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Im loving it. I wish there were more chapters but that will come with time, so i can wait on that. I hope it has a fulfilling ending. And it isnt dropped.
the novel was going great, with an MC that was strong and didn't hide like MC's do in many other fanfictions, however, the novel took a horrible turn when the previously mostly cold and ruthless MC started becoming a dog to other people. not recommended for people looking for an MC that can think by himself
So far so good, the development is good ............. . . . . . . . .I don't know what to write 😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁
I love the freaking book but I would also like to tell the authorto change the name or even if he just puts the Haary Potter tag thr amount of views for his nobcv el will greatly increase, the reason is that like many other stories it could be a HP character in another world such as MCU or something which leaves a bad taste in mouth so people don't read them. And it also seems half assed though it isn't.
Spoiler alert - dont read if you dont want to Look, if you can get past the many grammar mistakes and bad english, the story doesnt seem that bad and shows a lot of promise atleast until chapter 5 where bloodlines and a system is introduced and he decides to go with naruto bloodline and a few other things which in my opinion completly destroyed any potential this fiction had and turned it into one of the many horrible fan fictions on webnovel. P.S to the Author: ok so above was just my personal opinion on your story but from what ive seen of your work you have improved a lot over time and i want you to keep it up. also just wanted to say that most mash up fan fictions like what youve done here usually end up failing for one reason or another. though there are some people that like them. anyway keep up the good work
Crazy OP 7year old.. Has a system. Naruto bloodlines. If the last two were in the tags then I wouldnt have bothered reviewing this fic but did since naruto crossover or system werent in the tags..story had potential until the random system and naruto bloodline.
awesome fanfic! but can you add #HARRYPOTTER tag to the story? people will find it easier especially for people who use search bars like me.
Corto pero ginial sigue hasi.... ................................................................................................................................................
A really good version of an OP reincarnate in Harry Potter. Plot progression is going well with my preferred type of moral compass for an OC. Facts and theories about new concepts are believable and easy to understand. Overall a great budding ff and I hope it won't just get dropped.
Anyone can say that I've improved a lot since I started this story. And I'll be starting to edit the chapters as I release new ones. For this reason I will give myself a 5 star rating in advance. A shameless author I am, young padawan.
Fab this is a masterpiece, though with some gramma errors and definitely needs to be read. And incredible job Author-san and keep up the amazing job you've done so far 😊👍
Excelente. ................................................ ................................................................................................................................................................................................ ................................................................................................ ................................................ ................................................
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This fanfic is going nicely so far. My only issue with it is the grammar and the occasional wrong word (would be better if there was a proof reader). I look forward to seeing more chapters!
pues está bueno y más capítulos.. . . . . .. .. .. .. . . . .. . .. . .. . . . ... . . . . .. . . . . . 👍
i like IT. ........., .................................................................................. ........................
so far the story is decent, still waiting to see where it wants to go or if this story will manage to pass 50 chapters or fall like the rest xD.
Truly enjoy this story! Only worries is that the MC got stronger way too quickly while also seeming to have more emotionally attatchment to things. I am completly fine with family attatchment but I am worried that the story will become less like the first few chapters with all of his attatchments and lose his ruthlessness.
Shadow hunters I think would be a great idea honestly it would blend very well with HP. You might need to tweak the werewolves a bit since HP werewolf is a full moon type yet in shadow Hunter they do it at will. Other that that they would blend pretty well. As for vampire diaries I’d suggest just focusing on one at a time and if the story flows well maybe introduce another gradually don’t try to add too much at once. Just some advice and great story BTW.
It's a very good fic and the prologue by itself deserves 5 stars as it is excellent, The main plot is that the mc is a genius who grasps things very fast and doesnt try to hide anything like by the age 11 he has 2 companies in the wizard world
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Intriguing story so far (chapter 14). There are some grammar errors especially confusing *his and *her but nothing that affects the story too much. I really like the mc background and all of his inventions. I am not too keen about mc and Andromenda relationship because it seems she can walk all over the mc. I appreciate the route you are taking in the romance department, love the veelas OC you added. Thanks for sharing and keep up the good work🤘🇧🇷
good chapters and more chapters xD. *******************************************************************************************************************************************************************
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Nice. ...............................................................................................................................
