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Alright, as an author, I didn't write the first review and waited. This is the tenth review and will get me my official rating. I rate it a five star because I selfishly want the highest rating however I encourage honest reviews even if they can be sometimes discouraging. That's it, I hope all of you enjoy the fanfic.
I have read until chapter 86 and I'm just a normal reader so this is just my view : first thing first I like the interaction between Ja Sun(MC) and Other characters be it his friend(to be ) or teacher and enemies, secondly the story also flow smoothly with additional jokes that make me laugh for a minute or two, the pace of the story is quite good for me not too fast not too slow, the author keep answering my questions if there's something that I forgot from Douluo Dalu's novels so I don't have to reread Douluo Dalu to know some details. the side characters development is quite splendid, ah.. as a warning this is an AU so their personalities is not quite the same, but I think this is ok, since this story starts a decade before Canon, and we don't know how the original characters(like people from spirit hall, or Tang clan, etc) from Soul Land 1 behave a decade before Canon, so for me I like it, it gives more personality and characters development since MC enter their live. as for something that quite a put off happen the earliest to middle chapters is about MC that didn't kill his enemies, or refrain from killing his enemies if there's no immediate benefit from his Traits or something else, MC is not someone that keep killing his enemies like usual Chinese MC to cut the root, but you could read Author's Notes in synopsis about that as it concerning MC's background from previous live and his dislike that he said in earliest chapter, there will be a little flash back that will explaining about that later so just read until 80 chapter I promise that you will get Hooked.
I love this novel. Read it multiple times, but author can you please pay some attention to this too? ofcourse I'm not asking for anything great, just be sure to finish it some day and not just leave it hanging.
Too many power ups to enemies, I guess not to nerf the MC, but that's the same thing.
the book is amazing really. though some times the information dump is BIG and u need some time to digest it as it can be overwhelming overall amazing story and passing.on a side note though do any of you know similar stories in soul land or other cultivation worlds preferably fanfics!![img=strong]
This fanfic has one of the most interesting, hilarious, spontaneous, and meticulous MCs in all of fiction, who is undoubtedly at the top of my MC tier list as of currently. The main contributing factor may be that he isn't as bloodthirsty as the other MCs across fanfics or other wuxia-related novels, but it is also due to the respectful yet shameless, while determined, nature of the MC. This novel is pure liquid gold. The elements are well portrayed, and I couldn't ask for more even if I tried. Although the grammar may be rough around the edges in only a few places, if at all, overall, the feel is conveyed thoroughly.
So I'm 100 chapters in and If I have to say something then it's a really good read , it's very logical version of soul land where the characters aren't brain dead licking dogs like in og soul land. A yin personality isn't gentle at all but it's ok.The author spends a lot of effort into character building and it's really good. The only reason I didn't give a 5 star is that I didnt't like the MC personality sometimes. Other than that it's a really good book give it a try you won't be disappointed atleast read 20 chapters
can someone tell me, who is in Harem??? can someone tell me, who is in Harem??? can someone tell me, who is in Harem???
Although the story is entertaining, it is full of flaws, for example, the author does not warn all the AUs that exist, he only warns about the age of the characters,... there is also the issue that the MC is a masochist. . . . I can believe that someone who wants to be strong can be a bit of a masochist since all exercise hurts, but when you see the gain you are happy and motivated and that was something I liked about the mc, but I never thought that he would also be a masochist in the relationship (when they are intimate), and that lowered it a lot, apart from the little growth of the mc (mentally) more was expected from the mc at the beginning (because he seemed like a political genius, and other modern forms of murder), the story seems good, but you focus a lot outside and not on the mc, since most of them spend their time behind Ah Ji or system missions, they don't have their lives, I liked the interaction with Ah ji at first, but little by little it made my head spin . head and it no longer seemed funnier to me, but hey... if you like a story that has these characteristics and good writing, I recommend it but since this is not to my taste I'm leaving, although if I come back in the future, the classification You can change. [Google Translate]
Have good writing quality and update timeIt's a pity that the character design is too bad, the world design is bad, the plot development is forced and seems slow Too much nonsense and poor naming, but I still appreciate the author for the quality of his writing and dedication. But sorry I can only read until chapter 250, I've been bored for too long and not eager to continue
worst dd ff, clice plot, unlikable mc ,double identity (bs hiding identity clice) maybe 1000 identity, overal boriing ff
the author clearly knows how to write, he wrote hundreds of chapters, but as a lay soul land reader it is very difficult to follow this entire storyline. I respect writers who have written hundreds of chapters, but for someone who isn't too into comics or the original soul land novels, this is too confusing for me.
