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INITIAL THOUGHTS: -Normally I don't write a review before 100 chapters however, this novel in my opinion has reached a threshold to be reviewed. So without further ado... WRITING QUALITY: -Out of 5 I gave this a 3. That means pretty good with room to improve. Readable enough to where I'll continue reading however, I notice the errors enough impacting my quality of reading. Hopefully, over time the author improves his English proficiency for a better quality novel. STABILITY OF UPDATES: -This is a bit earlier to say given the less than 100 chapters uploaded. That being said it's reached the initial threshold of 40+, unlike some authors who stop around there. STORY DEVELOPMENT -This novel just like most novels tells us there is a higher world/ realm for the MC to explore once he reached a certain threshold in cultivation. I got no problem with this since it expands how far the plot can go. -The MC is at his first place of major growth showing many future plots on the horizon. I find this to be great as it satisfies the present plus links future plot points ahead. -Overall well done. CHARACTER DESIGN -This section and world background are by far the most developed so far. -The MC is starting this his original personality from his past life while getting influenced by his present experiences. He has shown based on the techniques he's found and powerhouses he's come across to have changed the way he views and interacts with his environment which is a plus for me. For his personality, you can see he isn't(in my opinion) Supremely Evil no Righteous when compared to other characters. He's more like an anti-hero. A man that is willing to be cruel to the cruel while treating the innocent with respect assuming they do the same. He's shown to be hostile towards a certain type of sect because of their methods to grow stronger. I'm curious about his stance towards larger picture plots, but that will be left for future chapters. -Side characters have some personality and are integral to the MC development which is good. Some examples... -His best friend shows sincere caring towards the MC he never had before in this life or the one before, -His Gu Aunite is a parental figure who loves him unconditionally, which he never experienced before. -The first woman he slept with showed him how it feels to be loved by a woman in a romantic sense that has never happened before. The more women he comes to love the more I see him maturing into a powerhouse that comes to embrace the world to protect them all. -These are just a few nonetheless it illustrates how much development the MC has gone through up till now. WORLD BACKGROUND: -As I said before the introduction to higher worlds expands the development leaning towards a richer story. His current world has much to explore for the next couple hundred chapters. I'm curious about the various occupations, heroes, villains, legends, etc that make this story a fuller read. Would I recommend this book? Yes! Do give it a go.
hello guys this is my second review ;) first of all this is my first novel. so don't be disappointed in first few chapters, its getting better and better, as a reader I can tell that too. and i want to tell some things before you guys start reading. 1, MC Du Chan is an dropped out, gangster, and a otaku in his past life on earth, he is a bit childish in the starting chapters because he is in kids body! a 8 years old kid is not an adult! even with his past memories! but everything will change after some chapters. but he is selfish, and evil type MC, you can call it Anti Hero! 2, Story its strong plot and good i guess 3, Harem Yes, its harem! but there are no dumb FL's, MC loves his harem more then anything! but he had no weakness to women! he would kill women too! 4, Grammar my grammar is kinda not bad, you will understand whats happening and whats going on, but it will cause problem to some readers. 5, Updates yes, daily updates! thats enough i think, Thanks for reading this review! please try to read this novel too, Thanks in advance! ;) This novel is not bad!
What happened to the novel and the author? someone knows? DROP? ?????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????
For now the story is really good i just hope the author is gonna keep the good work and keep updating us i dont want him to drop this story !
ive got to say this is an amazing novel . i come across new novels quite frequently and not alot of them are good enough to make me continue to read. this is a great novel very unique . apart from a couple typos here and there the writung quality is magnificent. story development is ata good pace not too slow but not too fast either . character design is quite good my fav characters are du chan,xie mengyu and kim senior , hope you continue to update this story frequently it has massive potential and is already good anyway and the world background is definetly very interesting and well done
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From when I started reading to where I am now, I would say that the concept of this story and the development is very good. The only thing holding this down would be that there are a lot of grammatical errors. So much so that I have to spend time trying to figure out what the authors means in some cases. While this takes away from the story, it isnt enough to stop me from reading this book! One advice I would give the author for improvement is obviously learning the english language, as well as trying to deepen the plot of the story! A couple examples I have from other books ive read would be that instead of the main character going through an event and then magically getting the ability to not register pain or care about pain, they make it so that the event is super discriptive and made it so that something happened to where the main character got used to pain. They describe it like, “Suwu felt like his skin was being flayed alive, his muscles being streched around his body, trying to compresses his bones into fine powder! His organs felt like they inflated so much that they were trying to rip apart his body to run away.” That type of discription. Anyway I just wanted to give my opinion because I enjoyed your story and can’t wait for you to devlop as a writer!
this is a decent story it's not on the level of martial world but if u like agt and other of the range and hard-working cultivation this is for u highly recommend
It's a good story but the story doesn't feel immersive as what you would thought it would be. There are no grammatical errors but the way it is narrated kinda feels bland. Other than that, I really think that it is good plot-wise and all.
