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so far this seems like the perfect novel for me within the first 20 chapters, and I look forward to reading more in the future and definitely think this story deserves a lot more love then it's getting right now.
The mc is childish at the start(he is a child), he does suffer a lot. His main weapon is a spear. He is innocent too. He has a system and an extra trait. He also has an above-average but not that strong talent
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Lovable main character the character describes to be feminine but still, it's good and depressing especially at first chap. Well written and good. Hope you post more chapter.
Can you continue developing this novel its very interisting to read this and it is very good, so I hope you continue this novel. I really like reading it.
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very good start.. 37 chapters ,huge potential .. spear if confirmed.. very little known about system or direction... but very well written..
Ai... autor-san que começo triste, até chorei, o protagonista perdeu os oio e foi jogado no lixo :( rezo para que o autor-san faça o clã se arrepender de ter feito isso e depois o exterminar aí sim var sarar meu coração :) [img = recomendar]
Although it does tkae the abandoned son cliche, the author does a great job of making you hate the mc’s family, so much so that I waana punch my IPad into pieces. I obviously hope that the MC grows to be ruthless and not “mentally defected” and yeah, since its in its infancy, I can’t say much other than that this will be added to my library. A sugestion, you could give the MC an earth elemental War Soul, at the end it is still a suggestion. I’m pretty sure you’ve got your own thing planned. Good luck and keep the quality up
All you lack is writing quality, apart from that you have everything. Myah seems like a good character although his design is quite feminine ;) Keep up the good work. I've read 3 chapters till now and apart from the grammar, everything is nice.
Hello, Hello. Your author ChibiSage is here. Please, feels free to leave a comment or just anything. I just couldn't shake off the idea of starting this one. I will update this review later once more chapters are uploaded. Watch out and take care. [img=recommend]
so far this seems like the perfect novel for me within the first 20 chapters, and I look forward to reading more in the future and definitely think this story deserves a lot more love then it's getting right now.
The mc is childish at the start(he is a child), he does suffer a lot. His main weapon is a spear. He is innocent too. He has a system and an extra trait. He also has an above-average but not that strong talent
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Lovable main character the character describes to be feminine but still, it's good and depressing especially at first chap. Well written and good. Hope you post more chapter.
Can you continue developing this novel its very interisting to read this and it is very good, so I hope you continue this novel. I really like reading it.
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very good start.. 37 chapters ,huge potential .. spear if confirmed.. very little known about system or direction... but very well written..
Ai... autor-san que começo triste, até chorei, o protagonista perdeu os oio e foi jogado no lixo :( rezo para que o autor-san faça o clã se arrepender de ter feito isso e depois o exterminar aí sim var sarar meu coração :) [img = recomendar]
Although it does tkae the abandoned son cliche, the author does a great job of making you hate the mc’s family, so much so that I waana punch my IPad into pieces. I obviously hope that the MC grows to be ruthless and not “mentally defected” and yeah, since its in its infancy, I can’t say much other than that this will be added to my library. A sugestion, you could give the MC an earth elemental War Soul, at the end it is still a suggestion. I’m pretty sure you’ve got your own thing planned. Good luck and keep the quality up
All you lack is writing quality, apart from that you have everything. Myah seems like a good character although his design is quite feminine ;) Keep up the good work. I've read 3 chapters till now and apart from the grammar, everything is nice.
Hello, Hello. Your author ChibiSage is here. Please, feels free to leave a comment or just anything. I just couldn't shake off the idea of starting this one. I will update this review later once more chapters are uploaded. Watch out and take care. [img=recommend]