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I am In love with this ff and would recommend it to everyone I found This ff trough the other ff of the author in hope it would be as great as the other one I was really suprised to say that This ff was wayyyy better
Es una buena historia pero la dejo, voy 120 capítulos y solo hubo una buena pelea, el avance es demasiado lento, apenas pasaron unas semanas o 1 mes desde que el MC despertó en Marvel y el 90% de la historia son momentos románticos, al principio estaba bien, pero después de ver lo mismo en todos los capítulos me cansó. La trama de fondo está bien, también el desarrollo de Jean y la personalidad del MC, el fondo mundial está bien hecho, pero el transcurso de la historia es monótono(no encuentro una palabra mejor). Tampoco me gustó mucho el papel que le diste a Laura como la tercera que solo sigue a la pareja(no se si cambia después), preferiría que fuera harem, o que ella se fije en alguien mas pero su posición actual no me gusta. Lo que si me gustó es el crecimiento del MC, su personalidad y sus habilidades.
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When are you going to update this novel author? Please update the novel and if you aren't going to update it and actually decided to drop it please inform us beforehand as there still many people waiting for the update.
There are more than 250 chapters on his Patreon, apparently it was exclusive to paying customers only.
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WELL I LIKE IT , IT'S MORE OF A SLICE OF LIFE THEN ACTION AND I DON'T HAVE ANY OPENION ON THAT JUST DO SOME TIME SKIP AND MOST OF THE TIME IT'S ABOUT MUTENT ATLEAST MENTION SOME MORE MCU CHARACTERS SUCH AS IRON MAN DURING THE DESTRUCTION HE CAUSED DURING SAVING HIS NEWPEW BY THE FACULTY
A novel that consists of romance and impure s*x, not pure love, etc., just a novel about MC and Jin having s*x, as if you are watching P*rn. Unfortunately, I do not understand whether the readers have not touched a girl before or do not know the positions of s*x, instead of dropping these things in a novel.
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Are you completing this fic? Or is ther somewhere else to read the finished version?
story premise is good, story back ground is good, character interaction is okay, but the most i am dissatisfied is with the romance and the way author portray laura, harem was within sight but then he decides to not make harem but you do you init.
"Yes, my love" like c'mon😑🤷. No plot jst boring chit chat btwn mc and fl, then out of nowhere sudden power up like atleast try to make it interesting. I'm really disappointed. so much waste of time
I read up to Chapter 69. It is a well-written novel and a more original production compared to other fanfics available on the web. But I'm tired of reading it because, in my opinion, there are too many articles about romantic events. (And the development of the romantic relationship between them was, in my opinion, incomplete in logic and rapid.)
Writing quality is 5 stars, Update stability is 5 stars and Character development is also 5 stars but story development and world background is lacking, coming to a total of 3.4 so far. The 30% of the fic that has plot progression is great but unfortunately the remaining 70% is just how much Elijah and Jean love each other. At the start their romantic actions is beautiful and heartwarming, but after the hundredth time it's just boring and repetitive. I would still recommend reading though.
Author It's been a while since last release. We want an update soonAn old fan of your work
Edgeloard MC killed a common criminal during his first encounter ever. He wasn't in danger, and there was no true reason for him to do it. Along with the way he had sexual interaction with a minor - that he didn't know within the first 25 chapters. It's too much of a power fantasy with very few interesting aspects. I typically don't leave these types of negative comments, but a lot of points truly bothered me. Especially since it had a lot of potential with the overall idea.
Dude I have read this 5 times already. When will you update more? This feels like on the verge but blocking the c***.I always feel like blowing up things when I see it wasn't updated since months ago. Urgh...
80% of the novel filled with "I love u jean" and unnecessary drama which doesn't even affect the main stroy line.. every thing was good until mc fall in love with jean..that he forgot everything his ambition and what he really wanted well nothing other than spending time with jean
Its realy good story, great character and background. Just too much romance and too slow
A very good fanfiction novel in the MCU. I very much love this story since the plot is good and don't have plot holes. The grammar is without problems which is something I consider a must when reading... The only thing I find regretful about this fanfiction is the so slow paced, in 180 chapters we only advanced 3 months in this story timeline.... I honestly don't know when/if this fanfiction will ever end. Compared to the other works of this author where in 30 chapters or so he finish a book, this is kind of overwhelmingly slow. But, all in all I very liked this fanfiction so I highly recommend this to anyone who likes this gender.