Fking amazing book, everything has explained how and why. A very good plot to back it up. Highly recommended
It's a hobby of mine to give other author story a 5 star rating, since as an author myself, i know how much joy does a good review brought to the writer. Also, as far as the story goes, it is good, but it's not my cup of tea.
Can you please put the Harem tag when it happens in the story? Got deep into the story and found out its harem when its not mentioned upfront of the book info
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I like it but imma come back to it in cause it’s hard for me to read long stories x x xx x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x xx x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x xx x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x
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Ive only ever read the first book for Douluo Dalu, but this fic is pretty stellar, incredibly developed, and quite long which is always a plus for binge readers. only a little under a hundred chapters in, but I wanted to leave a review for this story. You do need some knowledge of the original content to be able to understand much of this story, but watching a couple hours of the donghua on you tube will likely suffice.
GREAT FF!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ................................................................................................................................
Just so you know I really love this novel it’s great but it has a really big flaw and it’s how you are writing the character build up for the mc it’s kinda like he isn’t even part of his own story due to the fact that you gave to many character personalities/references from abridged series like kirito from something witty entertainment and alucard and cell from team fourstar in a way it gave your mc multiple or shifting personalities that basically get rid or overshadow any character growth and this might be one of the reasons for your block??? Another thing is that even though the mc is building relationships he has no connection to the world/universe ( the closest thing he has to a home is his cabin in the forest.Your mc is a homeless rich man🤣)he is in kinda of feels like he’s holding a grudge to it??? Anyway you can ignore this mainly because I can’t put my finger on what is really off with this novel but hopefully trying to address these problems might help inspire some chapters
This novel story is Great and it respects the original work in my opinion, for me, this is enought for a five............................................
Explores the morality and settings of the world. The MC possesses a dynamic character that meshes well in the story. Including an unique Gold Finger that combines ability and versatility.
Muito bom, melhor fanfic de douluo dalu que já li, gostei muito da fanfic é do estilo do autor, vou procurar suas outras obras, recomendo que liam
And above All Thanks for writing these magnificent pieces, I am a fan of both your works. I wish I could give you an Immortal Herb as a gift, just so you could Gain Ultimate strength and Continue writing. :)
GREAT FF!!!!!!!!! ... but MOOOAAAR LEMON!!!!!!!!!!!!! ................................................................................................................
Previously I rated this novel pretty low, but after the first 20 chapters in which the mc was pretty unlikeable and even suicidal I found the story really interesting. Even if the mc sometimes gets dumber when he sees big rewards with his trait.
It's a great book... The first bits was a little confusing without the context provided but it was clarified later bit by bit. The execution of providing the context of the past of the MC is magnificent. It was released bit by bit and is making more and more sense as you know a piece. It doesn't overwhelm the reader with information that they will forget and make it an enjoyable read. The main character has a great personality. He has hidden pasts that is mentioned bit by bit and makes him look complicated but also simple. He is a deep and complete character. Even without context to the original Book, it would be enjoyable to read. The humor of this story is well timed and actually funny. It will most likely a hit more that a miss. So it's pretty funny. I also love that the mc's world is different from our world and he doesn't know anything about Soul Land so their interactions are more life like and natural. To be honest, I can't find a fault on this book.
