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sorry i just cant deal with so much unnecesary additional info that am 90% sure even the author will forget as it's seemingly useless monologue and stuff only got to chapter 7 but I've reach my limit to nonsense maybe it does get better later on .but i can tell you those 7 chapters if the overdrawn monologue and unecersary interactions are removed could very well become 1 chapter slightly longer but 1 chapter like there's literally a calibration chapter that explains how the calibration work as if I've never played a game before in my life
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I started reading it about a week ago and since then I have been hooked. I really enjoyed the story and the character development and story background were really well thought of. I cant wait to see more!
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It's pretty good so far and it is looking promising. I have nothing to complain, besides the fact that the sister apparently knew that the MC was getting bullied but didn't do anything about it, because she couldn't do anything???? What
I have to say.. Wow! I love the character development and the banter! The conversations are so natural and so interesting!! I need more chapters! I need them now!!
Hey Author, good day for writing! We are mainly looking for adventurous novels (Fantasy, Sci-fi, Paranormal Urban, Action, Thriller/Suspense, Game Fiction).If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to email amanda.ringdom*@*gmail.com (delete *). You might be our next top writer!
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One of the best books I've read here... The writing quality is INCREDIBLE! I was amazed by the vocabulary of the writer. I didn't find any grammatical errors as well. For me, it was flawless. The way the story is narrated makes this a page-turner. The world background is creative. I was already hooked when I read the class descriptions. [img=recommend] I'm a fan of cultivation novels. It was definitely a good pick for me. Keep up the good work author! I wish you the best of luck!
Y'know I already have an inkling what's gonna happen here, even after just reading the first chapter. Not blood-related siblings have been the craze lately, so on the romance front, this sounds fun lol Other than that, I just had a slight problem with word repetition, especially names, but that's not a major problem. Pretty good, over-all.
I don't normally read novels that talk about multverse but I found the plot of this interesting and I liked the character of Mc, from what I could read I saw that he will have a good construction of the world, already add the collection
this is going to be my first review after checking out 3 chapters of the story. so far pretty good we expect the typical vr gaming background if you have read one before. i just dont like the mc character pretty coward . he got this old classmates bullies for some reason he is afraid of them and my imagine is running wild because a normal guy would only be afraid of physical bullying since base on my opinion and info i have read so far, he is someone who does not care about social life. somewhat of a recluse quiet child .If i were the mc i should at least try to do some self defense he is 5 feet 9! if i am going to bully him as a 5 6 when i was 14 years old back then i will at least think twice regardless of his physical type. the bully trope is getting old now a days since we know that typical quiet child is not afraid to pull a trigger to kill his classmates like in america hahahah. i want to see our 5 9 mc grow some backbone if he is being physically intimdiated because as i mention i dont see the mc getting affected by words or insult to have that kind trauma. so i say it is pretty unrealistic to me as a common citizen so far very good introduction. i think i need to read more chapters before updating this review but it at least got me hookup and the story is interesting.
If you like VRMMORPG novels, this is an epic one to check out. The idea of the plot is genius and the grammar is great. I totally recommend! Keep it up author[img=recommend]
Wow. What a story! Such an intriguing plot, even if this is not my piece of cake. I love the author's style and enjoyed the novel so far. Keep up the good work and never stop believing! :D
This is a well-written story! After I read chapter 1, I'm hooked! So I continue reading until chapter 5. Again, I am captivated by the character development and the author's well-written scenarios of what's going on. This might be the second MMRPG genre novel I have read so far, and it's good! I will not get bored waiting for updates since it has 90+ chapters already. Kudos to you! I love it.
This story was interestingly unique along with the plot! The synopsis itself, was enough to get me to start reading the story! I havent read much novels based on video games and all but this one was interesting enough to get me hooked and the book cover is looking good!! The story writing was smooth and the world building was great!! Overall, the story was well written and has the potantial to soar~!! I hope to see more of this, continue with the awesome work of yours author!! ✨😌
You can already see from the first few sentences, that is this an amazingly high quality and well-written novel. I honestly have no complaints, wish I did so that I could have more to write about but no, this is just too good for words to even describe. The narrative is perfect, so much so that I'm taking notes on how you manage to narrate, while having such a clear description of this world with a build-up of suspense and intrigue.
Your style is really inspiring. The way story is started seems interesting and unique from others. It's sad to hear about his parent's death as this factor will affect his life. Really interesting concept.
I've read only a few chapters. The first chapter really got me hooked. I haven't tried many novels based on games and all. But, this seems pretty interesting. I'm not a fan of the first-person perspective yet this one got me hooked by the way the protagonist told his story. Gonna read more!!!
