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everything would be fine, but this is literally a story written by a girl for girls, the hero is a girl from the very beginning, and don’t even look at the gender change. and yes, I will repeat once again, the hero is the most ordinary girl and expectedly stupid, having chosen an Uchiha and having a system, she does not want to develop genjutsu
good story! sad it didn't finish and didn't take full advantage of her gaming powers and that they got nerfed but still good overall!!! i say it's definitely worth the read!
Ill start with saying the authors knowledge of Naruto seems limited but easy to ignore it by just saying its AU so wont take that into account. Just may trigger some people. MC has some strange views on other characters which got a little annoying at times (Hiruzen Worship) which bordered on delusional. another is MC seems to hate/dislike Tsunade who she has never met for 'abandoning the village'. Seems a bit weird to think that a 50yr old vet of 2 wars, who had her whole clan and lover killed isnt allowed to retire but whatever. Also hates kakashi for not raising Naruto and being depressed.... yet ignores hiruzen and jiraiya dumping the kid on her (a 9-14yr old) honestly forgot her age at the time. also she has future knowledge so she should know originally hiruzen and jiraiya dumped him in a orphanage then hiruzen brainwashes naruto to be the loyal by saying to a 4yr old that the village wouldnt hate him if he becomes hokage..... She has future knowledge and seems determined to change the future but makes no preparations to do so and everything turns out the same anyway bar a few insert no name characters living. The story is a bit bland, i like her development of jutsu and her ms is cool. Power levels are a bit wack and confusing but who cares. Fights at the start were fun but devolved later on as it becomes a pokemon battle of jutsus with random (polite conversations) inbetween. MC used mega ultra fire ball of death.... it was super effective, Ninja used sword attack.... it was super effective..... "wow your good" "thanks you too" Both used heal......MC used super mega ultra fire ball of death... it was super effective .... ninja used sword attack... it was super effective.... "wowzers your cool" "oh your so polite you too, k bye" (dies/runsaway)
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********************Good work!*********************** ******************************************************* ****************And i need more!********************* *******************************************************
i mean what can you say to a very good almost close to real author perspective i think this is the way koshimoto(if that's correct) meant for the characters to be displayed on his original book and the element's of the gamer and the butterfly effects and not over using just one power i think for all things to say it's very very good and thanks for giving us this story (FF) and keep up the good work and good luck in your work cheer's [img=recommend][img=recommend]
i hate gender benders and it just simply copy and paste [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
great novel. but you have a tendency to change scenes without separating them with a later time skip ect and it kind of gets confusing when one minute shes with her family next shes in battle. love the novel though. also i have to ask. will she jump universes when the naruto time line is done?
10/10 with the gamer power I have tried reading others with the same power but end up dropping most of them because they made them really overpowering that it might as well be something else or lopsided by adding stuff that dosen't belong into the world. 10/10 as a naruto fanfiction, from character building to the background were it makes sense to me on how it all is turning out I have read a lot of naruto fanfictions this is definitely a great one. only gave a 4/5 in updates frequency because I'm impatient and want more, but I love the chapter length and how well written it is. so in my opinion a 10 overall
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everything is great except the genderbend, that's when things get difficult for me........................................... ..............
Good story don’t listen to the others, this story is clearly classed in the girl category they should have checked and the genderbend is ok like after the first two chapter it’s not even mentioned he was a guy.
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simply a copy and past it's okay.. .......... .............................................................................................
I liked this story, the only major problem is the genderbender but the first time i read this i didnt even remember she was a guy at all lol. I feel sorry for those that are straying from this because of the gb or the pairing with Roshi because they are missing something.
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despite how the other people feel about the MC marrying a guy idc. It's different and to me that's all I care about. People are annoying, so ignore them.
I mean I like it buy apparently she marries a guy which I would be fine if she married a girl but since she married a guy it's guy cause she was a guy originally
It was good and all that system and stuff, but immediately dropped it after author decided to Genderbent the MC.. its a huge turn off for a potential fic but I will read it if the author gonna do something about it like giving him a reward after the mission with a Gender switch pill lol
The fact that you genderbended the character turn me off from reading the book hlpojjldkdnejeoendlsosnsnakkssksiMedmskeoeoekmsmsMdndjsjjsnsmsmems
So, I've read this fic a long time ago, tho it was on hiatus near the end only ended recently. Honestly, considering this is a Gamer Naruto SI Fic, this is truly one of the best ones out there, tho it does stick to the Canon for the most part with our SI making changes with different results. The dungeon runs can get a bit tedious but overall its not rlly that concerning just the part near the chunin exams near the end of the fic was the one I hated. So, on to the complaints about the SI marrying a guy, in this case Roshi which I was very surprised by, nvr seen the dude being a prominent part in any fic, except being beaten lol. But, I think a lot of people are missing the point. The character is genderbent, yes but its just basically something thats mentioned at the start of the fic when he's transmigrated as a young girl, basically a baby. And, is rarely or at all mentioned again. While, yes I get why some ppl might dislike this, its not rlly an important part of the fic not to mention this is not a typical gender bender or transmigration fic, remember this is a reincarnation so the main character was transmigrated as a girl and lived a whole new life in a basically which is a feudal society with a mother who wanted her to marry and give her grandkids. So, basically, it's a realistic take. Depending on how old he was when he died, he might have lived close to or even surpassed his life as a guy.
