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寫檢討I like it. The MC is not emotionally disabled, does not start going multiverse travel and that he has a pace of growth
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The biggest thing that keeps me from reading any of the authors' stories, is the fact that he has 20+ dropped stories and the story that I Was going to read hasn't been updated in over a year. just goes to show you once a quitter, always a quitter.
This is a really good piece of isekai fan faction that's built into the Danmachi world. Introducing new characters, and reusing existing ones. The author seems to have stopped updating this story, but maybe we can get them back? :-)
I really hope you pick this one back up. I truly love the story so far, and I would love to read more of it.
Story is average, MC is an idiot and degenerate, author doesn’t know the basics about danmachi, romance is trash and so forced. Like he wanted “waifu” before he was reincarnated and did it his main goal and mission. So many useless chapters, and all characters are either dumb, stupid or hollow. Only character who seemed pretty good was Syr!! And she appeared like for 1/8 of a chapter. Couldn’t read past 20 chapter. If you are new to fan fiction this fanfic can good for you, but if you are not a simp and a degenerate like MC — do not read this.
borderline trash and decent horrible story development a lot of it is forced plot. mc is bipolar and a hypocrite which makes him very hard to enjoy the story sheeesh again borderline trash cuz it has a few moments and I mean the tiniest of decent moments but nothing to rave about 💯💯💯
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Me gusta el rumbo que está tomando la historia y como se desarrollan los personajes junto con las relaciones................................
I love this novel! This is perhaps the top 3 best fanfics related to Demanchi. The story is origin. It doesn’t follow the plot, it’s not NTR. The protagonist is dating women he falls in love with. He never aimed to take Bell’s originals harem. Each character has a life, it’s realistic. The MC actually works hard to gain his power. He doesn’t just becomes op after a few chapters of training. The MC is not OP but he is realistically strong.
It's a good world building and character building story. over all a great, well written danmachi story.
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how many members are in the harem? .......................................................................................................................
The original plot has a lot of flaws that I don't particularly like and the problem with your story is that it makes everyone stupider just so the mc doesn't get embarrassed.
RIP. Another hiatus or dropped story. I kinda expected this to happen tho. Leaving us with another cliffhanger.
I just finish reading what is updatet so for an I really liked it the Mc is Strong but not to Op and for me His Stats are not to much like in other fanfics and the Oc are good too. Of course you can always improve on the Character development but so far good job and i hope the story continues soon :)
Chapter 20 at the moment. So far, it’s rubbish. Mc is r*tarded, didnt bother to max stats, has an earth affinity which I personally think is the most worthless of all affinities, hopefully it gets better, but given that he’s weak as p*ss and dumb as h*ll, aiming for a harem which of itself is disgusting, I doubt it will
The story is tbh very good for ff. there are a lot of characters taken from other series and MC is an OC with the body and abilities of Zhongli. it's a non-18 harem ff. since MC is Zhongli he uses a spear as his weapon. the timeline of the story starts a few years before the darkest time in orario (forgot the actual name), that is a few years before the time Ryuu's guild's incident happened. the only problem for me is the update schedule since it's been awhile since the last update and it's not the first time the update is taking this long.
揭示劇透Everything very well written characters very cool the world also the main character well what I fell in love with him super cool but I have one follow-up question for the person who stopped writing whyoooo
It's a pretty lazily thought out fanfiction. It introduces a new familia (The Athena familia) but each member is just a character from another anime/game. There's barely any character development and despite being told the MC is strong, he's pretty braindead in fight. In fact everybody is and the authors writing skills in general, especially in fights are pretty poor. Despite the fic being in a world we're already aware of (orario), the author fails to give any sort of meaning world background. As for the writing, it's filled with useless exposition that adds nothing to the story outside of making the characters look even more stupid. There are a tonne of mistakes in both grammar and spelling, you can skip like 5 chapters and you wouldn't have missed out on anything. The dialogue doesn't seem to add anything to the story, the characters could go silent for 90% of the story and it wouldn't make a difference. The MC is pretty weak; he has a few spells that manipulate the earth but all he does is create a few basic spikes. He can create siesmic quakes, but for some reason decided to only do so on his weapons. Basically just a load of really stupid mistakes, anybody above the reading age of 13-14 should be able to write something better very easily.
