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One Word Review: Decent. I will start with the Pros and then go with the cons which may or may not help the author. Pros: Different approach to a pokemon fanfiction by making MC not know much about pokemon even if he is from Earth. Author is trying to build a personality to the characters which is good. Interesting choice of pokemon and author also does a good job of not just giving away hidden abilities like many fan fictions do. Cons: Slow Pace (too slow for it's own good). Approach is different but story seems plain and bland at places(cliche too). Advice to author: People who read Fanfic are very familiar with Pokemon so you don't need to explain in detail about every Pokemon or try to build a thing like what Pokemon type it is and stuff. For example, MC asking what type his 2nd Pokemon is and Nurse Joy trying to build a suspense for two chapters doesn't really interest readers, it seems like a drag. Because the one who is reading it already knows even though the MC doesn't. Slow pace novels might be a good build-up for characters and world background but you seem to get lost in the idea of keeping it slow for the sake of it. There are number of scenarios where I felt, it did not help the character or the story in any way. You really need to interest the readers even if it is paced slow, so try creating interesting scenarios to make up for it. If you don't like my review then ignore it, if you do, then it's good for your story too. Trust me, I wrote Pokemon fanfic on this site and I am not blindly advising. Anyways good luck with the improvements in the book. I will review it again if it changes ✌️
a good novel and the author is somehow funny i think this is the first fic i read that the mmc have a torchic and an axew seems interesting for me
Very good work! Author know his stuff, the mentality of people their age, the interaction on daily basis, Pokémon interactions and so much more. Overall a story to be sought, seeing how much Author put his thoughts in it. Also chapter length is a plus😁
So far pretty poggers. The characters are fleshed out but kinda cliche in some areas if you ask me. Don't really like pokemon nicknames but otherwise this is pretty good.
The novel is fine, but the character's name confused me in the early chapters, as I believed it was a clan, not a single character. [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
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Really good fanfic. The MC is relatable, together with the fact that the story doesn't immediately focuses on getting a starter but on how he has to go through exams was a good thing. Another plus point is good conversation with parents - usually in fanfic conversation with familial persons remain absent, so that was a nice thing to see.
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Keep it up autHor sama!!! [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
COntinue this it's nice it has a lot by lot i mean huge potential.its slow paced not some fanfic where mc starts his journey right of the bat with no explanation of the world background.That is why i started to like slow paced because it covers everything not just mc but other characters also get their moments.This story can be epic if it continues do not drop this
I'm worry your other work never last long, what happen? But I say this is something I love since pokemon was my fund memory since I was kid. good luck in this
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I'll take up the ride of shameless five-star creator review. Hello! I'm Arceus! The one and only. There's nothing for me to say specially important, but, I should say to you guys I'll update five chapters every week or twenty chapters every month. Don't expect for a mass release, I'll be going through this slow and steady, I want this fan fiction to live, unlike the two of my sleeping children, Kyogre and Groudon. Anyway, have a good day and enjoy reading, see ya.
Another one bites the dust ______________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
One Word Review: Decent. I will start with the Pros and then go with the cons which may or may not help the author. Pros: Different approach to a pokemon fanfiction by making MC not know much about pokemon even if he is from Earth. Author is trying to build a personality to the characters which is good. Interesting choice of pokemon and author also does a good job of not just giving away hidden abilities like many fan fictions do. Cons: Slow Pace (too slow for it's own good). Approach is different but story seems plain and bland at places(cliche too). Advice to author: People who read Fanfic are very familiar with Pokemon so you don't need to explain in detail about every Pokemon or try to build a thing like what Pokemon type it is and stuff. For example, MC asking what type his 2nd Pokemon is and Nurse Joy trying to build a suspense for two chapters doesn't really interest readers, it seems like a drag. Because the one who is reading it already knows even though the MC doesn't. Slow pace novels might be a good build-up for characters and world background but you seem to get lost in the idea of keeping it slow for the sake of it. There are number of scenarios where I felt, it did not help the character or the story in any way. You really need to interest the readers even if it is paced slow, so try creating interesting scenarios to make up for it. If you don't like my review then ignore it, if you do, then it's good for your story too. Trust me, I wrote Pokemon fanfic on this site and I am not blindly advising. Anyways good luck with the improvements in the book. I will review it again if it changes ✌️
a good novel and the author is somehow funny i think this is the first fic i read that the mmc have a torchic and an axew seems interesting for me
Very good work! Author know his stuff, the mentality of people their age, the interaction on daily basis, Pokémon interactions and so much more. Overall a story to be sought, seeing how much Author put his thoughts in it. Also chapter length is a plus😁
So far pretty poggers. The characters are fleshed out but kinda cliche in some areas if you ask me. Don't really like pokemon nicknames but otherwise this is pretty good.
The novel is fine, but the character's name confused me in the early chapters, as I believed it was a clan, not a single character. [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
promising novel 💥 promising novel 💥 promising novel 💥 promising novel 💥 promising novel 💥 promising novel 💥 promising novel 💥 promising novel 💥
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Really good fanfic. The MC is relatable, together with the fact that the story doesn't immediately focuses on getting a starter but on how he has to go through exams was a good thing. Another plus point is good conversation with parents - usually in fanfic conversation with familial persons remain absent, so that was a nice thing to see.
揭示劇透 Keep it up autHor sama!!! [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
COntinue this it's nice it has a lot by lot i mean huge potential.its slow paced not some fanfic where mc starts his journey right of the bat with no explanation of the world background.That is why i started to like slow paced because it covers everything not just mc but other characters also get their moments.This story can be epic if it continues do not drop this
I'm worry your other work never last long, what happen? But I say this is something I love since pokemon was my fund memory since I was kid. good luck in this
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揭示劇透 I'll take up the ride of shameless five-star creator review. Hello! I'm Arceus! The one and only. There's nothing for me to say specially important, but, I should say to you guys I'll update five chapters every week or twenty chapters every month. Don't expect for a mass release, I'll be going through this slow and steady, I want this fan fiction to live, unlike the two of my sleeping children, Kyogre and Groudon. Anyway, have a good day and enjoy reading, see ya.
Another one bites the dust ______________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________