We don't need to read at least 10 chapters to love it, the synopsis is enough! [img=recommend]💕 I got already hooked up by your great synopsis, so I'll definitely keep your novel in my library! [img=recommend] The writing quality is really good, it informs readers about things (world background, characters, etc.) as the story goes. 😊🙂 It's amazing that the MC's feelings are felt by your writing style. The right emotions and situations are there too. 💕💕 Good luck with the wsa! 😊🙂🙌🏻
I'm not usually in to video game stories, but this might just change my mind! Great and world building, an interesting plot and smooth writing. I enjoyed what I've read quite a lot. Good job, author! (:
I just wanna say I read up until The reunion i just personally dont like when that happens and especially since she got stuck in the game to i love novels when the is cold asf so i liked The story until when i Dropped it at the reunion chap i personally think this book is ok but im sure plenty of other people will like it
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Classic Game lit system story and the best part about the story is the game itself. It is very intriguing. The writing is awesome, lucid and flows well. The story pacing is pretty good, and I have shared my feedback with the author about story development in the chapter comment. When the game starts, it is worth the wait. The world building is done beautifully, both in the premise of the game and inside the game itself. The MC is very likeable, boy next door, easy to connect with. The great thing is despite this being a first person, the author doesn't have any unnecessary internal monologues which can be super annoying. Expositions are done expertly. Great work, author. I will keep it in my library simply because I wanna take notes, as a fellow system writer, lol. Please keep writing. <3
My friend, I like the MC a lot. He is serious when he got to be and funny when he can. The writing and world-building up till chapter 5 have been great. I'll add it to my library to continue reading it. Keep it up. Also... Ichigo? Really?
It's not often that I get to read something like this. Being honest, I haven't read a single one so far (on webnovel), so you could say this is my first! I really liked how the story started, and as it went forward I was completely hooked. The basic storyline of the novel is already pretty intriguing. I appreciate the attention author has given to vocabulary and use of humor. I still haven't finished this yet, but so far I am impressed!! And would also like to recommend it to anyone who is thinking of reading it!
It is cool and amazing story, your written so neat and i like your novel Author. Highly recommended, auto collect to my library. Regards from author of Princess Azalea [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
The main idea of the story itself is very intriguing and interesting! The charcter development and story development are very good and amazing. Totally worth a read! Great book author!
Not my favorite Genre to read but it was worth the read. The story started at a slow pace, but at a good pace. Everything is described vividly and personally I don't speak game but the author described everything perfectly.
Honestly an unbelievable experience, thus far - I'm incredibly impressed with the character development and design, with the main character's backstory being very detailed. This is genuinely a masterpiece that people should consider reading, even if the fantasy genre isn't your thing.
even though it looks completed it is not and he’s also still charging coins for something that is not completed and currently paused on production to do another book what are you could’ve just continued the bookies currently writing
sorry i just cant deal with so much unnecesary additional info that am 90% sure even the author will forget as it's seemingly useless monologue and stuff only got to chapter 7 but I've reach my limit to nonsense maybe it does get better later on .but i can tell you those 7 chapters if the overdrawn monologue and unecersary interactions are removed could very well become 1 chapter slightly longer but 1 chapter like there's literally a calibration chapter that explains how the calibration work as if I've never played a game before in my life
揭示劇透 I started reading it about a week ago and since then I have been hooked. I really enjoyed the story and the character development and story background were really well thought of. I cant wait to see more!
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It's pretty good so far and it is looking promising. I have nothing to complain, besides the fact that the sister apparently knew that the MC was getting bullied but didn't do anything about it, because she couldn't do anything???? What
I have to say.. Wow! I love the character development and the banter! The conversations are so natural and so interesting!! I need more chapters! I need them now!!
Hey Author, good day for writing! We are mainly looking for adventurous novels (Fantasy, Sci-fi, Paranormal Urban, Action, Thriller/Suspense, Game Fiction).If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to email amanda.ringdom*@*gmail.com (delete *). You might be our next top writer!
Pretty good I think ! ! ! Pretty good I think ! ! ! Pretty good I think ! ! !
One of the best books I've read here... The writing quality is INCREDIBLE! I was amazed by the vocabulary of the writer. I didn't find any grammatical errors as well. For me, it was flawless. The way the story is narrated makes this a page-turner. The world background is creative. I was already hooked when I read the class descriptions. [img=recommend] I'm a fan of cultivation novels. It was definitely a good pick for me. Keep up the good work author! I wish you the best of luck!
Y'know I already have an inkling what's gonna happen here, even after just reading the first chapter. Not blood-related siblings have been the craze lately, so on the romance front, this sounds fun lol Other than that, I just had a slight problem with word repetition, especially names, but that's not a major problem. Pretty good, over-all.
I don't normally read novels that talk about multverse but I found the plot of this interesting and I liked the character of Mc, from what I could read I saw that he will have a good construction of the world, already add the collection
this is going to be my first review after checking out 3 chapters of the story. so far pretty good we expect the typical vr gaming background if you have read one before. i just dont like the mc character pretty coward . he got this old classmates bullies for some reason he is afraid of them and my imagine is running wild because a normal guy would only be afraid of physical bullying since base on my opinion and info i have read so far, he is someone who does not care about social life. somewhat of a recluse quiet child .If i were the mc i should at least try to do some self defense he is 5 feet 9! if i am going to bully him as a 5 6 when i was 14 years old back then i will at least think twice regardless of his physical type. the bully trope is getting old now a days since we know that typical quiet child is not afraid to pull a trigger to kill his classmates like in america hahahah. i want to see our 5 9 mc grow some backbone if he is being physically intimdiated because as i mention i dont see the mc getting affected by words or insult to have that kind trauma. so i say it is pretty unrealistic to me as a common citizen so far very good introduction. i think i need to read more chapters before updating this review but it at least got me hookup and the story is interesting.
