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It's amazing, dear author, I'm waiting for the continuation of the story It's amazing, dear author, I'm waiting for the continuation of the story
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It was ok at the start but it gradually got interesting. I can see the development of your skill as an author clearly with each passing moment. I am now hooked with your novel. So keep on the good work. God bless you. xD
lazy writing with bad spelling and grammar. plot-holes and shock value twists with 0 foreshadowing setting them up. man, the only good thing about this story is the update speed and mindless fap material.
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I love the world development, and mc even have self- made system. It has a very good story arc too. Having an mc struggling to control his power has its own charm, it also gives room for more development. I love it.
Very nice. ..something new. ..plot similar to dual cultivation. . but overall great. .Just Hero character stil need some improvement (not entertaining enough but ok so please don't it if you can't improve it) ..Anyway one my best Haram ..i read. .
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Needs improvement, but I love the story. bruvkek. bruvkek. bruvkek. bruvkek. bruvkek. bruvkek. bruvkek. bruvkek. bruvkek. bruvkek. bruvkek. bruvkek.
Es de mis primeras ""fan" que leo y la verdad me gusto bastante, tiene una trama simple pero se desarrolla de manera interesante, los personajes son creíbles y aun mas sus relaciones con el MC
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Nice i like the plot and snu snu scene it has a good flow keep it up [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
good so far. the character is actually a good person who debate on what he should do with a problem. not like other mc s that don't care about their parents or home after being reincarnated
It's amazing, dear author, I'm waiting for the continuation of the story It's amazing, dear author, I'm waiting for the continuation of the story It's amazing, dear author, I'm waiting for the continuation of the story It's amazing, dear author, I'm waiting for the continuation of the story
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hmmm, the tags say it all... good story development so far. the only problem that you might find is some grammar errors or so that is not something that affects the story too much.
Remarkable, respected writer, I am waiting for the continuation of the story Remarkable, respected writer, I am waiting for the continuation of the story Remarkable, respected writer, I am waiting for the continuation of the story Remarkable, respected writer, I am waiting for the continuation of the story
Esperava mais desenvolvimento,por exemplo : na floresta,o desenvolvimento dos sentimentos de Devy por atlas,outro ponto que falta desenvolvimento também é sobre como o "ser" conseguiu controlar o pai dele Bom,se postar 2 capítulos por dia seria melhor tbm XD Outro ponto a observar é sobre o poder do MC,na minha opinião ele não deveria ser tão forte assim,seria também legal que ele não fosse tão forte mas com o controle do símbolo do espaço ele conseguisse fazer coisas que pessoas mais fortes do que ele faz Bom,vou acompanhar pra ver onde isso vai chegar,já que estou curioso sobre esses deuses
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Remarkable, respected writer, I am waiting for the continuation of the story Remarkable, respected writer, I am waiting for the continuation of the story Remarkable, respected writer, I am waiting for the continuation of the story Remarkable, respected writer, I am waiting for the continuation of the story
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keep going author.....your story is so gooood. dont drop this book author.... i will vote for u everyday[img=update][img=recommend][img=update]
The story isn't bad. I like the mc and there isn't any major plot hole rn.the Bg is okay as well......................................................................
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-It was really good, nothing too serious but it's not a comedy center either. -I don't know if I should point out the grammar errors. I feel like I am being annoying as I usually don't care about this stuff, so please let me know if I should. -If you author starts to use Grammaly the novel wouldn't have any grammatical errors. The errors aren't anything big, just some things that we forget when tired or angry. -I don't know if it's an inside joke that I am not aware but 'Ofcourse' is separated from all I know -There wasn't anything that truly excited me, no climax... things just happen, no impacting scene, cool scene, sad scene. It's nice but it will get boring this way, like a pass time. ( this is just my opinion, I know your history is for self-fulfillment so you can just ignore this if you want as it would affect the writing as a whole)
Honestly it could use some work with the character interactions..... It feels like it's just going back and forth with the MC while the other characters have been sidelined. It still too early to be heavily criticized as the story is still pretty interesting... 🍻 Here's hoping to more chapters _P.S_ I'm kinda hooked on it😌😌
It's amazing, dear author, I'm waiting for the continuation of the story It's amazing, dear author, I'm waiting for the continuation of the story
Dear writer, I'm waiting for the continuation of the story Dear writer, I'm waiting for the continuation of the story Dear writer, I'm waiting for the continuation of the story Dear writer, I'm waiting for the continuation of the story
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It was ok at the start but it gradually got interesting. I can see the development of your skill as an author clearly with each passing moment. I am now hooked with your novel. So keep on the good work. God bless you. xD
lazy writing with bad spelling and grammar. plot-holes and shock value twists with 0 foreshadowing setting them up. man, the only good thing about this story is the update speed and mindless fap material.