It's very good for me, by the way, can you make a fanfic similar to this but with DC? and it would be perfect if MC x Harley.
This is as far as i go(chapter 54), the MC was supposed to be a wanderer, someone that chases freedom and explore the universe, this-this is just sex,sex, making out and so on, with the first couple chapters it was going the right direction but as soon as you added a female lead/romance....let's just say my disappointment was immeasurable (and this isn't a reference it's how I genuinely feel).
Not good with words... But i love this.I was a bit upset about one character not getting enough love that the person deserved, but after reading the latest, I'm hopeful for a good outcome.Regardless of what comes of that tho, I like how you write. Please keep it up.I'm not rich, but I'll send whatever support I can.
Gooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooood
Ok I read the first chapter and I can say that a FF that is based around freedom and what not it is not the MC has a VERY Exploitive weakness wuch is NEEDING to repay favors and feels like if does not it go’s against his beliefs but that in its self also go’s against his beliefs
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Good story and descriptions although lengthy, it is a nice effort to detail everything while not keeping it overbearing, I hope the author doesn't just ignore potential love interests or forget that they had feelings altogether for the MC, Poor Laura is just being friend-zoned and ignored most of the time in later chapters
I just remembered this existed and saw it got updated not long ago? nice. However there are problems. Too much R scenes ruin it. This is like p*rn with story mixed between but even then i saw more story in those then this. I like the neutrality and watcher concept (while its not original its still not something used too much). I will say i like some of the things happenşng but it doesn't change the fact that after hundred chapter its like story didn't move. Mc just changed places and got more powers while properly fighting once. Honestly can't give the story development more than 2 it just not there. Design is cool nothing special. I like the base power and his neutrality. ah and love how he doesn't go over the top of searching why or who send him there, he just accepts him and thanks him basically. Its surprising how many time this doesn't happen like why does everyone has to be like "i have to know everything". Other than that world is just marvel so solid 4, writing is also good which makes it 5. Overall i will give it 3/5 cool idea
I am In love with this ff and would recommend it to everyone I found This ff trough the other ff of the author in hope it would be as great as the other one I was really suprised to say that This ff was wayyyy better
Es una buena historia pero la dejo, voy 120 capítulos y solo hubo una buena pelea, el avance es demasiado lento, apenas pasaron unas semanas o 1 mes desde que el MC despertó en Marvel y el 90% de la historia son momentos románticos, al principio estaba bien, pero después de ver lo mismo en todos los capítulos me cansó. La trama de fondo está bien, también el desarrollo de Jean y la personalidad del MC, el fondo mundial está bien hecho, pero el transcurso de la historia es monótono(no encuentro una palabra mejor). Tampoco me gustó mucho el papel que le diste a Laura como la tercera que solo sigue a la pareja(no se si cambia después), preferiría que fuera harem, o que ella se fije en alguien mas pero su posición actual no me gusta. Lo que si me gustó es el crecimiento del MC, su personalidad y sus habilidades.
揭示劇透 When are you going to update this novel author? Please update the novel and if you aren't going to update it and actually decided to drop it please inform us beforehand as there still many people waiting for the update.
There are more than 250 chapters on his Patreon, apparently it was exclusive to paying customers only.
..........................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
WELL I LIKE IT , IT'S MORE OF A SLICE OF LIFE THEN ACTION AND I DON'T HAVE ANY OPENION ON THAT JUST DO SOME TIME SKIP AND MOST OF THE TIME IT'S ABOUT MUTENT ATLEAST MENTION SOME MORE MCU CHARACTERS SUCH AS IRON MAN DURING THE DESTRUCTION HE CAUSED DURING SAVING HIS NEWPEW BY THE FACULTY
A novel that consists of romance and impure s*x, not pure love, etc., just a novel about MC and Jin having s*x, as if you are watching P*rn. Unfortunately, I do not understand whether the readers have not touched a girl before or do not know the positions of s*x, instead of dropping these things in a novel.
揭示劇透 Are you completing this fic? Or is ther somewhere else to read the finished version?
story premise is good, story back ground is good, character interaction is okay, but the most i am dissatisfied is with the romance and the way author portray laura, harem was within sight but then he decides to not make harem but you do you init.