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I like it. The MC is not emotionally disabled, does not start going multiverse travel and that he has a pace of growth
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The biggest thing that keeps me from reading any of the authors' stories, is the fact that he has 20+ dropped stories and the story that I Was going to read hasn't been updated in over a year. just goes to show you once a quitter, always a quitter.
This is a really good piece of isekai fan faction that's built into the Danmachi world. Introducing new characters, and reusing existing ones. The author seems to have stopped updating this story, but maybe we can get them back? :-)
I really hope you pick this one back up. I truly love the story so far, and I would love to read more of it.
Story is average, MC is an idiot and degenerate, author doesn’t know the basics about danmachi, romance is trash and so forced. Like he wanted “waifu” before he was reincarnated and did it his main goal and mission. So many useless chapters, and all characters are either dumb, stupid or hollow. Only character who seemed pretty good was Syr!! And she appeared like for 1/8 of a chapter. Couldn’t read past 20 chapter. If you are new to fan fiction this fanfic can good for you, but if you are not a simp and a degenerate like MC — do not read this.
borderline trash and decent horrible story development a lot of it is forced plot. mc is bipolar and a hypocrite which makes him very hard to enjoy the story sheeesh again borderline trash cuz it has a few moments and I mean the tiniest of decent moments but nothing to rave about 💯💯💯
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Me gusta el rumbo que está tomando la historia y como se desarrollan los personajes junto con las relaciones................................
I love this novel! This is perhaps the top 3 best fanfics related to Demanchi. The story is origin. It doesn’t follow the plot, it’s not NTR. The protagonist is dating women he falls in love with. He never aimed to take Bell’s originals harem. Each character has a life, it’s realistic. The MC actually works hard to gain his power. He doesn’t just becomes op after a few chapters of training. The MC is not OP but he is realistically strong.
It's a good world building and character building story. over all a great, well written danmachi story.
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how many members are in the harem? .......................................................................................................................
The original plot has a lot of flaws that I don't particularly like and the problem with your story is that it makes everyone stupider just so the mc doesn't get embarrassed.
RIP. Another hiatus or dropped story. I kinda expected this to happen tho. Leaving us with another cliffhanger.
I just finish reading what is updatet so for an I really liked it the Mc is Strong but not to Op and for me His Stats are not to much like in other fanfics and the Oc are good too. Of course you can always improve on the Character development but so far good job and i hope the story continues soon :)
Chapter 20 at the moment. So far, it’s rubbish. Mc is r*tarded, didnt bother to max stats, has an earth affinity which I personally think is the most worthless of all affinities, hopefully it gets better, but given that he’s weak as p*ss and dumb as h*ll, aiming for a harem which of itself is disgusting, I doubt it will
The story is tbh very good for ff. there are a lot of characters taken from other series and MC is an OC with the body and abilities of Zhongli. it's a non-18 harem ff. since MC is Zhongli he uses a spear as his weapon. the timeline of the story starts a few years before the darkest time in orario (forgot the actual name), that is a few years before the time Ryuu's guild's incident happened. the only problem for me is the update schedule since it's been awhile since the last update and it's not the first time the update is taking this long.
揭示劇透Everything very well written characters very cool the world also the main character well what I fell in love with him super cool but I have one follow-up question for the person who stopped writing whyoooo
It's a pretty lazily thought out fanfiction. It introduces a new familia (The Athena familia) but each member is just a character from another anime/game. There's barely any character development and despite being told the MC is strong, he's pretty braindead in fight. In fact everybody is and the authors writing skills in general, especially in fights are pretty poor. Despite the fic being in a world we're already aware of (orario), the author fails to give any sort of meaning world background. As for the writing, it's filled with useless exposition that adds nothing to the story outside of making the characters look even more stupid. There are a tonne of mistakes in both grammar and spelling, you can skip like 5 chapters and you wouldn't have missed out on anything. The dialogue doesn't seem to add anything to the story, the characters could go silent for 90% of the story and it wouldn't make a difference. The MC is pretty weak; he has a few spells that manipulate the earth but all he does is create a few basic spikes. He can create siesmic quakes, but for some reason decided to only do so on his weapons. Basically just a load of really stupid mistakes, anybody above the reading age of 13-14 should be able to write something better very easily.
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hey are you gonna update it if not at least reply.....