If you like VRMMORPG novels, this is an epic one to check out. The idea of the plot is genius and the grammar is great. I totally recommend! Keep it up author[img=recommend]
Wow. What a story! Such an intriguing plot, even if this is not my piece of cake. I love the author's style and enjoyed the novel so far. Keep up the good work and never stop believing! :D
This is a well-written story! After I read chapter 1, I'm hooked! So I continue reading until chapter 5. Again, I am captivated by the character development and the author's well-written scenarios of what's going on. This might be the second MMRPG genre novel I have read so far, and it's good! I will not get bored waiting for updates since it has 90+ chapters already. Kudos to you! I love it.
This story was interestingly unique along with the plot! The synopsis itself, was enough to get me to start reading the story! I havent read much novels based on video games and all but this one was interesting enough to get me hooked and the book cover is looking good!! The story writing was smooth and the world building was great!! Overall, the story was well written and has the potantial to soar~!! I hope to see more of this, continue with the awesome work of yours author!! ✨😌
You can already see from the first few sentences, that is this an amazingly high quality and well-written novel. I honestly have no complaints, wish I did so that I could have more to write about but no, this is just too good for words to even describe. The narrative is perfect, so much so that I'm taking notes on how you manage to narrate, while having such a clear description of this world with a build-up of suspense and intrigue.
Your style is really inspiring. The way story is started seems interesting and unique from others. It's sad to hear about his parent's death as this factor will affect his life. Really interesting concept.
I've read only a few chapters. The first chapter really got me hooked. I haven't tried many novels based on games and all. But, this seems pretty interesting. I'm not a fan of the first-person perspective yet this one got me hooked by the way the protagonist told his story. Gonna read more!!!
We don't need to read at least 10 chapters to love it, the synopsis is enough! [img=recommend]💕 I got already hooked up by your great synopsis, so I'll definitely keep your novel in my library! [img=recommend] The writing quality is really good, it informs readers about things (world background, characters, etc.) as the story goes. 😊🙂 It's amazing that the MC's feelings are felt by your writing style. The right emotions and situations are there too. 💕💕 Good luck with the wsa! 😊🙂🙌🏻
I'm not usually in to video game stories, but this might just change my mind! Great and world building, an interesting plot and smooth writing. I enjoyed what I've read quite a lot. Good job, author! (:
I just wanna say I read up until The reunion i just personally dont like when that happens and especially since she got stuck in the game to i love novels when the is cold asf so i liked The story until when i Dropped it at the reunion chap i personally think this book is ok but im sure plenty of other people will like it
揭示劇透 Classic Game lit system story and the best part about the story is the game itself. It is very intriguing. The writing is awesome, lucid and flows well. The story pacing is pretty good, and I have shared my feedback with the author about story development in the chapter comment. When the game starts, it is worth the wait. The world building is done beautifully, both in the premise of the game and inside the game itself. The MC is very likeable, boy next door, easy to connect with. The great thing is despite this being a first person, the author doesn't have any unnecessary internal monologues which can be super annoying. Expositions are done expertly. Great work, author. I will keep it in my library simply because I wanna take notes, as a fellow system writer, lol. Please keep writing. <3
My friend, I like the MC a lot. He is serious when he got to be and funny when he can. The writing and world-building up till chapter 5 have been great. I'll add it to my library to continue reading it. Keep it up. Also... Ichigo? Really?
It's not often that I get to read something like this. Being honest, I haven't read a single one so far (on webnovel), so you could say this is my first! I really liked how the story started, and as it went forward I was completely hooked. The basic storyline of the novel is already pretty intriguing. I appreciate the attention author has given to vocabulary and use of humor. I still haven't finished this yet, but so far I am impressed!! And would also like to recommend it to anyone who is thinking of reading it!
It is cool and amazing story, your written so neat and i like your novel Author. Highly recommended, auto collect to my library. Regards from author of Princess Azalea [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
The main idea of the story itself is very intriguing and interesting! The charcter development and story development are very good and amazing. Totally worth a read! Great book author!
Not my favorite Genre to read but it was worth the read. The story started at a slow pace, but at a good pace. Everything is described vividly and personally I don't speak game but the author described everything perfectly.
Honestly an unbelievable experience, thus far - I'm incredibly impressed with the character development and design, with the main character's backstory being very detailed. This is genuinely a masterpiece that people should consider reading, even if the fantasy genre isn't your thing.
even though it looks completed it is not and he’s also still charging coins for something that is not completed and currently paused on production to do another book what are you could’ve just continued the bookies currently writing