I loved it very good, incredible, the story and plot are very good and the plot twist very interesting, I really liked the character of the protagonist and the heroines, the harem very good, I recommend it More will not be regret
Du Chan will become a legendary character, the world will remember. The story and character design is good although there are a few typos I hope the author corrects it. BTW is this a Chinese translated novel or an original work?
Great story with good potential. WIll keep a eye on this one. asddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddd
Con una escupida de sangre, la mujer blanca miró a Feng Yun a toda prisa, luego se dio la vuelta y se escondió en la exuberante jungla. La respiración de toda la persona había convergido. Feng Yun estaba aquí y no podía sentir ninguna fluctuación del Qi del Espíritu en ella.
100% recomendado, buena historia, ya quiero saber porque asesino a miles de millones en la tierra y como obtuvo su poder, sigo escribiendo porque no me deja publicar
Gosu bueno la obra esta chida, pero solo hago la reseña para subir de nivel xd y piden 140 caracteres, sigo escribiendo porque aun no me deja publicr
A masterpiece novel 😄 with a ruthless MC, Du Chan. The character development of our MC from being a wimp to an overpowered guy is just too good.
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epic, hahahahahahahahahahahaaahahahahahahaahhhahahahahahahahaah srly tho nice! why is it 140 characters?????? eguligk.gdkildtue;.dgud;gduo/dhuocf;/hcuo;/CHUOC;
Hi! This is kera, an editor of the international writing contest SWA II. I believe your book has great potential, so I invited you to join in a week ago. Please reply to me so I can discuss this with you in detail.
I read it because it seemed interesting... and what do I say? It's really good I would recommend it to everyone the hype for new chapters is just... heavy once you read it you just want to read more and more
Girl you my crush, sweet like candy Ain't lggy but this bish so fancy All I need is your smile to be happy Me and you in the sky that's what it can be Ayy, girl you my crush, sweet like candy (like candy) Ain't lggy but this bish so fancy (so fancy) All I need is your smile to be happy (be happy) Me and you in the sky that's what it can be (what it can be) I been in New York like a Yankee (like a Yankee) Next day take a flight to Miami (to Miami) Keep a stick on me like a Granny (granny) I ain't failing you, we ain't need a plan B (need no plan B) Shawty I'm just tryna see you everyday (everyday) Know I need you so don't ever go away (don't you go away) At my place whenever you know you could stay (you could stay) Put you in a Benz, might just switch it to a wraith (to a wraith) Everything I do, I do it like I gotta (like I gotta) Saw you for the first day I had to holla (had to holla) Feel like Drake cause I started at the bottom (from the bottom) Take a trip I, we might go to Guatemala (Guatemala) Lotta love but these haters still hating (still hating) Never give a *bleep* about what they be saying (what they be saying?) Live my dreams so you know I had to chase it (had to chase it) Fashion Nova on you, girl you slaying (you slaying) Ayy, girl you my crush sweet like candy(like candy) Ain't lggy but this bish so fancy (so fancy) All I need is your smile to be happy (be happy) Me and you in the sky that's what it can be (what it can be) Ayy, girl you my crush sweet like candy (like candy) Ain't lggy but this bish so fancy (so fancy) All I need is your smile to be happy (be happy) Me and you in the sky that's what it can be (what it can be) Source: Musixmatch
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The start is kinda rough but it got a lot of potential just keep writing till the impurities vanished. And don't use so much "He", just describe it in other term and explore ur own style of writing
Chandu is a good writer and this novel proves that. Not only is the story development done perfectly but the MC makes the LN more realistic and better. BTW this was Dragonim.
Chandu senpai is very pog so i will vote 5 stars. I also secretly love chandu senpai so that's also another reason to vote 5 star. Also it's atractive to see Chandu write.
I never thought this story would be this good.....I can't compare it to others as it's my first but colour me impressed, specially the character design of Di Chan and the world design.
Interesting I have read many books and it looks promising so far. I know your native language is not english but it is bound to improve keep it up :)
Du Chan will become a legendary character, the world will remember. The story and character design is good although there are a few typos I hope the author corrects it. BTW is this a Chinese translated novel or an original work?
