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yey another crackfic, Mc 5 Years old ... Another ash ( Pokemon ) , doenst grow up :....................................................................
MC tells everything to Naruto (their parents, kurama etc, it means bye for me, i just give ⭐ 😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌
the story development is great but at first it seemed a little rocky but the improvement was steadily getting better. the MC name was a little weird to me but it grew on me and I love the world background truly a world of unlimited possibilities so hope this helps you. all around five stars!!! 🤩
This story has a lot of potential and with a little editing here and there for the grammar it could have been better. Unfortunately the author advanced his plot way too quickly and with the MC being only 5 years old became where too illogical to read. Many times I've read a certain chapter, and in it the is MC making certain actions with the surrounding people reacting to it, and it's all good and fine, even enjoyable, until I remember the MC is only 5 years old and then I start questioning the ridiculousness in this fanfic even though it is a Naruto fanfiction... So for those who can ignore the logical twist of a 5 year old opening businesses everywhere and leading strategically his clan with everyone simply accepting it, than this fanfic is for you. And if you are like me where this simply give you an headache then this is definitely not for you.
I read up to chapter 189 and I couldn't follow the story anymore, it's not bad, but it's not good either, the MC becomes very op without much explanation, there are a lot of gaps in the script that make everything much worse, and that's my opinion (SORRY FOR THE GRAMMATICAL ERRORS, I'M USING GOOGLE TO TRANSLATE)
The MC is arrogant and stupid. The author greatly overestimates credibility of 5 year olds to the point where it gets absurd way too many times.
Oh dear god, this is the cringiest most cliched self insert Mary Sue MC I have ever seen in my life. The story is so incredibly bad I just can't believe it, the only reason I kept reading it's because I wanted to know how bad it could get, and boy oh boy, I didn't get disappointed, this rabbit hole is deep like the sea. This is essentially a very bad written self insert power fantasy of some guy who gets everything handed to him. I'm not kidding, he literally completes a mission that gives him ''Indra's Chakra'', by just merely eating a pill he obtains at the beginning of this ''game'' for just existing. This is so incredibly bad I can't describe it. It's entertaining, in a sense that it gives you a sense of wonder of how bad it can get. But not because it's well written.
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Love it!! Give me more plz!!! Its been fantastic so far looking forwards to the ending. Ive been binge reading it and may even start form the beginng againg. Keep up the great story plz!!!
I don't even know what exactly to say... But man you have created your own world and perspective within a world flooded with several versions. Simply magnificent [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
The main character is pretty op, and he doesn't abuse his cheat other than the first couple of times. This novel has it's own plot and isn't a copy paste of other naruto fanfic, the original world problems were dealt with and a new boss/villain/evil group was introduced. Overall, although the mc is OP but he isn't the strongest and has to sweat real hard to train and try to beat the final boss.
Tuvo un comienzo prometedor, pero tocó fondo muy rápidamente. Parece una historia china, pero esas tienen una mejor explicación relacionada con el mundo. demasiados agujeros en la trama todos los ninjas que son genios se vuelven estúpidos el mc se mete con la trama (explica su conocimiento de la historia a todos) y no pasa nada
Just keep reading man, its not that bad coz for me author this fanfic can describe or make characters almost like original characters(like in anime or manga) and author can make MC have PROPER CONVERSATION with other characters(You know what I mean if you had read enough FanFic) not like almost fanfic were MC just had short conversation with characters and characters from that fanfic will convinced and became MC bestfriend, follower, slave, etc. And the worst of it there are characters who out of Him/Her original characters.
