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wouldve been so much better if his permeation works on everything except the infinity stones and doesnt cause loss of stamin
:) This is pretty good. I like how you portray mirio's doubts and angst as something he needs to overcome to be hero was.
Maaan I feel bad for his backstory in MHA, but he pushed himself to what he is now. Respect for his ability to keep smiling while facing tough scenarios while not showing what’s inside.
This is so good I don’t know what to say other than you make good drama and that is the only reason I stayed until chapter 15-18 were action started and I gotta say poor guys who dropped this before the action started
Verdaderamente increíble me encanta es mi muy bueno excelente excelente excelenteexcelenteexcelenteexcelenteexcelenteexcelenteexcelenteexcelenteexcelenteexcelenteexcelenteexcelente
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MCU is scuffed af, everyone there is like 20x as strong, Loki is somehow equal to cap in strength and cap can now lift 24000 pounds or more. But great great story, the background, the drama, this has the potential to become a great story simply because it dines't go lemilion has quirk and goes and beats everyone up. A true hero faces adversity and this shows it perfectly. Thank you for this story.
Muy bueno la verdad me gusta como va la historia y pido que continúe y no se abandone ya que me parece algo increíble me gusta mucho el personaje de lemillion cómo su heroismo
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these things are not just boring, they are very stupid. these things are not just boring, they are very stupid. these things are not just boring, they are very stupid. these things are not just boring, they are very stupid. these things are not just boring, they are very stupid.
it's really good I hope the author will update more[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
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All I want to say is that I love this . . ... .. ... ... ... .. .. .. .. ... .. .. .. .. .. .... .. ... .. .. .. .. .. .. ..................
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i liked the story and the relationship between them. though I would like for you to make Christina a little heartbroken before moving on...idk why but meh. anyways I look forward for future chapters. great story and Goodluck.
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It's very well written like all his stories but like all his stories is also full of edginess and as always the mc gets cheated on. Not for everyone ------------------------------------------::---:::::---------#+#+#-#-#-#-#+#+#((#-$-$-#+#+#-#&$&$-$&$-$-$&#&#&#&#&#&#&#&#&#&#&*&*&*&*&*&*&*&$&#&#&$&#-#-#-#&#&#&#&#&#&#&#-#-$6#-#--$-#&#&$&#-$-#-#-$&#&#&#&#&#&#&#&#&#-#&##&#&#&#&#&#&#&#&##5#-#7$7$7$6$5$5$-$7$&$&$&&*-*-#6#7#+#-#-#-#
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Since it's worth it, here's your 5 stars. I like how the story goes with Mirio having a bit of twisted mind and some unfortunate circumstances that is forcing him to change. Not gonna say much since I'm just here to give 5stars.
You've made me hate Christina, I don't want them trying to get together again pleeeeeeeeeeeeeeaaaaaaasssse !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Great fanfic. Astounding writing, good upload rate, long chapters, and a good story. Although in chapter twelve he ruined the story by having his love intrist cheat on him. Fanfics aren't supposed to have drama like that. Kinda defeats the purpose in my opinion. Nobody wants to see the mc get cucked. Other than me just being stingy about that it is a great story that definitely deserves a chance.
Don't like the way you have designed the MC. There is too much drama in the story. Everyone wants to see his quirk powers in marvel instead of all the depressing struggle that MC faces to find himself back in his home. Don't do so much drama and try to get his powers back and get back some action into the story. This is an MHA X Marvel crossover everyone expects some action, not the drama.
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Great story. I'm looking forward to how you reintroduce his quirk. It's very interesting what you've done with this 'alter ego' of his. Where did it come from? Why is it so against heroism? Did it possess him? Whose blood was on his hand? Hopefully they'll be answered soon enough.
So for this novel... Well, check out my other novels and tell me what you think... This novel is not for everyone... I can't really describe it other than being Lemillion in the MCU...
honestly i just don't like the story a main character with deprecation for several chapters and besides i really hate stupid characters seriously he got kicked out of the same place o all day like an idiot being that it was just showing a card I honestly don't like the story and the main character
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Had to stop with this one early. There are shifts with narrative continuity in the first few chapters I read. MC's declaration to rack up a body count because he’s depressed is a bit worrying too, giving off stealth smut or harem vibes. There are good things to be had though: The mechanism by which Mirio ends up in the MCU is pretty unique to me, the grammar is pretty good and the concept overall has good bones. Its just that this fic is not my cup of tea.
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wouldve been so much better if his permeation works on everything except the infinity stones and doesnt cause loss of stamin
:) This is pretty good. I like how you portray mirio's doubts and angst as something he needs to overcome to be hero was.