揭示劇透 everything would be fine, but this is literally a story written by a girl for girls, the hero is a girl from the very beginning, and don’t even look at the gender change. and yes, I will repeat once again, the hero is the most ordinary girl and expectedly stupid, having chosen an Uchiha and having a system, she does not want to develop genjutsu
good story! sad it didn't finish and didn't take full advantage of her gaming powers and that they got nerfed but still good overall!!! i say it's definitely worth the read!
Ill start with saying the authors knowledge of Naruto seems limited but easy to ignore it by just saying its AU so wont take that into account. Just may trigger some people. MC has some strange views on other characters which got a little annoying at times (Hiruzen Worship) which bordered on delusional. another is MC seems to hate/dislike Tsunade who she has never met for 'abandoning the village'. Seems a bit weird to think that a 50yr old vet of 2 wars, who had her whole clan and lover killed isnt allowed to retire but whatever. Also hates kakashi for not raising Naruto and being depressed.... yet ignores hiruzen and jiraiya dumping the kid on her (a 9-14yr old) honestly forgot her age at the time. also she has future knowledge so she should know originally hiruzen and jiraiya dumped him in a orphanage then hiruzen brainwashes naruto to be the loyal by saying to a 4yr old that the village wouldnt hate him if he becomes hokage..... She has future knowledge and seems determined to change the future but makes no preparations to do so and everything turns out the same anyway bar a few insert no name characters living. The story is a bit bland, i like her development of jutsu and her ms is cool. Power levels are a bit wack and confusing but who cares. Fights at the start were fun but devolved later on as it becomes a pokemon battle of jutsus with random (polite conversations) inbetween. MC used mega ultra fire ball of death.... it was super effective, Ninja used sword attack.... it was super effective..... "wow your good" "thanks you too" Both used heal......MC used super mega ultra fire ball of death... it was super effective .... ninja used sword attack... it was super effective.... "wowzers your cool" "oh your so polite you too, k bye" (dies/runsaway)
揭示劇透 ********************Good work!*********************** ******************************************************* ****************And i need more!********************* *******************************************************
i mean what can you say to a very good almost close to real author perspective i think this is the way koshimoto(if that's correct) meant for the characters to be displayed on his original book and the element's of the gamer and the butterfly effects and not over using just one power i think for all things to say it's very very good and thanks for giving us this story (FF) and keep up the good work and good luck in your work cheer's [img=recommend][img=recommend]
i hate gender benders and it just simply copy and paste [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
great novel. but you have a tendency to change scenes without separating them with a later time skip ect and it kind of gets confusing when one minute shes with her family next shes in battle. love the novel though. also i have to ask. will she jump universes when the naruto time line is done?
10/10 with the gamer power I have tried reading others with the same power but end up dropping most of them because they made them really overpowering that it might as well be something else or lopsided by adding stuff that dosen't belong into the world. 10/10 as a naruto fanfiction, from character building to the background were it makes sense to me on how it all is turning out I have read a lot of naruto fanfictions this is definitely a great one. only gave a 4/5 in updates frequency because I'm impatient and want more, but I love the chapter length and how well written it is. so in my opinion a 10 overall
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everything is great except the genderbend, that's when things get difficult for me........................................... ..............
Good story don’t listen to the others, this story is clearly classed in the girl category they should have checked and the genderbend is ok like after the first two chapter it’s not even mentioned he was a guy.
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simply a copy and past it's okay.. .......... .............................................................................................
I liked this story, the only major problem is the genderbender but the first time i read this i didnt even remember she was a guy at all lol. I feel sorry for those that are straying from this because of the gb or the pairing with Roshi because they are missing something.
揭示劇透 despite how the other people feel about the MC marrying a guy idc. It's different and to me that's all I care about. People are annoying, so ignore them.
I mean I like it buy apparently she marries a guy which I would be fine if she married a girl but since she married a guy it's guy cause she was a guy originally
It was good and all that system and stuff, but immediately dropped it after author decided to Genderbent the MC.. its a huge turn off for a potential fic but I will read it if the author gonna do something about it like giving him a reward after the mission with a Gender switch pill lol
The fact that you genderbended the character turn me off from reading the book hlpojjldkdnejeoendlsosnsnakkssksiMedmskeoeoekmsmsMdndjsjjsnsmsmems
So, I've read this fic a long time ago, tho it was on hiatus near the end only ended recently. Honestly, considering this is a Gamer Naruto SI Fic, this is truly one of the best ones out there, tho it does stick to the Canon for the most part with our SI making changes with different results. The dungeon runs can get a bit tedious but overall its not rlly that concerning just the part near the chunin exams near the end of the fic was the one I hated. So, on to the complaints about the SI marrying a guy, in this case Roshi which I was very surprised by, nvr seen the dude being a prominent part in any fic, except being beaten lol. But, I think a lot of people are missing the point. The character is genderbent, yes but its just basically something thats mentioned at the start of the fic when he's transmigrated as a young girl, basically a baby. And, is rarely or at all mentioned again. While, yes I get why some ppl might dislike this, its not rlly an important part of the fic not to mention this is not a typical gender bender or transmigration fic, remember this is a reincarnation so the main character was transmigrated as a girl and lived a whole new life in a basically which is a feudal society with a mother who wanted her to marry and give her grandkids. So, basically, it's a realistic take. Depending on how old he was when he died, he might have lived close to or even surpassed his life as a guy.
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