Most illogical fic I have ever read in my life. How can you make it so bad? Makes no sense please stop
Great story buildup and the only reason I gave 4 stars is because I used microsoft edge browser 'read aloud' and whenever it comes to the name of the MC I keep hearing "BAKayaro" instead of "bakorio". It is really painful to keep hearing the MC being called stupid every time his name is readaloud. Also, I noticed from some chapters the MC is sometimes called Yuki. in chapters 256,225,226,205,204 just to name a few. CONCLUSION: this great story probably with an awesome character name as Yuki but later author changed it to BAKArio. unless you read it manually its ok, but using readaloud Bakorio as a character name is just sounds horrible which will destroy my experience. you probably dont get what i am trying to say so let me illustrate from readaloud at max speed voice selection microsoft david. example: "baka-yaro is the best" (is it insulting/sarcasm/praise) "what does brother Baka-yaro think?" what is your name? " I am called uchiha baka-yaro" ............................. sigh, because it is a great story i really dont want to bring down the rating thats why i forced myself to give the 4 stars but in terms of reading experience (using microsoft edge readaloud voice selection microsoft david) at max speed , I pity the MC to be called stupid in every chapter i know bakorio doesnt stands for stupid maybe this is all KILLER B's fault because he always says bakayaro in the anime and just coincidently our MC has a name that sound very similar to killer B's rap.sigh
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hey your novel is very good!!! i enjoyed it!!! i hope there will be more updates, keep the spirit of making this novel \`~`/ 🤩❤❤ and for those who blaspheme this novel, please don't be like that!! at least if you want to criticize don't be accompanied by blasphemy it will only make the author down!! Next time give encouragement so that the author is enthusiastic to finish this novel!!! ✊😤
this is a poorly made phantasy without in-depth knowledge about naruto story. so many mistakes in fact for example: 1). in ROOT the members dont have any tongue seal. 2). Danzo is incredibly nerfed with lower iq.(acceptable) 3). Itachi and shisui are made brain dead idiot through character int stats nerf. 4). World characters reaction doesn't seem realistic but dumb.( it feels like dead characters without any internal struggle but a "YES MAN" and from Xianxia/chinese faceslap writing style format. 5). The gamer system is only to fill plot hole is understandable but poorly implemented. 6).Most importantly it does not have the naruto worldly vibe. But more leaning towards Chinese Xianxia/wuxia family fighting for power vibe. 7). the gamer system and MC growth heavily dependant on plot hole. Wherever any inconsistency found readers can only attribute everything on the system. Highly non balance and non realistic. After all the cringe /unrealistic dialogue, it makes me wonder since this writing style absolutely cannot be from the naruto world then why not just blow everything out of proportion? my advice is if you really cannot write an immersive naruto self insert then DONT. It would be better to stick with the gamer system for the world background generated by gamer system. THIS WAY>>the author can make as many cringy/unrealistic diaglouge more adaptable for readers.
Great start. I hope it updates faster so I can read more. Very much appreciated the novel because it's a great read. Wonderful writing Keep it up Author-san.
you know the story is bad since reading the first two chapters it made me feel nauseated , what kind of weed does the author smoke , the story is trassh ( I poisoned myself by reading the next 50 chapters🤮🖕)
Save and load= no stake. This kind of power are perfect if your story have mistery elements, which this story doesn't have because mc are reincarnated to world he already know.
Thaaaaaaaanksssssss................ Thaaaaaaaanksssssss................ Thaaaaaaaanksssssss................ Thaaaaaaaanksssssss................
Ya know the best part of this novel is realism. I have read and watched the og Naruto and after reading this novel, I felt og Naruto a bit sugarcoated. I felt or we could actually feel the despair and desperation of the MC to save his village and his loved ones in this accursed world. Like this fanfic actually rises many questions like what gave Itachi the ri8 to murder his clan? He had best intentions but isn't the uchiha innocent too. When obito's past was revealed, we sympathized with him. But to be honest why did he slaughter his entire clan,the clan he was born into just coz crush died. Instead of killing Kakashi which would actually make sense coz rin died by hands (accident or not) he went and slaughtered his clan, massacred innocents from konoha etc etc. This fanfic just shows everything in its true light from the perspective of MC
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Hello, I wanted to ask if you can make a kakashi theory with the bakoria system, it would seem very interesting to me to see how this system goes with a genius who in the anime did not unleash his full potential or well that's what I think
Thanks............................ Thanks............................ Thanks............................ Thanks............................ Thanks............................ Thanks............................
A really really great story!! I love it!!! I love it how MC/Bakorio not just strong from beginning (every story need a process not just suddenly be an OP character).. I like his relationship with his loved one (I unserstand he have a trust issues from his lived before, so it's understanable his character to others he doesn't know) 😍😍😍 Can't wait to see the next chapter.. Great job author san 😁😁👍👍👍
yey another crackfic, Mc 5 Years old ... Another ash ( Pokemon ) , doenst grow up :....................................................................