Прекрасный фанфик. Несмотря на то что мне не нравится когда mc помогает Гарри и остальным, здесь это хорошо сделано , mc не помогает им просто так . 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
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Im loving it. I wish there were more chapters but that will come with time, so i can wait on that. I hope it has a fulfilling ending. And it isnt dropped.
the novel was going great, with an MC that was strong and didn't hide like MC's do in many other fanfictions, however, the novel took a horrible turn when the previously mostly cold and ruthless MC started becoming a dog to other people. not recommended for people looking for an MC that can think by himself
So far so good, the development is good ............. . . . . . . . .I don't know what to write 😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁
I love the freaking book but I would also like to tell the authorto change the name or even if he just puts the Haary Potter tag thr amount of views for his nobcv el will greatly increase, the reason is that like many other stories it could be a HP character in another world such as MCU or something which leaves a bad taste in mouth so people don't read them. And it also seems half assed though it isn't.
Spoiler alert - dont read if you dont want to Look, if you can get past the many grammar mistakes and bad english, the story doesnt seem that bad and shows a lot of promise atleast until chapter 5 where bloodlines and a system is introduced and he decides to go with naruto bloodline and a few other things which in my opinion completly destroyed any potential this fiction had and turned it into one of the many horrible fan fictions on webnovel. P.S to the Author: ok so above was just my personal opinion on your story but from what ive seen of your work you have improved a lot over time and i want you to keep it up. also just wanted to say that most mash up fan fictions like what youve done here usually end up failing for one reason or another. though there are some people that like them. anyway keep up the good work
Crazy OP 7year old.. Has a system. Naruto bloodlines. If the last two were in the tags then I wouldnt have bothered reviewing this fic but did since naruto crossover or system werent in the tags..story had potential until the random system and naruto bloodline.
awesome fanfic! but can you add #HARRYPOTTER tag to the story? people will find it easier especially for people who use search bars like me.
Corto pero ginial sigue hasi.... ................................................................................................................................................
A really good version of an OP reincarnate in Harry Potter. Plot progression is going well with my preferred type of moral compass for an OC. Facts and theories about new concepts are believable and easy to understand. Overall a great budding ff and I hope it won't just get dropped.
Anyone can say that I've improved a lot since I started this story. And I'll be starting to edit the chapters as I release new ones. For this reason I will give myself a 5 star rating in advance. A shameless author I am, young padawan.
Fab this is a masterpiece, though with some gramma errors and definitely needs to be read. And incredible job Author-san and keep up the amazing job you've done so far 😊👍
Excelente. ................................................ ................................................................................................................................................................................................ ................................................................................................ ................................................ ................................................
I believe I am become better in write But, I Just want give 5 stars in really SHAMELESS Author SHAMELESS Author SHAMELESS Author SHAMELESS Author SHAMELESS Author SHAMELESS Author SHAMELESS Author...
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This fanfic is going nicely so far. My only issue with it is the grammar and the occasional wrong word (would be better if there was a proof reader). I look forward to seeing more chapters!
pues está bueno y más capítulos.. . . . . .. .. .. .. . . . .. . .. . .. . . . ... . . . . .. . . . . . 👍
i like IT. ........., .................................................................................. ........................
so far the story is decent, still waiting to see where it wants to go or if this story will manage to pass 50 chapters or fall like the rest xD.
Truly enjoy this story! Only worries is that the MC got stronger way too quickly while also seeming to have more emotionally attatchment to things. I am completly fine with family attatchment but I am worried that the story will become less like the first few chapters with all of his attatchments and lose his ruthlessness.
Shadow hunters I think would be a great idea honestly it would blend very well with HP. You might need to tweak the werewolves a bit since HP werewolf is a full moon type yet in shadow Hunter they do it at will. Other that that they would blend pretty well. As for vampire diaries I’d suggest just focusing on one at a time and if the story flows well maybe introduce another gradually don’t try to add too much at once. Just some advice and great story BTW.
It's a very good fic and the prologue by itself deserves 5 stars as it is excellent, The main plot is that the mc is a genius who grasps things very fast and doesnt try to hide anything like by the age 11 he has 2 companies in the wizard world
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Intriguing story so far (chapter 14). There are some grammar errors especially confusing *his and *her but nothing that affects the story too much. I really like the mc background and all of his inventions. I am not too keen about mc and Andromenda relationship because it seems she can walk all over the mc. I appreciate the route you are taking in the romance department, love the veelas OC you added. Thanks for sharing and keep up the good work🤘🇧🇷
good chapters and more chapters xD. *******************************************************************************************************************************************************************
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Nice. ...............................................................................................................................
Прекрасный фанфик. Несмотря на то что мне не нравится когда mc помогает Гарри и остальным, здесь это хорошо сделано , mc не помогает им просто так . 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