"Yes, my love" like c'mon😑🤷. No plot jst boring chit chat btwn mc and fl, then out of nowhere sudden power up like atleast try to make it interesting. I'm really disappointed. so much waste of time
I read up to Chapter 69. It is a well-written novel and a more original production compared to other fanfics available on the web. But I'm tired of reading it because, in my opinion, there are too many articles about romantic events. (And the development of the romantic relationship between them was, in my opinion, incomplete in logic and rapid.)
Writing quality is 5 stars, Update stability is 5 stars and Character development is also 5 stars but story development and world background is lacking, coming to a total of 3.4 so far. The 30% of the fic that has plot progression is great but unfortunately the remaining 70% is just how much Elijah and Jean love each other. At the start their romantic actions is beautiful and heartwarming, but after the hundredth time it's just boring and repetitive. I would still recommend reading though.
Author It's been a while since last release. We want an update soonAn old fan of your work
Edgeloard MC killed a common criminal during his first encounter ever. He wasn't in danger, and there was no true reason for him to do it. Along with the way he had sexual interaction with a minor - that he didn't know within the first 25 chapters. It's too much of a power fantasy with very few interesting aspects. I typically don't leave these types of negative comments, but a lot of points truly bothered me. Especially since it had a lot of potential with the overall idea.
Dude I have read this 5 times already. When will you update more? This feels like on the verge but blocking the c***.I always feel like blowing up things when I see it wasn't updated since months ago. Urgh...
80% of the novel filled with "I love u jean" and unnecessary drama which doesn't even affect the main stroy line.. every thing was good until mc fall in love with jean..that he forgot everything his ambition and what he really wanted well nothing other than spending time with jean
Its realy good story, great character and background. Just too much romance and too slow
A very good fanfiction novel in the MCU. I very much love this story since the plot is good and don't have plot holes. The grammar is without problems which is something I consider a must when reading... The only thing I find regretful about this fanfiction is the so slow paced, in 180 chapters we only advanced 3 months in this story timeline.... I honestly don't know when/if this fanfiction will ever end. Compared to the other works of this author where in 30 chapters or so he finish a book, this is kind of overwhelmingly slow. But, all in all I very liked this fanfiction so I highly recommend this to anyone who likes this gender.
It's very good for me, by the way, can you make a fanfic similar to this but with DC? and it would be perfect if MC x Harley.
This is as far as i go(chapter 54), the MC was supposed to be a wanderer, someone that chases freedom and explore the universe, this-this is just sex,sex, making out and so on, with the first couple chapters it was going the right direction but as soon as you added a female lead/romance....let's just say my disappointment was immeasurable (and this isn't a reference it's how I genuinely feel).
Not good with words... But i love this.I was a bit upset about one character not getting enough love that the person deserved, but after reading the latest, I'm hopeful for a good outcome.Regardless of what comes of that tho, I like how you write. Please keep it up.I'm not rich, but I'll send whatever support I can.
Gooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooood
Ok I read the first chapter and I can say that a FF that is based around freedom and what not it is not the MC has a VERY Exploitive weakness wuch is NEEDING to repay favors and feels like if does not it go’s against his beliefs but that in its self also go’s against his beliefs
揭示劇透 Good story and descriptions although lengthy, it is a nice effort to detail everything while not keeping it overbearing, I hope the author doesn't just ignore potential love interests or forget that they had feelings altogether for the MC, Poor Laura is just being friend-zoned and ignored most of the time in later chapters
I just remembered this existed and saw it got updated not long ago? nice. However there are problems. Too much R scenes ruin it. This is like p*rn with story mixed between but even then i saw more story in those then this. I like the neutrality and watcher concept (while its not original its still not something used too much). I will say i like some of the things happenşng but it doesn't change the fact that after hundred chapter its like story didn't move. Mc just changed places and got more powers while properly fighting once. Honestly can't give the story development more than 2 it just not there. Design is cool nothing special. I like the base power and his neutrality. ah and love how he doesn't go over the top of searching why or who send him there, he just accepts him and thanks him basically. Its surprising how many time this doesn't happen like why does everyone has to be like "i have to know everything". Other than that world is just marvel so solid 4, writing is also good which makes it 5. Overall i will give it 3/5 cool idea
Anyone know if this story is finished on his patreon or if it even updating.