MC tells everything to Naruto (their parents, kurama etc, it means bye for me, i just give ⭐ 😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌
the story development is great but at first it seemed a little rocky but the improvement was steadily getting better. the MC name was a little weird to me but it grew on me and I love the world background truly a world of unlimited possibilities so hope this helps you. all around five stars!!! 🤩
This story has a lot of potential and with a little editing here and there for the grammar it could have been better. Unfortunately the author advanced his plot way too quickly and with the MC being only 5 years old became where too illogical to read. Many times I've read a certain chapter, and in it the is MC making certain actions with the surrounding people reacting to it, and it's all good and fine, even enjoyable, until I remember the MC is only 5 years old and then I start questioning the ridiculousness in this fanfic even though it is a Naruto fanfiction... So for those who can ignore the logical twist of a 5 year old opening businesses everywhere and leading strategically his clan with everyone simply accepting it, than this fanfic is for you. And if you are like me where this simply give you an headache then this is definitely not for you.
I read up to chapter 189 and I couldn't follow the story anymore, it's not bad, but it's not good either, the MC becomes very op without much explanation, there are a lot of gaps in the script that make everything much worse, and that's my opinion (SORRY FOR THE GRAMMATICAL ERRORS, I'M USING GOOGLE TO TRANSLATE)
The MC is arrogant and stupid. The author greatly overestimates credibility of 5 year olds to the point where it gets absurd way too many times.
Oh dear god, this is the cringiest most cliched self insert Mary Sue MC I have ever seen in my life. The story is so incredibly bad I just can't believe it, the only reason I kept reading it's because I wanted to know how bad it could get, and boy oh boy, I didn't get disappointed, this rabbit hole is deep like the sea. This is essentially a very bad written self insert power fantasy of some guy who gets everything handed to him. I'm not kidding, he literally completes a mission that gives him ''Indra's Chakra'', by just merely eating a pill he obtains at the beginning of this ''game'' for just existing. This is so incredibly bad I can't describe it. It's entertaining, in a sense that it gives you a sense of wonder of how bad it can get. But not because it's well written.
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Love it!! Give me more plz!!! Its been fantastic so far looking forwards to the ending. Ive been binge reading it and may even start form the beginng againg. Keep up the great story plz!!!
I don't even know what exactly to say... But man you have created your own world and perspective within a world flooded with several versions. Simply magnificent [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
The main character is pretty op, and he doesn't abuse his cheat other than the first couple of times. This novel has it's own plot and isn't a copy paste of other naruto fanfic, the original world problems were dealt with and a new boss/villain/evil group was introduced. Overall, although the mc is OP but he isn't the strongest and has to sweat real hard to train and try to beat the final boss.
Tuvo un comienzo prometedor, pero tocó fondo muy rápidamente. Parece una historia china, pero esas tienen una mejor explicación relacionada con el mundo. demasiados agujeros en la trama todos los ninjas que son genios se vuelven estúpidos el mc se mete con la trama (explica su conocimiento de la historia a todos) y no pasa nada
Just keep reading man, its not that bad coz for me author this fanfic can describe or make characters almost like original characters(like in anime or manga) and author can make MC have PROPER CONVERSATION with other characters(You know what I mean if you had read enough FanFic) not like almost fanfic were MC just had short conversation with characters and characters from that fanfic will convinced and became MC bestfriend, follower, slave, etc. And the worst of it there are characters who out of Him/Her original characters.
