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If you like reading mtl its for you Although its better than mtl the grammar is horrible and if u add the unexpected pacing Anyway i cant turn off my brain while reading this
hmm i dont think you understand what substitution jutsu is sigh... switching places with a someone's clone is not substitution jutsu lol.... if that were the case then uchiha sasuke's Rinnegan ability is useless. Since even genin can do it lol....please google or watch the anime the difference between substitution jutsu and uchiha sasuke's Rinnegan substitution. and get your fact straight.
what do u mean saying up for adoption ? if u giving it away can I have it I've been working on my own two chapters done not out yet and it's great book lovely good development
this is one of the few fanfiction I have read to the last as this story protagonist character is likable bcz he doesn't say too much about how he is this strong and his secrets and the most important thing he doesn't go around hypocrising characters of original Naruto though he sometimes in his thought says sakura is useless but it's in his thought and he doesn't do any unnecessary things bcz of this .......and his system is also likable it doesn't make the ml too much overpowered that the story becomes boring........and the most important part the girlfriend of our protagonist is not annoying at all so I'll say story is one of the best I have read!!!!!!!
O MC não tem personalidade, suas reações são muito mecânicas..... ainda precisa melhorar muito isso autor.....................................
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Well I seriously don't like the story.first of all author is so lazy to write the story that it feels lifeless. Second almost in all the naruto fan fics mc will get gamer system and will use his bonus points in body attributes instead of increasing chakra which is the base of all things in nija world.and same happened in this story. And author seriously lack knowledge about ninjutsu. And there is no point in joining any of main characters group.and he has a gamer system as his cheat but still need bloodline powers.and seriously substitution jutsu is not about swap place with others it's about showing that you are there while you really is not there by creating ellusion.
Its ok -average ............................................................................................................................................................................
Bruh some Part don’t Make sense like he’s Taliking to Naruto and then he’s talking to someone Else but never mentioned Who he was talking to, the author does this often that’s What’s Makes it bad
It is quite a good book just needs a bit more development overall but with the fact this is the author first time I will give it this much rating And let’s be honest no book is ever perfect
That was the worst thing i have read. The writhing is horrendous, mc is more like author is speking, the story is garbage, story moves like a rocket.
This is an okay novel. Let's talk about the pros and cons. The pros is that it's easily legible without too glaring of a literacy issue and that they update quite frequently but the major con in my opinion is that the author has no idea where he want to go and make it less enjoyable. Like how he switch from temari to Samui to temari again because he didn't know what he wanted or how he just puts up a vote on what's gonna happen next. It feels less like a thought out and we'll tighten novel to a mish mash of ideas he thinks are cool but doesn't know how to connect them
Welp I feel like the author kinda forces too many things like Mc being and team 7 as a 4 man squad when konoha has use the 3 man cell for years and wouldn't just change it for someone of mcs caliber who is a orphan and has no backing, also would Kakashi really just let his student end up in the bingo book with useless attention when his student used chicory and Kakashi could've perfectly covered it up as him using it, I also feel that the author is too focused on land of iron even forcing the chunky exams to for some reason be there when the Mc actually has options in the land of the leaf like improving Chakra metal for a sword, learning Chakra coating from asuna, kenjutsj from hatake, learn Kakashi anbu sword arts, maybe even get insight from tenten as he trains with her all the time, etc.
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this fanfic have some potential but author just to lazy to write decent character background and decent story, in my opinion you better think if this fanfic just story board from author and not the fanfic itself
is a generic story is nothing new. it's even more what these guys have with the gamer system, it's already boring it's always the same thing
let me ask the million dollar question first... Who is the love intrest.. I swear if its Hinata or Ino im gonna lose it.. sure Hinata is nice and all but meh.. ..Why not sakura..you can fix her up and make her thicc and you got a nice waifu who will leave everything for you.. Just make MC save her or something and make her berable like she is in Boruto..
Hey, I want to edit this. Send me an email at throwaway5N45e1 @ gmail Otherwise the initial read was jarring and very hard to understand, to the point I assume english is not your first language.
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Amazing storyline,love how you did the Mc’s own sage mode path and did not boot lick Naruto and Others. keep up the good work and you got my support [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
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Well in my humble opinion, of course without offending anyone who thinks differently from my point of view, but also by looking at this matter in a different way and without fighting and by trying to make it clear, and by considering each and everyone's opinion, I honestly believe that I completely forgot what I was going to say.
Writing a review for the Halloween Carnival Event. I haven't read this novel yet, but I'm sure it's great! Good luck to everyone with completing their quotas!