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I love the world development, and mc even have self- made system. It has a very good story arc too. Having an mc struggling to control his power has its own charm, it also gives room for more development. I love it.
Very nice. ..something new. ..plot similar to dual cultivation. . but overall great. .Just Hero character stil need some improvement (not entertaining enough but ok so please don't it if you can't improve it) ..Anyway one my best Haram ..i read. .
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Needs improvement, but I love the story. bruvkek. bruvkek. bruvkek. bruvkek. bruvkek. bruvkek. bruvkek. bruvkek. bruvkek. bruvkek. bruvkek. bruvkek.
Es de mis primeras ""fan" que leo y la verdad me gusto bastante, tiene una trama simple pero se desarrolla de manera interesante, los personajes son creíbles y aun mas sus relaciones con el MC
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Nice i like the plot and snu snu scene it has a good flow keep it up [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
good so far. the character is actually a good person who debate on what he should do with a problem. not like other mc s that don't care about their parents or home after being reincarnated
It's amazing, dear author, I'm waiting for the continuation of the story It's amazing, dear author, I'm waiting for the continuation of the story It's amazing, dear author, I'm waiting for the continuation of the story It's amazing, dear author, I'm waiting for the continuation of the story
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Remarkable, respected writer, I am waiting for the continuation of the story Remarkable, respected writer, I am waiting for the continuation of the story Remarkable, respected writer, I am waiting for the continuation of the story Remarkable, respected writer, I am waiting for the continuation of the story
hmmm, the tags say it all... good story development so far. the only problem that you might find is some grammar errors or so that is not something that affects the story too much.
Remarkable, respected writer, I am waiting for the continuation of the story Remarkable, respected writer, I am waiting for the continuation of the story Remarkable, respected writer, I am waiting for the continuation of the story Remarkable, respected writer, I am waiting for the continuation of the story
Esperava mais desenvolvimento,por exemplo : na floresta,o desenvolvimento dos sentimentos de Devy por atlas,outro ponto que falta desenvolvimento também é sobre como o "ser" conseguiu controlar o pai dele Bom,se postar 2 capítulos por dia seria melhor tbm XD Outro ponto a observar é sobre o poder do MC,na minha opinião ele não deveria ser tão forte assim,seria também legal que ele não fosse tão forte mas com o controle do símbolo do espaço ele conseguisse fazer coisas que pessoas mais fortes do que ele faz Bom,vou acompanhar pra ver onde isso vai chegar,já que estou curioso sobre esses deuses
Remarkable, respected writer, I am waiting for the continuation of the story Remarkable, respected writer, I am waiting for the continuation of the story Remarkable, respected writer, I am waiting for the continuation of the story Remarkable, respected writer, I am waiting for the continuation of the story
More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More
Remarkable, respected writer, I am waiting for the continuation of the story Remarkable, respected writer, I am waiting for the continuation of the story Remarkable, respected writer, I am waiting for the continuation of the story Remarkable, respected writer, I am waiting for the continuation of the story
go...go....go...go....go....need more [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
keep going author.....your story is so gooood. dont drop this book author.... i will vote for u everyday[img=update][img=recommend][img=update]
The story isn't bad. I like the mc and there isn't any major plot hole rn.the Bg is okay as well......................................................................
揭示劇透 -It was really good, nothing too serious but it's not a comedy center either. -I don't know if I should point out the grammar errors. I feel like I am being annoying as I usually don't care about this stuff, so please let me know if I should. -If you author starts to use Grammaly the novel wouldn't have any grammatical errors. The errors aren't anything big, just some things that we forget when tired or angry. -I don't know if it's an inside joke that I am not aware but 'Ofcourse' is separated from all I know -There wasn't anything that truly excited me, no climax... things just happen, no impacting scene, cool scene, sad scene. It's nice but it will get boring this way, like a pass time. ( this is just my opinion, I know your history is for self-fulfillment so you can just ignore this if you want as it would affect the writing as a whole)
Honestly it could use some work with the character interactions..... It feels like it's just going back and forth with the MC while the other characters have been sidelined. It still too early to be heavily criticized as the story is still pretty interesting... 🍻 Here's hoping to more chapters _P.S_ I'm kinda hooked on it😌😌