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To wake up in an unknown place, get a sensory shock from the abundance of other people's memories, and in the end also realize that you are now locked in a child's body, whose name you even know too well… For many, such a sudden development of events can turn out to be hell and cause endless regrets.
For many, but not for someone who is completely sure that his past body is dead, and a new, completely healthy and literally bursting with life body is perceived as a real gift and, one might say, a dream of the last years of his past life. And it's also an opportunity, an opportunity to live another life in a much more interesting, even dangerous, world… Moreover, you already have some knowledge about this world. And plans for a newfound youth can be built simply grandiose.
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Why is he so verbose with words? why call "carcasse" instead of body and what are taurus. It feels like I'm reading a medical book instead of a naruto fanfic, the sentences are too...something that I can't describe. What is an interculotor ore whatever it said. Write simple words for simple minds, too complicated vocabulary confuses some readers.
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If you like reading 99% Monologue and 1% Dialogue. Overall the story is decent. Would recommend if you want to fall asleep. [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
the worst Naruto fanfiction I mean I've read mtl of other Naruto fanfiction but even they are tenfolds better than this. this gives me migraine just from inter monologue that repetitive along with the only thing going in this fanfiction except some nonexistent dialogue 😑😑
even if you are just translating the original fanfiction please atleast use " " for conversations and change Hugo to Hyuga in the next chapters. thanks.
not gonna lie i have high hopes for this one so i hope this doesn't get dropped 😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄
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good story and monologue but have the most incredibly stupid un educated Idioticaly bad that so badly unreadable grammar at wrong spelling in the names of clans caracter jutsu and on and on that make me frustrated😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😤
story is well written and slow paced...but you should remove harem tag....i mean i see no romance....he sees hinata as a daughter (which is not wrong for his mental)but at this rate he'll only see tsunade,mei,kaguya as equals....i reallly wanna see how romance goes....and funny was neji goes wining to hinata...
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I will say that the story is good. My only problem is the pretty bad grammar. Sometimes, you'll read through and get to a particular part of each section to where it feels like you're reading an MTL novel. Other times you can tell that they are trying to get word count and make repetitive sentences that don't move the story forward.
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Interesting work, not often there is so much reflection in the works. I advise you to read it to those who want to watch the systematic development of the plot as well as strength mc. good luck with your work...
it's good .....................................................................................................................................................
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Une des pires fanfiction je comprends pas les notes on s'endort les chapites sont des monologues qui dure et qui dure et le pire c'est que il ne s'entraîne même pas alors qu'il sait ce qui va arriver j'ai juste des exercices basiques c'est ridicule juste plus au 4e chapitre j'en avais vraiment assez
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well, it's not bad, it's even good, but it has some problems for example there are certain words that don't make sense like "taurus"... and I'm a little worried about the tag "harem" because a lot of naruto fanfics lose quality when put harem in history.