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If you like reading mtl its for you Although its better than mtl the grammar is horrible and if u add the unexpected pacing Anyway i cant turn off my brain while reading this
hmm i dont think you understand what substitution jutsu is sigh... switching places with a someone's clone is not substitution jutsu lol.... if that were the case then uchiha sasuke's Rinnegan ability is useless. Since even genin can do it lol....please google or watch the anime the difference between substitution jutsu and uchiha sasuke's Rinnegan substitution. and get your fact straight.
what do u mean saying up for adoption ? if u giving it away can I have it I've been working on my own two chapters done not out yet and it's great book lovely good development
this is one of the few fanfiction I have read to the last as this story protagonist character is likable bcz he doesn't say too much about how he is this strong and his secrets and the most important thing he doesn't go around hypocrising characters of original Naruto though he sometimes in his thought says sakura is useless but it's in his thought and he doesn't do any unnecessary things bcz of this .......and his system is also likable it doesn't make the ml too much overpowered that the story becomes boring........and the most important part the girlfriend of our protagonist is not annoying at all so I'll say story is one of the best I have read!!!!!!!
O MC não tem personalidade, suas reações são muito mecânicas..... ainda precisa melhorar muito isso autor.....................................
Say hello to the one who... Hello!! Are we going to review this? Yes, we are!! Can we just give it 5-star and left? No!! But we just did... LOL!!
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Well I seriously don't like the story.first of all author is so lazy to write the story that it feels lifeless. Second almost in all the naruto fan fics mc will get gamer system and will use his bonus points in body attributes instead of increasing chakra which is the base of all things in nija world.and same happened in this story. And author seriously lack knowledge about ninjutsu. And there is no point in joining any of main characters group.and he has a gamer system as his cheat but still need bloodline powers.and seriously substitution jutsu is not about swap place with others it's about showing that you are there while you really is not there by creating ellusion.
Its ok -average ............................................................................................................................................................................
Bruh some Part don’t Make sense like he’s Taliking to Naruto and then he’s talking to someone Else but never mentioned Who he was talking to, the author does this often that’s What’s Makes it bad
It is quite a good book just needs a bit more development overall but with the fact this is the author first time I will give it this much rating And let’s be honest no book is ever perfect
That was the worst thing i have read. The writhing is horrendous, mc is more like author is speking, the story is garbage, story moves like a rocket.
This is an okay novel. Let's talk about the pros and cons. The pros is that it's easily legible without too glaring of a literacy issue and that they update quite frequently but the major con in my opinion is that the author has no idea where he want to go and make it less enjoyable. Like how he switch from temari to Samui to temari again because he didn't know what he wanted or how he just puts up a vote on what's gonna happen next. It feels less like a thought out and we'll tighten novel to a mish mash of ideas he thinks are cool but doesn't know how to connect them
Welp I feel like the author kinda forces too many things like Mc being and team 7 as a 4 man squad when konoha has use the 3 man cell for years and wouldn't just change it for someone of mcs caliber who is a orphan and has no backing, also would Kakashi really just let his student end up in the bingo book with useless attention when his student used chicory and Kakashi could've perfectly covered it up as him using it, I also feel that the author is too focused on land of iron even forcing the chunky exams to for some reason be there when the Mc actually has options in the land of the leaf like improving Chakra metal for a sword, learning Chakra coating from asuna, kenjutsj from hatake, learn Kakashi anbu sword arts, maybe even get insight from tenten as he trains with her all the time, etc.
揭示劇透 this fanfic have some potential but author just to lazy to write decent character background and decent story, in my opinion you better think if this fanfic just story board from author and not the fanfic itself
is a generic story is nothing new. it's even more what these guys have with the gamer system, it's already boring it's always the same thing
let me ask the million dollar question first... Who is the love intrest.. I swear if its Hinata or Ino im gonna lose it.. sure Hinata is nice and all but meh.. ..Why not sakura..you can fix her up and make her thicc and you got a nice waifu who will leave everything for you.. Just make MC save her or something and make her berable like she is in Boruto..
Hey, I want to edit this. Send me an email at throwaway5N45e1 @ gmail Otherwise the initial read was jarring and very hard to understand, to the point I assume english is not your first language.
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Amazing storyline,love how you did the Mc’s own sage mode path and did not boot lick Naruto and Others. keep up the good work and you got my support [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
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Well in my humble opinion, of course without offending anyone who thinks differently from my point of view, but also by looking at this matter in a different way and without fighting and by trying to make it clear, and by considering each and everyone's opinion, I honestly believe that I completely forgot what I was going to say.
Writing a review for the Halloween Carnival Event. I haven't read this novel yet, but I'm sure it's great! Good luck to everyone with completing their quotas!
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