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寫檢討I swear this is the best bleach fanfic I’ve read yet I pray that you don’t stop making chapters🙏
By god what is this, if you're like me who hates reading fanfic where the author doesn't even know the basics of the world, stay away. Because the author doesn't seem to know anything about the world of Bleach, and I'm talking about basic things, like Zaraki won the title of Kenpachi, this kind of basic stuff the author doesn't know.
The narration is hard to follow because the author just speeds over everything rather quickly. Like a whole fight, an important event, and the mc passing out all happen in two very short paragraphs. It just makes it hard to follow or care about the characters when they speed over everything like this.
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This is one of those stories where the MC easily beats everyone but also lets every enemy escape or "somehow" survive. He for example allows demons to be come hollows, as in he even asks them if they want to cut their own chains and transform after which he does a token effort to kill them but the new hollows are all instantly protected by "Negación" that uninterruptible yellow beam from the sky thing Aizen used to escape into Hueco Mundo. The MC even goes to far as to allow for that demon king whatever the name is to escape just so he can talk a few words with someone else. Cringe story.
Story is good and I really like the premise so far. First fic I read with Yoriichi as the main character out of all the people. Really like how it progresses.
The story itself is somewhat ok at least as far as I have read it. The problem is the way it is written. This is the first time I stopped reading a story because of bad narration. Reading this is just cancer.
I'd put money on that people probably came here for yoriichi and not some offbrand.....................................................................
its very interesting so far but i wish you would go over your chapters before posting them because it seems your auto correct is messing up a good number of the words making some lines very confusing to read
I personally think he could easily surpass everyone in bleach given enough time the only one who would be fun to see would be the gotei 13 captain
I personally think he could easily surpass everyone in bleach given enough time the only one who would be fun to see would be the gotei 13 captain
Pretty Nice, I dont like the writing style its still nice and average, The Story Telling, Its Okay you need to improve on it and plot, I dont necessarily see the flow of the story or line your going for but i hope you suprise me later on.
I would say this is shameless if I cared about if its shameful or not. This story doesn't even have 10k words yet but here we are. I answer all comment (That I see) So leave a question for me will ya?
I swear this is the best bleach fanfic I’ve read yet I pray that you don’t stop making chapters🙏
By god what is this, if you're like me who hates reading fanfic where the author doesn't even know the basics of the world, stay away. Because the author doesn't seem to know anything about the world of Bleach, and I'm talking about basic things, like Zaraki won the title of Kenpachi, this kind of basic stuff the author doesn't know.
The narration is hard to follow because the author just speeds over everything rather quickly. Like a whole fight, an important event, and the mc passing out all happen in two very short paragraphs. It just makes it hard to follow or care about the characters when they speed over everything like this.
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This is one of those stories where the MC easily beats everyone but also lets every enemy escape or "somehow" survive. He for example allows demons to be come hollows, as in he even asks them if they want to cut their own chains and transform after which he does a token effort to kill them but the new hollows are all instantly protected by "Negación" that uninterruptible yellow beam from the sky thing Aizen used to escape into Hueco Mundo. The MC even goes to far as to allow for that demon king whatever the name is to escape just so he can talk a few words with someone else. Cringe story.
Story is good and I really like the premise so far. First fic I read with Yoriichi as the main character out of all the people. Really like how it progresses.
The story itself is somewhat ok at least as far as I have read it. The problem is the way it is written. This is the first time I stopped reading a story because of bad narration. Reading this is just cancer.
I'd put money on that people probably came here for yoriichi and not some offbrand.....................................................................
its very interesting so far but i wish you would go over your chapters before posting them because it seems your auto correct is messing up a good number of the words making some lines very confusing to read
I personally think he could easily surpass everyone in bleach given enough time the only one who would be fun to see would be the gotei 13 captain
I personally think he could easily surpass everyone in bleach given enough time the only one who would be fun to see would be the gotei 13 captain
Pretty Nice, I dont like the writing style its still nice and average, The Story Telling, Its Okay you need to improve on it and plot, I dont necessarily see the flow of the story or line your going for but i hope you suprise me later on.
I would say this is shameless if I cared about if its shameful or not. This story doesn't even have 10k words yet but here we are. I answer all comment (That I see) So leave a question for me will ya?
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