2評論
- 寫作品質
- 更新的穩定性
- 故事發展
- 人物形象設計
- 世界背景
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寫檢討
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I like it, it is a modern sci-fi novel with mecha and superpower mixed in whilst most of earth seems entirly modern. The main is friendly and not not stupid, though he has some trouble not having others dump consequences for their actions on him. This makes for an intersting background. I think you could have waited and collected a few chapters 10-30 to get yourself some initial readers who can help you place higher in WPC. Furthermore, it is sometimes hard to notice the timeshifts. It might help by ading something like dots ’.’ or lines ’-‘ or at least an empty line to seperate these points. Lastly, I give you the tip to consequently add names to chapters. They make it more interesting if ones looking for a novel to try out. Hope these points might help create a better story, whilst still expressing how I do like the story even if the writingquality has potential.
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I like it, it is a modern sci-fi novel with mecha and superpower mixed in whilst most of earth seems entirly modern. The main is friendly and not not stupid, though he has some trouble not having others dump consequences for their actions on him. This makes for an intersting background. I think you could have waited and collected a few chapters 10-30 to get yourself some initial readers who can help you place higher in WPC. Furthermore, it is sometimes hard to notice the timeshifts. It might help by ading something like dots ’.’ or lines ’-‘ or at least an empty line to seperate these points. Lastly, I give you the tip to consequently add names to chapters. They make it more interesting if ones looking for a novel to try out. Hope these points might help create a better story, whilst still expressing how I do like the story even if the writingquality has potential.