway) so I recommend this as a good read :)
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you have my interest........ moar update please 🙏🙏🙏~~~ is MC DaVinci incarnation?................. ................................ ................................
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I really love this story so please keep it up.!