INITIAL THOUGHTS: -Normally I don't write a review before 100 chapters however, this novel in my opinion has reached a threshold to be reviewed. So without further ado... WRITING QUALITY: -Out of 5 I gave this a 3. That means pretty good with room to improve. Readable enough to where I'll continue reading however, I notice the errors enough impacting my quality of reading. Hopefully, over time the author improves his English proficiency for a better quality novel. STABILITY OF UPDATES: -This is a bit earlier to say given the less than 100 chapters uploaded. That being said it's reached the initial threshold of 40+, unlike some authors who stop around there. STORY DEVELOPMENT -This novel just like most novels tells us there is a higher world/ realm for the MC to explore once he reached a certain threshold in cultivation. I got no problem with this since it expands how far the plot can go. -The MC is at his first place of major growth showing many future plots on the horizon. I find this to be great as it satisfies the present plus links future plot points ahead. -Overall well done. CHARACTER DESIGN -This section and world background are by far the most developed so far. -The MC is starting this his original personality from his past life while getting influenced by his present experiences. He has shown based on the techniques he's found and powerhouses he's come across to have changed the way he views and interacts with his environment which is a plus for me. For his personality, you can see he isn't(in my opinion) Supremely Evil no Righteous when compared to other characters. He's more like an anti-hero. A man that is willing to be cruel to the cruel while treating the innocent with respect assuming they do the same. He's shown to be hostile towards a certain type of sect because of their methods to grow stronger. I'm curious about his stance towards larger picture plots, but that will be left for future chapters. -Side characters have some personality and are integral to the MC development which is good. Some examples... -His best friend shows sincere caring towards the MC he never had before in this life or the one before, -His Gu Aunite is a parental figure who loves him unconditionally, which he never experienced before. -The first woman he slept with showed him how it feels to be loved by a woman in a romantic sense that has never happened before. The more women he comes to love the more I see him maturing into a powerhouse that comes to embrace the world to protect them all. -These are just a few nonetheless it illustrates how much development the MC has gone through up till now. WORLD BACKGROUND: -As I said before the introduction to higher worlds expands the development leaning towards a richer story. His current world has much to explore for the next couple hundred chapters. I'm curious about the various occupations, heroes, villains, legends, etc that make this story a fuller read. Would I recommend this book? Yes! Do give it a go.
hello guys this is my second review ;) first of all this is my first novel. so don't be disappointed in first few chapters, its getting better and better, as a reader I can tell that too. and i want to tell some things before you guys start reading. 1, MC Du Chan is an dropped out, gangster, and a otaku in his past life on earth, he is a bit childish in the starting chapters because he is in kids body! a 8 years old kid is not an adult! even with his past memories! but everything will change after some chapters. but he is selfish, and evil type MC, you can call it Anti Hero! 2, Story its strong plot and good i guess 3, Harem Yes, its harem! but there are no dumb FL's, MC loves his harem more then anything! but he had no weakness to women! he would kill women too! 4, Grammar my grammar is kinda not bad, you will understand whats happening and whats going on, but it will cause problem to some readers. 5, Updates yes, daily updates! thats enough i think, Thanks for reading this review! please try to read this novel too, Thanks in advance! ;) This novel is not bad!
What happened to the novel and the author? someone knows? DROP? ?????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????
For now the story is really good i just hope the author is gonna keep the good work and keep updating us i dont want him to drop this story !
ive got to say this is an amazing novel . i come across new novels quite frequently and not alot of them are good enough to make me continue to read. this is a great novel very unique . apart from a couple typos here and there the writung quality is magnificent. story development is ata good pace not too slow but not too fast either . character design is quite good my fav characters are du chan,xie mengyu and kim senior , hope you continue to update this story frequently it has massive potential and is already good anyway and the world background is definetly very interesting and well done
揭示劇透 just like magic ✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨
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From when I started reading to where I am now, I would say that the concept of this story and the development is very good. The only thing holding this down would be that there are a lot of grammatical errors. So much so that I have to spend time trying to figure out what the authors means in some cases. While this takes away from the story, it isnt enough to stop me from reading this book! One advice I would give the author for improvement is obviously learning the english language, as well as trying to deepen the plot of the story! A couple examples I have from other books ive read would be that instead of the main character going through an event and then magically getting the ability to not register pain or care about pain, they make it so that the event is super discriptive and made it so that something happened to where the main character got used to pain. They describe it like, “Suwu felt like his skin was being flayed alive, his muscles being streched around his body, trying to compresses his bones into fine powder! His organs felt like they inflated so much that they were trying to rip apart his body to run away.” That type of discription. Anyway I just wanted to give my opinion because I enjoyed your story and can’t wait for you to devlop as a writer!
this is a decent story it's not on the level of martial world but if u like agt and other of the range and hard-working cultivation this is for u highly recommend
It's a good story but the story doesn't feel immersive as what you would thought it would be. There are no grammatical errors but the way it is narrated kinda feels bland. Other than that, I really think that it is good plot-wise and all.