Most illogical fic I have ever read in my life. How can you make it so bad? Makes no sense please stop
Great story buildup and the only reason I gave 4 stars is because I used microsoft edge browser 'read aloud' and whenever it comes to the name of the MC I keep hearing "BAKayaro" instead of "bakorio". It is really painful to keep hearing the MC being called stupid every time his name is readaloud. Also, I noticed from some chapters the MC is sometimes called Yuki. in chapters 256,225,226,205,204 just to name a few. CONCLUSION: this great story probably with an awesome character name as Yuki but later author changed it to BAKArio. unless you read it manually its ok, but using readaloud Bakorio as a character name is just sounds horrible which will destroy my experience. you probably dont get what i am trying to say so let me illustrate from readaloud at max speed voice selection microsoft david. example: "baka-yaro is the best" (is it insulting/sarcasm/praise) "what does brother Baka-yaro think?" what is your name? " I am called uchiha baka-yaro" ............................. sigh, because it is a great story i really dont want to bring down the rating thats why i forced myself to give the 4 stars but in terms of reading experience (using microsoft edge readaloud voice selection microsoft david) at max speed , I pity the MC to be called stupid in every chapter i know bakorio doesnt stands for stupid maybe this is all KILLER B's fault because he always says bakayaro in the anime and just coincidently our MC has a name that sound very similar to killer B's rap.sigh
Amazging amazing amazing amazingingAmazging amazing amazing amazingingAmazging amazing amazing amazingingAmazging amazing amazing amazinging
hey your novel is very good!!! i enjoyed it!!! i hope there will be more updates, keep the spirit of making this novel \`~`/ 🤩❤❤ and for those who blaspheme this novel, please don't be like that!! at least if you want to criticize don't be accompanied by blasphemy it will only make the author down!! Next time give encouragement so that the author is enthusiastic to finish this novel!!! ✊😤
this is a poorly made phantasy without in-depth knowledge about naruto story. so many mistakes in fact for example: 1). in ROOT the members dont have any tongue seal. 2). Danzo is incredibly nerfed with lower iq.(acceptable) 3). Itachi and shisui are made brain dead idiot through character int stats nerf. 4). World characters reaction doesn't seem realistic but dumb.( it feels like dead characters without any internal struggle but a "YES MAN" and from Xianxia/chinese faceslap writing style format. 5). The gamer system is only to fill plot hole is understandable but poorly implemented. 6).Most importantly it does not have the naruto worldly vibe. But more leaning towards Chinese Xianxia/wuxia family fighting for power vibe. 7). the gamer system and MC growth heavily dependant on plot hole. Wherever any inconsistency found readers can only attribute everything on the system. Highly non balance and non realistic. After all the cringe /unrealistic dialogue, it makes me wonder since this writing style absolutely cannot be from the naruto world then why not just blow everything out of proportion? my advice is if you really cannot write an immersive naruto self insert then DONT. It would be better to stick with the gamer system for the world background generated by gamer system. THIS WAY>>the author can make as many cringy/unrealistic diaglouge more adaptable for readers.
Great start. I hope it updates faster so I can read more. Very much appreciated the novel because it's a great read. Wonderful writing Keep it up Author-san.
you know the story is bad since reading the first two chapters it made me feel nauseated , what kind of weed does the author smoke , the story is trassh ( I poisoned myself by reading the next 50 chapters🤮🖕)
Save and load= no stake. This kind of power are perfect if your story have mistery elements, which this story doesn't have because mc are reincarnated to world he already know.
Thaaaaaaaanksssssss................ Thaaaaaaaanksssssss................ Thaaaaaaaanksssssss................ Thaaaaaaaanksssssss................
Ya know the best part of this novel is realism. I have read and watched the og Naruto and after reading this novel, I felt og Naruto a bit sugarcoated. I felt or we could actually feel the despair and desperation of the MC to save his village and his loved ones in this accursed world. Like this fanfic actually rises many questions like what gave Itachi the ri8 to murder his clan? He had best intentions but isn't the uchiha innocent too. When obito's past was revealed, we sympathized with him. But to be honest why did he slaughter his entire clan,the clan he was born into just coz crush died. Instead of killing Kakashi which would actually make sense coz rin died by hands (accident or not) he went and slaughtered his clan, massacred innocents from konoha etc etc. This fanfic just shows everything in its true light from the perspective of MC
揭示劇透 Hello, I wanted to ask if you can make a kakashi theory with the bakoria system, it would seem very interesting to me to see how this system goes with a genius who in the anime did not unleash his full potential or well that's what I think
Thanks............................ Thanks............................ Thanks............................ Thanks............................ Thanks............................ Thanks............................
A really really great story!! I love it!!! I love it how MC/Bakorio not just strong from beginning (every story need a process not just suddenly be an OP character).. I like his relationship with his loved one (I unserstand he have a trust issues from his lived before, so it's understanable his character to others he doesn't know) 😍😍😍 Can't wait to see the next chapter.. Great job author san 😁😁👍👍👍
it is good, I liked it. can you tell me where can I get the raw