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Grammar is absolutely terrible. painful to read, story is just everywhere with zero detials, just, well im hungry so i picked some herbs and fruits, then i walked and found a village. lol then its premium at chaper 20 i think.
chapters are not in order that is almost an unforgivable sin in writing novels. if you c write English so well that's understandable but uploading your chapters in an unreadable order is a no go
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Petition for this to be a necromancer story😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅
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Grammar is absolutely terrible. painful to read, story is just everywhere with zero detials, just, well im hungry so i picked some herbs and fruits, then i walked and found a village. lol then its premium at chaper 20 i think.
chapters are not in order that is almost an unforgivable sin in writing novels. if you c write English so well that's understandable but uploading your chapters in an unreadable order is a no go
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Petition for this to be a necromancer story😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅
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