Maaan I feel bad for his backstory in MHA, but he pushed himself to what he is now. Respect for his ability to keep smiling while facing tough scenarios while not showing what’s inside.
This is so good I don’t know what to say other than you make good drama and that is the only reason I stayed until chapter 15-18 were action started and I gotta say poor guys who dropped this before the action started
Verdaderamente increíble me encanta es mi muy bueno excelente excelente excelenteexcelenteexcelenteexcelenteexcelenteexcelenteexcelenteexcelenteexcelenteexcelenteexcelenteexcelente
MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE
MCU is scuffed af, everyone there is like 20x as strong, Loki is somehow equal to cap in strength and cap can now lift 24000 pounds or more. But great great story, the background, the drama, this has the potential to become a great story simply because it dines't go lemilion has quirk and goes and beats everyone up. A true hero faces adversity and this shows it perfectly. Thank you for this story.
Muy bueno la verdad me gusta como va la historia y pido que continúe y no se abandone ya que me parece algo increíble me gusta mucho el personaje de lemillion cómo su heroismo
揭示劇透 these things are not just boring, they are very stupid. these things are not just boring, they are very stupid. these things are not just boring, they are very stupid. these things are not just boring, they are very stupid. these things are not just boring, they are very stupid.
it's really good I hope the author will update more[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
Gooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooood gooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooood
All I want to say is that I love this . . ... .. ... ... ... .. .. .. .. ... .. .. .. .. .. .... .. ... .. .. .. .. .. .. ..................
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i liked the story and the relationship between them. though I would like for you to make Christina a little heartbroken before moving on...idk why but meh. anyways I look forward for future chapters. great story and Goodluck.
NTR! RUN! FHFFHFGGGGGDIVDRBZYBSTJKFXJGDTJFTHVDTJVFYJDRYHFFTGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGFDFFFFHKKJJJBVCCFTGHBVFGFFFGGGGGGGGFSSRYHJNBVFFFHHGCFFFFFFFFFFGGGGG
揭示劇透 It's very well written like all his stories but like all his stories is also full of edginess and as always the mc gets cheated on. Not for everyone ------------------------------------------::---:::::---------#+#+#-#-#-#-#+#+#((#-$-$-#+#+#-#&$&$-$&$-$-$&#&#&#&#&#&#&#&#&#&#&*&*&*&*&*&*&*&$&#&#&$&#-#-#-#&#&#&#&#&#&#&#-#-$6#-#--$-#&#&$&#-$-#-#-$&#&#&#&#&#&#&#&#&#-#&##&#&#&#&#&#&#&#&##5#-#7$7$7$6$5$5$-$7$&$&$&&*-*-#6#7#+#-#-#-#
揭示劇透 Since it's worth it, here's your 5 stars. I like how the story goes with Mirio having a bit of twisted mind and some unfortunate circumstances that is forcing him to change. Not gonna say much since I'm just here to give 5stars.
You've made me hate Christina, I don't want them trying to get together again pleeeeeeeeeeeeeeaaaaaaasssse !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Great fanfic. Astounding writing, good upload rate, long chapters, and a good story. Although in chapter twelve he ruined the story by having his love intrist cheat on him. Fanfics aren't supposed to have drama like that. Kinda defeats the purpose in my opinion. Nobody wants to see the mc get cucked. Other than me just being stingy about that it is a great story that definitely deserves a chance.
Don't like the way you have designed the MC. There is too much drama in the story. Everyone wants to see his quirk powers in marvel instead of all the depressing struggle that MC faces to find himself back in his home. Don't do so much drama and try to get his powers back and get back some action into the story. This is an MHA X Marvel crossover everyone expects some action, not the drama.
[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
Great story. I'm looking forward to how you reintroduce his quirk. It's very interesting what you've done with this 'alter ego' of his. Where did it come from? Why is it so against heroism? Did it possess him? Whose blood was on his hand? Hopefully they'll be answered soon enough.
So for this novel... Well, check out my other novels and tell me what you think... This novel is not for everyone... I can't really describe it other than being Lemillion in the MCU...
honestly i just don't like the story a main character with deprecation for several chapters and besides i really hate stupid characters seriously he got kicked out of the same place o all day like an idiot being that it was just showing a card I honestly don't like the story and the main character
揭示劇透
Had to stop with this one early. There are shifts with narrative continuity in the first few chapters I read. MC's declaration to rack up a body count because he’s depressed is a bit worrying too, giving off stealth smut or harem vibes. There are good things to be had though: The mechanism by which Mirio ends up in the MCU is pretty unique to me, the grammar is pretty good and the concept overall has good bones. Its just that this fic is not my cup of tea.