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readers will find it hard to find. sometimes title is the key but your novel can't even normally search by typing my fate system. Vanity LoL
Overall story is great and the mc's one-minded mindset and the determination is praise worthy.The story development is great. Writing quality is also good. It's a great story and it deserves more attention.
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The Writing is sometimes clunky but the gramar is exelent and within 5 stars. Updates are rather stable every 1-2 days. The story development seems sometimes forced but is not bad. The MC is a combination of brooding dark and every one for himself and then still some good within. This could make for an interesting complicated character, but in this case it didn't work for me. It might be because the MC is so over the top of edgelord that it just doesn't work for me when he hates others for helping him without expecting benefits and refuses to even give a simple thank you while helping others for no benefits. The World would be prety interesting without the fate system. If one of the core concepts of your system is manipulation of probability you should get probability at least remotely right. In this story, if the probability of an event, the MC wants to hapen, is beyond 50% it hapens. If it is less it might hapen. (Like the same event has 16 times in a row an outcome with a 75% probability(and I probably did not count all of them)).
amazing story, i binge read it in 3h. i suck at reviews so all i can say that it's obvious the amount of work put behind each chp and with the gr8 plot, world building and characters, this novel is def in my top 3 fav on this app currently
Im enjoying it so far. Cynical MC who dont trust no one. System takes a backseat in this one as the plot progresses from his knowledge of his past life. World building good, characters are good, plot is average. Added to library
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You aren’t allowed to drop this novel else you will face my wrath. This novel is one of the rare few that are close to perfection. There rarely are grammar mistakes and the story is well written.
This novel has potential. Hopefully it won't disappoint. Good luck author. fsdfsdfsdfsdfsdfsdfsdfsdfsdfsdfsdfsdfsdfsdfsdfsdfsdfsdfsdfsdfsdfsdfs
Pretty good story so far I like the details and environment it really gives a good design. I also like the sorta lone wolf type character which gives me an antihero type which I like hope for some more.
It is going good so far and I look forward to every chapter. The story development is great as we get to know about the champions and legendary skills. Thanks
Pretty good/ you know that I’m not gonna go out in the middle school 🏫 and I have to go to get a new book and I’m not getting a chance to get a hold of you I wanna see you on the weeww
I Really like this book or novel what ever you call it but are the other two reviews fake because it says that weird update thing but good novel anyway
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I liked the first iteration but the reworking Increased the quality. I look forward to the progression if the story in the next 40 chapters but i like what I read so far.
The writing quality is smooth and breathtaking to read. I am hoping for daily uploads if possible but we will see in the coming days or when the author responds. The story development is moving smoothly but there are some occasionally parts of the story that felt off. The character design is vague right now but I just hope he doesn't go making enemies left and right (you know young masters out there XD). As for the world background, it still developing so I suggest giving more info about the world and spread more evenly in the coming chapters so it doesn't become a massive info dump chapter!!! (Currently waiting for new chapter on chapter 23) Anway, amazing read so author don't stop!!!
Why doesn't the Mc hate Valkyrie? she ruined his life but when he found out that all of the awful stuff he went through in his early life was caused because of her he didn't even get mad, he still joined her party and is trying to impress her I mean I thought he would be trying to take her head. Not only that people who tried to get close to him felt the wrath of his tormentors to and Valkyrie knew and she still let it happen even if she moved because he was a lost case in his previous life, she still left all the trouble on his shoulders and while his life was getting torn apart she was with her guild enjoying all the riches
readers will find it hard to find. sometimes title is the key but your novel can't even normally search by typing my fate system. Vanity LoL
Overall story is great and the mc's one-minded mindset and the determination is praise worthy.The story development is great. Writing quality is also good. It's a great story and it deserves more attention.
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The Writing is sometimes clunky but the gramar is exelent and within 5 stars. Updates are rather stable every 1-2 days. The story development seems sometimes forced but is not bad. The MC is a combination of brooding dark and every one for himself and then still some good within. This could make for an interesting complicated character, but in this case it didn't work for me. It might be because the MC is so over the top of edgelord that it just doesn't work for me when he hates others for helping him without expecting benefits and refuses to even give a simple thank you while helping others for no benefits. The World would be prety interesting without the fate system. If one of the core concepts of your system is manipulation of probability you should get probability at least remotely right. In this story, if the probability of an event, the MC wants to hapen, is beyond 50% it hapens. If it is less it might hapen. (Like the same event has 16 times in a row an outcome with a 75% probability(and I probably did not count all of them)).
amazing story, i binge read it in 3h. i suck at reviews so all i can say that it's obvious the amount of work put behind each chp and with the gr8 plot, world building and characters, this novel is def in my top 3 fav on this app currently
Im enjoying it so far. Cynical MC who dont trust no one. System takes a backseat in this one as the plot progresses from his knowledge of his past life. World building good, characters are good, plot is average. Added to library
Nice chapter and nice story.....Nice chapter and nice story.....Nice chapter and nice story.....Nice chapter and nice story.....Nice chapter and nice story.....
You aren’t allowed to drop this novel else you will face my wrath. This novel is one of the rare few that are close to perfection. There rarely are grammar mistakes and the story is well written.
This novel has potential. Hopefully it won't disappoint. Good luck author. fsdfsdfsdfsdfsdfsdfsdfsdfsdfsdfsdfsdfsdfsdfsdfsdfsdfsdfsdfsdfsdfsdfs
Pretty good story so far I like the details and environment it really gives a good design. I also like the sorta lone wolf type character which gives me an antihero type which I like hope for some more.
It is going good so far and I look forward to every chapter. The story development is great as we get to know about the champions and legendary skills. Thanks
Pretty good/ you know that I’m not gonna go out in the middle school 🏫 and I have to go to get a new book and I’m not getting a chance to get a hold of you I wanna see you on the weeww
I Really like this book or novel what ever you call it but are the other two reviews fake because it says that weird update thing but good novel anyway
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I liked the first iteration but the reworking Increased the quality. I look forward to the progression if the story in the next 40 chapters but i like what I read so far.
The writing quality is smooth and breathtaking to read. I am hoping for daily uploads if possible but we will see in the coming days or when the author responds. The story development is moving smoothly but there are some occasionally parts of the story that felt off. The character design is vague right now but I just hope he doesn't go making enemies left and right (you know young masters out there XD). As for the world background, it still developing so I suggest giving more info about the world and spread more evenly in the coming chapters so it doesn't become a massive info dump chapter!!! (Currently waiting for new chapter on chapter 23) Anway, amazing read so author don't stop!!!
Why doesn't the Mc hate Valkyrie? she ruined his life but when he found out that all of the awful stuff he went through in his early life was caused because of her he didn't even get mad, he still joined her party and is trying to impress her I mean I thought he would be trying to take her head. Not only that people who tried to get close to him felt the wrath of his tormentors to and Valkyrie knew and she still let it happen even if she moved because he was a lost case in his previous life, she still left all the trouble on his shoulders and while his life was getting torn apart she was with her guild enjoying all the riches