I loved it very good, incredible, the story and plot are very good and the plot twist very interesting, I really liked the character of the protagonist and the heroines, the harem very good, I recommend it More will not be regret
Du Chan will become a legendary character, the world will remember. The story and character design is good although there are a few typos I hope the author corrects it. BTW is this a Chinese translated novel or an original work?
Great story with good potential. WIll keep a eye on this one. asddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddd
Con una escupida de sangre, la mujer blanca miró a Feng Yun a toda prisa, luego se dio la vuelta y se escondió en la exuberante jungla. La respiración de toda la persona había convergido. Feng Yun estaba aquí y no podía sentir ninguna fluctuación del Qi del Espíritu en ella.
100% recomendado, buena historia, ya quiero saber porque asesino a miles de millones en la tierra y como obtuvo su poder, sigo escribiendo porque no me deja publicar
Gosu bueno la obra esta chida, pero solo hago la reseña para subir de nivel xd y piden 140 caracteres, sigo escribiendo porque aun no me deja publicr
A masterpiece novel 😄 with a ruthless MC, Du Chan. The character development of our MC from being a wimp to an overpowered guy is just too good.
nice..... .[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update]
epic, hahahahahahahahahahahaaahahahahahahaahhhahahahahahahahaah srly tho nice! why is it 140 characters?????? eguligk.gdkildtue;.dgud;gduo/dhuocf;/hcuo;/CHUOC;
Hi! This is kera, an editor of the international writing contest SWA II. I believe your book has great potential, so I invited you to join in a week ago. Please reply to me so I can discuss this with you in detail.
I read it because it seemed interesting... and what do I say? It's really good I would recommend it to everyone the hype for new chapters is just... heavy once you read it you just want to read more and more
Girl you my crush, sweet like candy Ain't lggy but this bish so fancy All I need is your smile to be happy Me and you in the sky that's what it can be Ayy, girl you my crush, sweet like candy (like candy) Ain't lggy but this bish so fancy (so fancy) All I need is your smile to be happy (be happy) Me and you in the sky that's what it can be (what it can be) I been in New York like a Yankee (like a Yankee) Next day take a flight to Miami (to Miami) Keep a stick on me like a Granny (granny) I ain't failing you, we ain't need a plan B (need no plan B) Shawty I'm just tryna see you everyday (everyday) Know I need you so don't ever go away (don't you go away) At my place whenever you know you could stay (you could stay) Put you in a Benz, might just switch it to a wraith (to a wraith) Everything I do, I do it like I gotta (like I gotta) Saw you for the first day I had to holla (had to holla) Feel like Drake cause I started at the bottom (from the bottom) Take a trip I, we might go to Guatemala (Guatemala) Lotta love but these haters still hating (still hating) Never give a *bleep* about what they be saying (what they be saying?) Live my dreams so you know I had to chase it (had to chase it) Fashion Nova on you, girl you slaying (you slaying) Ayy, girl you my crush sweet like candy(like candy) Ain't lggy but this bish so fancy (so fancy) All I need is your smile to be happy (be happy) Me and you in the sky that's what it can be (what it can be) Ayy, girl you my crush sweet like candy (like candy) Ain't lggy but this bish so fancy (so fancy) All I need is your smile to be happy (be happy) Me and you in the sky that's what it can be (what it can be) Source: Musixmatch
揭示劇透 The start is kinda rough but it got a lot of potential just keep writing till the impurities vanished. And don't use so much "He", just describe it in other term and explore ur own style of writing
Chandu is a good writer and this novel proves that. Not only is the story development done perfectly but the MC makes the LN more realistic and better. BTW this was Dragonim.
Chandu senpai is very pog so i will vote 5 stars. I also secretly love chandu senpai so that's also another reason to vote 5 star. Also it's atractive to see Chandu write.
I never thought this story would be this good.....I can't compare it to others as it's my first but colour me impressed, specially the character design of Di Chan and the world design.
Interesting I have read many books and it looks promising so far. I know your native language is not english but it is bound to improve keep it up :)
Du Chan will become a legendary character, the world will remember. The story and character design is good although there are a few typos I hope the author corrects it. BTW is this a Chinese translated novel or an original work?