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idk why it's rated so low, at the beginning the haki usage an scaling is a bit iffy but the story gets so much better, a shame its dropped
shows rapid improvement, though throughout the story the author gets tired of writing and creates long timeskips
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This is really hood book to one piece fans that really want to go into the details of one piece before it started it may not be canon characters but its really good
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Mc is really cocky and stupid for some reason. Like he makes a basic observation, that he probably already should have known, about his abilities. Then he goes on to make the same mistake and is still cocky. I have no idea why the author wrote it like this but it keeps happening.
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writing quality and plot was good, everything was in line with timeline, the logics and every actions of characters make sense and such, the story progress was good except its a bit lacking. Sure I can see the MC character development, self reflection etc. the problem is its too monotonous. Every chapter is either fighting, training, meeting new characters then fighting again, not that I'm saying its bad its just lacking. There's no slice of life, comedy, romance and such, everything was plain. His character too is a bit confusing, what he is really? he sounds like funny guy through his inner monologue but the way he act and interact is opposite as he rarely express what he thinks. I dunno really, his character is very confusing, his goal is too was lacking, "crushing the world nobles" for what? justice? for the world? is it worth it? confusing 😶
Not sure what all the flack on the Series is. It's really well written and the grammar speaks for itself. If you can get past time skips you'll love the series, personally I feel like the time skips are warranted as they can further along towards the canon.
A well-honed story that proves that you can find some good story on this site. The author did not make a system or harem so go for it guys, You won't regret it
Like it very much....but with time there were less details in fighting, you can expand that area cause most of the people were here to read some action....also like the political power struggles of world nobles.
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Keep up the good work This is probably up there with my most favourite Ffsfffsffzfsfsfsfsfsfsfffsfffsfffsffffsffsfsfffsfffsffffssfffsfffsf
Alright so writing quality is good, update is daily or at least 3 times a week, character design is good as well as their background altough it said no cheats but he seems overpowered from the timeskip but author fixes the boredom of oneshotting people with fighting people such as whitebeard and a slice of life bits here and there, nothing much i can suggest since this is really good, just do not change canon too much since i want to see the reactions between luffy and percy and what percy can change during the war of the best and what happens or what fruit blackbeard has.
Why does this have such a low rating? It is a great novel even though I am not fun of the marines, this fic has taken a very nice approach to joining marines.
Love the story and cant wait for cannon part of the story to start to see how the strawhats and other rookie crews will face the OC and if the marineford war outcome will change with the OC involed
1 star. This is bad. >:( ========================================================================================================================================================================================================================================================================================================================================================================================================================================I don't actually hate it. Haven't read. But since it don't have the cursed harem tag, ima try it.
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all in all it's a pretty good read and want to read more. don't drop please and do a mass release one day if you can. no complaints from this lizard person
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was really good until author decided to just abruptly use his current book to advertise his new one by putting 4 chapters of a new book with no context in the middle of this one adios.
u kill your own fanfic story bro. i dont know why u did it but immm sad to let it go now. gbye percy gdbye onepiece fanfiction arghhhhhhhhhhjj
One star for thinking your reader are stupid. You are posting chapters from completely different unrelated novel randomly again and again, I think you wanted us to give you one start. So here I am fulfilling your wish.
this is an amazing story....however chapters 71, 72, and 73 have ruined it for a lot of readers. This is not a spoiler because in those chapters he starts giving teases to other stories but doesn't update the actual story at all in those 3 chapters.
Might change depending if the One Piece FF story actually continues and not some other story preview being posted making the whole readers hate it to the bone (author..you know that's the worse type of advertising your new work, by doing a preview of it on this Fanfic...they'll only hate it more, you can let them know about it but making a chapter not related to this FF story x3...that'll make them to not reader it anymore). Anyway will take it off my library and might not see it ever again by then, unless it pops up who knows, meh.
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idk why it's rated so low, at the beginning the haki usage an scaling is a bit iffy but the story gets so much better, a shame its dropped
shows rapid improvement, though throughout the story the author gets tired of writing and creates long timeskips
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This is really hood book to one piece fans that really want to go into the details of one piece before it started it may not be canon characters but its really good
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Mc is really cocky and stupid for some reason. Like he makes a basic observation, that he probably already should have known, about his abilities. Then he goes on to make the same mistake and is still cocky. I have no idea why the author wrote it like this but it keeps happening.
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writing quality and plot was good, everything was in line with timeline, the logics and every actions of characters make sense and such, the story progress was good except its a bit lacking. Sure I can see the MC character development, self reflection etc. the problem is its too monotonous. Every chapter is either fighting, training, meeting new characters then fighting again, not that I'm saying its bad its just lacking. There's no slice of life, comedy, romance and such, everything was plain. His character too is a bit confusing, what he is really? he sounds like funny guy through his inner monologue but the way he act and interact is opposite as he rarely express what he thinks. I dunno really, his character is very confusing, his goal is too was lacking, "crushing the world nobles" for what? justice? for the world? is it worth it? confusing 😶
Not sure what all the flack on the Series is. It's really well written and the grammar speaks for itself. If you can get past time skips you'll love the series, personally I feel like the time skips are warranted as they can further along towards the canon.
A well-honed story that proves that you can find some good story on this site. The author did not make a system or harem so go for it guys, You won't regret it
Like it very much....but with time there were less details in fighting, you can expand that area cause most of the people were here to read some action....also like the political power struggles of world nobles.
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Keep up the good work This is probably up there with my most favourite Ffsfffsffzfsfsfsfsfsfsfffsfffsfffsffffsffsfsfffsfffsffffssfffsfffsf
Alright so writing quality is good, update is daily or at least 3 times a week, character design is good as well as their background altough it said no cheats but he seems overpowered from the timeskip but author fixes the boredom of oneshotting people with fighting people such as whitebeard and a slice of life bits here and there, nothing much i can suggest since this is really good, just do not change canon too much since i want to see the reactions between luffy and percy and what percy can change during the war of the best and what happens or what fruit blackbeard has.
Why does this have such a low rating? It is a great novel even though I am not fun of the marines, this fic has taken a very nice approach to joining marines.
Love the story and cant wait for cannon part of the story to start to see how the strawhats and other rookie crews will face the OC and if the marineford war outcome will change with the OC involed
1 star. This is bad. >:( ========================================================================================================================================================================================================================================================================================================================================================================================================================================I don't actually hate it. Haven't read. But since it don't have the cursed harem tag, ima try it.
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all in all it's a pretty good read and want to read more. don't drop please and do a mass release one day if you can. no complaints from this lizard person
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was really good until author decided to just abruptly use his current book to advertise his new one by putting 4 chapters of a new book with no context in the middle of this one adios.
u kill your own fanfic story bro. i dont know why u did it but immm sad to let it go now. gbye percy gdbye onepiece fanfiction arghhhhhhhhhhjj
One star for thinking your reader are stupid. You are posting chapters from completely different unrelated novel randomly again and again, I think you wanted us to give you one start. So here I am fulfilling your wish.
this is an amazing story....however chapters 71, 72, and 73 have ruined it for a lot of readers. This is not a spoiler because in those chapters he starts giving teases to other stories but doesn't update the actual story at all in those 3 chapters.
Might change depending if the One Piece FF story actually continues and not some other story preview being posted making the whole readers hate it to the bone (author..you know that's the worse type of advertising your new work, by doing a preview of it on this Fanfic...they'll only hate it more, you can let them know about it but making a chapter not related to this FF story x3...that'll make them to not reader it anymore). Anyway will take it off my library and might not see it ever again by then, unless it pops up who knows, meh.
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