Alright, as an author, I didn't write the first review and waited. This is the tenth review and will get me my official rating. I rate it a five star because I selfishly want the highest rating however I encourage honest reviews even if they can be sometimes discouraging. That's it, I hope all of you enjoy the fanfic.
I have read until chapter 86 and I'm just a normal reader so this is just my view : first thing first I like the interaction between Ja Sun(MC) and Other characters be it his friend(to be ) or teacher and enemies, secondly the story also flow smoothly with additional jokes that make me laugh for a minute or two, the pace of the story is quite good for me not too fast not too slow, the author keep answering my questions if there's something that I forgot from Douluo Dalu's novels so I don't have to reread Douluo Dalu to know some details. the side characters development is quite splendid, ah.. as a warning this is an AU so their personalities is not quite the same, but I think this is ok, since this story starts a decade before Canon, and we don't know how the original characters(like people from spirit hall, or Tang clan, etc) from Soul Land 1 behave a decade before Canon, so for me I like it, it gives more personality and characters development since MC enter their live. as for something that quite a put off happen the earliest to middle chapters is about MC that didn't kill his enemies, or refrain from killing his enemies if there's no immediate benefit from his Traits or something else, MC is not someone that keep killing his enemies like usual Chinese MC to cut the root, but you could read Author's Notes in synopsis about that as it concerning MC's background from previous live and his dislike that he said in earliest chapter, there will be a little flash back that will explaining about that later so just read until 80 chapter I promise that you will get Hooked.
I love this novel. Read it multiple times, but author can you please pay some attention to this too? ofcourse I'm not asking for anything great, just be sure to finish it some day and not just leave it hanging.
Too many power ups to enemies, I guess not to nerf the MC, but that's the same thing.
the book is amazing really. though some times the information dump is BIG and u need some time to digest it as it can be overwhelming overall amazing story and passing.on a side note though do any of you know similar stories in soul land or other cultivation worlds preferably fanfics!![img=strong]
This fanfic has one of the most interesting, hilarious, spontaneous, and meticulous MCs in all of fiction, who is undoubtedly at the top of my MC tier list as of currently. The main contributing factor may be that he isn't as bloodthirsty as the other MCs across fanfics or other wuxia-related novels, but it is also due to the respectful yet shameless, while determined, nature of the MC. This novel is pure liquid gold. The elements are well portrayed, and I couldn't ask for more even if I tried. Although the grammar may be rough around the edges in only a few places, if at all, overall, the feel is conveyed thoroughly.
So I'm 100 chapters in and If I have to say something then it's a really good read , it's very logical version of soul land where the characters aren't brain dead licking dogs like in og soul land. A yin personality isn't gentle at all but it's ok.The author spends a lot of effort into character building and it's really good. The only reason I didn't give a 5 star is that I didnt't like the MC personality sometimes. Other than that it's a really good book give it a try you won't be disappointed atleast read 20 chapters
can someone tell me, who is in Harem??? can someone tell me, who is in Harem??? can someone tell me, who is in Harem???
Although the story is entertaining, it is full of flaws, for example, the author does not warn all the AUs that exist, he only warns about the age of the characters,... there is also the issue that the MC is a masochist. . . . I can believe that someone who wants to be strong can be a bit of a masochist since all exercise hurts, but when you see the gain you are happy and motivated and that was something I liked about the mc, but I never thought that he would also be a masochist in the relationship (when they are intimate), and that lowered it a lot, apart from the little growth of the mc (mentally) more was expected from the mc at the beginning (because he seemed like a political genius, and other modern forms of murder), the story seems good, but you focus a lot outside and not on the mc, since most of them spend their time behind Ah Ji or system missions, they don't have their lives, I liked the interaction with Ah ji at first, but little by little it made my head spin . head and it no longer seemed funnier to me, but hey... if you like a story that has these characteristics and good writing, I recommend it but since this is not to my taste I'm leaving, although if I come back in the future, the classification You can change. [Google Translate]
Have good writing quality and update timeIt's a pity that the character design is too bad, the world design is bad, the plot development is forced and seems slow Too much nonsense and poor naming, but I still appreciate the author for the quality of his writing and dedication. But sorry I can only read until chapter 250, I've been bored for too long and not eager to continue
worst dd ff, clice plot, unlikable mc ,double identity (bs hiding identity clice) maybe 1000 identity, overal boriing ff
the author clearly knows how to write, he wrote hundreds of chapters, but as a lay soul land reader it is very difficult to follow this entire storyline. I respect writers who have written hundreds of chapters, but for someone who isn't too into comics or the original soul land novels, this is too confusing for me.
