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Now I am gonna be honest he gets 5 wishes which is fine but wishes for dumb stuff and he a dude who only spent 1 year with his dad and half of that was with his dad on missions who died and the mc did not 'expect' it in Naruto He has wishes that are considered OP in Naruto but all 5 wishes could have been better especially the last one Tbh this is just dumb and I quit at chapter 2 but overall better then most just Mc is dumb I am just giving this review based on my opinion
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i feel like ive lost brain cells trying to read this it also felt more like a guide line then a story and feels like a lot of words are missing
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A college educated adult gets inserted into a world of his choosing, at the time of his choosing, with the bloodlines of his choosing plus 5 wishes. What he do with it? Nothing. This MC has no hobbies doesn't train his wishes or play any games to pass the time. He is a lazy MC in a world of child killers during war time. And he does nothing. Apparently he has no reason to train. With all his memories of what is coming and being born with the best possible potential is not enough. The MC prefers to watch paint dry for 5 years.
There's many grammar and words errors that even a non native English speaker like me can see. The plot are the same as many naruto ff out There, Got hit by a truck, died, wish, and reincarnated. But this one is better than those ff. Pls don't drop[img=exp]
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haha this good. .. don't stop pls waiting next chap👌👌👌👌😍😍👍 [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=faceslap]
World background: Naruto Character design: Pretty much the cover, black eyes, black, hair. Now the Mc is pretty naive, hes doesnt exactly safe everyone but he is pretty much typical shonen main charcter. The other characters are alright, not too different but not exactly. Danzo is not dumb, but the novel makes him seem dumb. The way mikoto and Kushina was written is plain and needs more work, honeslty in general the women in naruto are conplety terrible so it kinda fits. Now the Main Character is pretty much a child who knows the future, he is dense, tells his secrects in combat, really is simple minded. The way to fix this is to add more complexty, give more goals other than protect and grow stronger.
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WQ: To be honest, it's better than a lot of works here (which isn't necessarily good), and in the relaxed reading I did, I didn't notice mistakes or anything that bothered me. US: very good. SD: You know, the usual. Nothing to comment. CD: good too. WB: well it's Naruto. And Naruto's WB isn't the best (far from the best) but who cares? Personal evaluation: "rise to the top" gives an idea of ascension, which we don't see when in the first chapter the protagonist gets 5 wishes, which, speaking of them, is the same as always. Powers that defy the power scale of the piece (since it's Naruto, it doesn't matter, the entire anime is broken in this regard), talents, etc. But again, who cares? I recommend reading, it's a lot of fun.
Really good. I don't really know how to describe it since there's no such outlier in this whole fanfic. Characters have appropriate personalities. Writing quality is rough for a few chapters but smoothens out around chapter 7. Hiruzen is an actual good guy who's willing to protect innocents rather than a good old manipulator. Danzo is as usual. Minato was sidelined after the first few chapters since the show is about MC, not him. He's just there to follow MC like a sidekick in future chapters. All in all, a nice naruto fanfic with average potential to be in rank 10. Readers should read it casually not minding the mistakes since the author is still on his craft lol. I'll give it 5 stars to show my support.
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-good idea, sub par execution -writing quality is 6/10 you just need to find a way to connect your wording -background story pretty average stuff mc dies reincarnated gets wishes you know the deal -if you can get over grammar mistakes then you will probably like this one good luck author
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Nice story (Don't dropped). Good novel. .................................................................. .................................................................. ..................................................................
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Now I am gonna be honest he gets 5 wishes which is fine but wishes for dumb stuff and he a dude who only spent 1 year with his dad and half of that was with his dad on missions who died and the mc did not 'expect' it in Naruto He has wishes that are considered OP in Naruto but all 5 wishes could have been better especially the last one Tbh this is just dumb and I quit at chapter 2 but overall better then most just Mc is dumb I am just giving this review based on my opinion
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i feel like ive lost brain cells trying to read this it also felt more like a guide line then a story and feels like a lot of words are missing
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A college educated adult gets inserted into a world of his choosing, at the time of his choosing, with the bloodlines of his choosing plus 5 wishes. What he do with it? Nothing. This MC has no hobbies doesn't train his wishes or play any games to pass the time. He is a lazy MC in a world of child killers during war time. And he does nothing. Apparently he has no reason to train. With all his memories of what is coming and being born with the best possible potential is not enough. The MC prefers to watch paint dry for 5 years.
There's many grammar and words errors that even a non native English speaker like me can see. The plot are the same as many naruto ff out There, Got hit by a truck, died, wish, and reincarnated. But this one is better than those ff. Pls don't drop[img=exp]
Heyyyo~ are you calling me? hwhehwheh btw nice book[img=recommend] ...................................................................................................................... ............. ............ .................... .................... .
haha this good. .. don't stop pls waiting next chap👌👌👌👌😍😍👍 [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=faceslap]
World background: Naruto Character design: Pretty much the cover, black eyes, black, hair. Now the Mc is pretty naive, hes doesnt exactly safe everyone but he is pretty much typical shonen main charcter. The other characters are alright, not too different but not exactly. Danzo is not dumb, but the novel makes him seem dumb. The way mikoto and Kushina was written is plain and needs more work, honeslty in general the women in naruto are conplety terrible so it kinda fits. Now the Main Character is pretty much a child who knows the future, he is dense, tells his secrects in combat, really is simple minded. The way to fix this is to add more complexty, give more goals other than protect and grow stronger.
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WQ: To be honest, it's better than a lot of works here (which isn't necessarily good), and in the relaxed reading I did, I didn't notice mistakes or anything that bothered me. US: very good. SD: You know, the usual. Nothing to comment. CD: good too. WB: well it's Naruto. And Naruto's WB isn't the best (far from the best) but who cares? Personal evaluation: "rise to the top" gives an idea of ascension, which we don't see when in the first chapter the protagonist gets 5 wishes, which, speaking of them, is the same as always. Powers that defy the power scale of the piece (since it's Naruto, it doesn't matter, the entire anime is broken in this regard), talents, etc. But again, who cares? I recommend reading, it's a lot of fun.
Really good. I don't really know how to describe it since there's no such outlier in this whole fanfic. Characters have appropriate personalities. Writing quality is rough for a few chapters but smoothens out around chapter 7. Hiruzen is an actual good guy who's willing to protect innocents rather than a good old manipulator. Danzo is as usual. Minato was sidelined after the first few chapters since the show is about MC, not him. He's just there to follow MC like a sidekick in future chapters. All in all, a nice naruto fanfic with average potential to be in rank 10. Readers should read it casually not minding the mistakes since the author is still on his craft lol. I'll give it 5 stars to show my support.
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-good idea, sub par execution -writing quality is 6/10 you just need to find a way to connect your wording -background story pretty average stuff mc dies reincarnated gets wishes you know the deal -if you can get over grammar mistakes then you will probably like this one good luck author
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Nice story (Don't dropped). Good novel. .................................................................. .................................................................. ..................................................................
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