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J'apprécie beaucoup cette fanfiction il faut continuer à arrêter de prendre la tête avec les trucs c'est pas les commentaires qui font la fiction c'est toi qui décide donc peu importe ce qu'on te dit fais là pour toi et ceux qui aiment ils aimeront et ceux qui aiment pas tant pis
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Uma ótima fanfic um MC simples [img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp]
More!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!?
i mean... its pretty bad i agree with what Sin_of_Greed said ................................................................................................................
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THIS IS VERY GOOD!!! ........................................................................................................................................................
Well the author already said that the mc is not a normal saiyan and i Always say work smarter not harder.
Well the author said it in his synopsis, but I didn't really take it to heart. For those like me who thought the author is exaggerating when he calls his MC a Simp, he's not exaggerating! More like he's understating it! The MC is a huge, dumb, unrepentant Simp! I would rate the story 1 star if the author hadn't mentioned anything about that in the synopsis, but I guess all I can say is it's my fault for not taking the warning seriously...
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Well the author said it in his synopsis, but I didn't really take it to heart. For those like me who thought the author is exaggerating when he calls his MC a Simp, he's not exaggerating! More like he's understating it! The MC is a huge, dumb, unrepentant Simp! I would rate the story 1 star if the author hadn't mentioned anything about that in the synopsis, but I guess all I can say is it's my fault for not taking the warning seriously...
An ordinary stupid hero who does stupid things and prays for the heroes of the canon. Infuriating moments as he says at the beginning (did not read further) with Bulma Goku... I see a Weakling - a Man and not a warrior Sayian . Does the hero get it ? the fruit of the tree of life and the seed. The seed destroys, and could just find/wish for a planet without intelligent beings and grow there.The fruits give an increase of *15 on a permanent basis. instead of training to the maximum and then using them, Raditz eats 4 with Goku(this happens almost immediately upon arrival on Earth when they are both negligibly weak). Reading the author's comments, you understand that the story will go as the author wants, contrary to logic. Translated from Google
This is good. but can you change the cover image? it's pretty ugly. ............................................................................................................................................
Interesting dbz story.👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
well this novel is a pure BS reasons for this mc reincarnated in body of raditz just before he went to earth for Goku and has the memories of his new life too and when he meets bulma he acts as a harmonal introvert teen blushing and shuttering while talking to her(author forgot the he is a sayian not a human) second bulma's power went from 12BP to 400 something in a like weeks (BS) potential unlock by elder it went to 12000 and then eating a might fruit it increases insanely to 300,000 just wwow a total BS second the author is a super cun t If u disagree with something and ask him he will just insults u and tells to just stop reading hence I would say it's not worth reading a lit bit
Muito bom mesmo.,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,, . . . . . . . ..
Don't drop this dude!! I like this fanfic [img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins]
Bro the story is going perfectly to me. I just think the story might be a little quick and (probably a spoiler) | | | ⬇️ some gaining a little too much strength to me but everything is fine.
masterpiece! dont drop this, pls! <3 <33333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333
very good fanfic 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
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honestly I love this fic i was at first attracted to the raditz being the MC even with a oc as raditz but i stayed for the romance and raditz x Bulma Bulma was always my 3rd fav character and I always hated how underplayed raditz as a character was love this story tho kinda wish it was longer but can't complain 💜
J'apprécie beaucoup cette fanfiction il faut continuer à arrêter de prendre la tête avec les trucs c'est pas les commentaires qui font la fiction c'est toi qui décide donc peu importe ce qu'on te dit fais là pour toi et ceux qui aiment ils aimeront et ceux qui aiment pas tant pis
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Author, not MC with complex stupid hero. [img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp]
Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo Ñordo
Uma ótima fanfic um MC simples [img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp]
More!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!?
i mean... its pretty bad i agree with what Sin_of_Greed said ................................................................................................................
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THIS IS VERY GOOD!!! ........................................................................................................................................................
Well the author already said that the mc is not a normal saiyan and i Always say work smarter not harder.
Well the author said it in his synopsis, but I didn't really take it to heart. For those like me who thought the author is exaggerating when he calls his MC a Simp, he's not exaggerating! More like he's understating it! The MC is a huge, dumb, unrepentant Simp! I would rate the story 1 star if the author hadn't mentioned anything about that in the synopsis, but I guess all I can say is it's my fault for not taking the warning seriously...
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Well the author said it in his synopsis, but I didn't really take it to heart. For those like me who thought the author is exaggerating when he calls his MC a Simp, he's not exaggerating! More like he's understating it! The MC is a huge, dumb, unrepentant Simp! I would rate the story 1 star if the author hadn't mentioned anything about that in the synopsis, but I guess all I can say is it's my fault for not taking the warning seriously...
An ordinary stupid hero who does stupid things and prays for the heroes of the canon. Infuriating moments as he says at the beginning (did not read further) with Bulma Goku... I see a Weakling - a Man and not a warrior Sayian . Does the hero get it ? the fruit of the tree of life and the seed. The seed destroys, and could just find/wish for a planet without intelligent beings and grow there.The fruits give an increase of *15 on a permanent basis. instead of training to the maximum and then using them, Raditz eats 4 with Goku(this happens almost immediately upon arrival on Earth when they are both negligibly weak). Reading the author's comments, you understand that the story will go as the author wants, contrary to logic. Translated from Google
This is good. but can you change the cover image? it's pretty ugly. ............................................................................................................................................
Interesting dbz story.👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
well this novel is a pure BS reasons for this mc reincarnated in body of raditz just before he went to earth for Goku and has the memories of his new life too and when he meets bulma he acts as a harmonal introvert teen blushing and shuttering while talking to her(author forgot the he is a sayian not a human) second bulma's power went from 12BP to 400 something in a like weeks (BS) potential unlock by elder it went to 12000 and then eating a might fruit it increases insanely to 300,000 just wwow a total BS second the author is a super cun t If u disagree with something and ask him he will just insults u and tells to just stop reading hence I would say it's not worth reading a lit bit
Muito bom mesmo.,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,, . . . . . . . ..
Don't drop this dude!! I like this fanfic [img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins]
Bro the story is going perfectly to me. I just think the story might be a little quick and (probably a spoiler) | | | ⬇️ some gaining a little too much strength to me but everything is fine.
masterpiece! dont drop this, pls! <3 <33333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333
very good fanfic 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
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very good fanfic 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
honestly I love this fic i was at first attracted to the raditz being the MC even with a oc as raditz but i stayed for the romance and raditz x Bulma Bulma was always my 3rd fav character and I always hated how underplayed raditz as a character was love this story tho kinda wish it was longer but can't complain 💜