Fking amazing book, everything has explained how and why. A very good plot to back it up. Highly recommended
It's a hobby of mine to give other author story a 5 star rating, since as an author myself, i know how much joy does a good review brought to the writer. Also, as far as the story goes, it is good, but it's not my cup of tea.
Can you please put the Harem tag when it happens in the story? Got deep into the story and found out its harem when its not mentioned upfront of the book info
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I like it but imma come back to it in cause it’s hard for me to read long stories x x xx x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x xx x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x xx x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x x
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Ive only ever read the first book for Douluo Dalu, but this fic is pretty stellar, incredibly developed, and quite long which is always a plus for binge readers. only a little under a hundred chapters in, but I wanted to leave a review for this story. You do need some knowledge of the original content to be able to understand much of this story, but watching a couple hours of the donghua on you tube will likely suffice.
GREAT FF!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ................................................................................................................................
Just so you know I really love this novel it’s great but it has a really big flaw and it’s how you are writing the character build up for the mc it’s kinda like he isn’t even part of his own story due to the fact that you gave to many character personalities/references from abridged series like kirito from something witty entertainment and alucard and cell from team fourstar in a way it gave your mc multiple or shifting personalities that basically get rid or overshadow any character growth and this might be one of the reasons for your block??? Another thing is that even though the mc is building relationships he has no connection to the world/universe ( the closest thing he has to a home is his cabin in the forest.Your mc is a homeless rich man🤣)he is in kinda of feels like he’s holding a grudge to it??? Anyway you can ignore this mainly because I can’t put my finger on what is really off with this novel but hopefully trying to address these problems might help inspire some chapters
This novel story is Great and it respects the original work in my opinion, for me, this is enought for a five............................................
Explores the morality and settings of the world. The MC possesses a dynamic character that meshes well in the story. Including an unique Gold Finger that combines ability and versatility.
Muito bom, melhor fanfic de douluo dalu que já li, gostei muito da fanfic é do estilo do autor, vou procurar suas outras obras, recomendo que liam
And above All Thanks for writing these magnificent pieces, I am a fan of both your works. I wish I could give you an Immortal Herb as a gift, just so you could Gain Ultimate strength and Continue writing. :)
GREAT FF!!!!!!!!! ... but MOOOAAAR LEMON!!!!!!!!!!!!! ................................................................................................................
Previously I rated this novel pretty low, but after the first 20 chapters in which the mc was pretty unlikeable and even suicidal I found the story really interesting. Even if the mc sometimes gets dumber when he sees big rewards with his trait.
It's a great book... The first bits was a little confusing without the context provided but it was clarified later bit by bit. The execution of providing the context of the past of the MC is magnificent. It was released bit by bit and is making more and more sense as you know a piece. It doesn't overwhelm the reader with information that they will forget and make it an enjoyable read. The main character has a great personality. He has hidden pasts that is mentioned bit by bit and makes him look complicated but also simple. He is a deep and complete character. Even without context to the original Book, it would be enjoyable to read. The humor of this story is well timed and actually funny. It will most likely a hit more that a miss. So it's pretty funny. I also love that the mc's world is different from our world and he doesn't know anything about Soul Land so their interactions are more life like and natural. To be honest, I can't find a fault on this book.