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its very good, not like other GOT/ASOIAF where mc just conquers westeros and does not improve/ introduce earth stuff
Writing quality /3stars updating stability. /3stars story development/0stars character design. /1stars World background/0stars Overall the quality story background everything just goes downhill and gets progressively worse and worse and worse and obviously the offer does not take any criticism or advice from comments to improve his story and has gotten to the point where he has no one reading his story
Neutral review here The MC is not a planner, that's for sure, He takes out these soldiers not knowing what he's going to do two, he just landed in a new world and already he's walking with these soldiers, which must have different sigils I guess, He should have acquired at least two or 3 of his best soldiers and left the others in the system, they will act as guard while he takes these reperts in the world of GOT, go around and build his story, search where he wants to build his new kingdom, While avoiding stepping on people's feet at the beginning, it cannot build and wage war at the same time, the guy is quite weak and just relies on others, In short, the story has great potential but unfortunately not well planned
author is this novel still being continued or not? the problem is that it's a shame that this novel was dropped, I'm really looking forward to the other chapters
Decir que me gustó mucho la historia pero el desarrollo de los personajes como son las esposas deja mucho que desear y bueno me gustaría que siguiera la segunda parte y hablara más de sus esposas
É uma boa história, perfeita para passar o tempo quando não encontra nada decente para ler, recomendo muito que dê uma chance. Achei bem interessante a ideia de transformar Essos em um novo império romano.
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the first 10 chapters or so are good but they are just a fluke the earth that Greg came from had an average iq of 50 and our mc Greg had 80 he get absolutely carried by the system witch magically spawns troop with "feelings". half of the stuff the mc does is illogical and out right stupid the author just isn't capable of writing with the detail that humanity presents..
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I mean I don't think he even watched Got let alone read the books the characters thought process is so wrong like in small council meeting he ha white hire let's murder him like the taygeryens weren't the only one withe white hire
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Author you never explained how people reacted to him just having a soldiers that people have not seen before for example he summons soldiers and people don't say a thing pls explain
The idea for a fanfic is interesting, but the author knows neither the original novel nor the series. Example: it is the year 289.Denerys is about 7-8 years old and the author writes that in two years he will help her escape during the wedding with Drogo, while in the original, during wedding she is 13 years old in book and 17in the series, Another example is Loras Tyrell who both in the book and and in the show is gay, here he is interested in MC's sister (his summoned general) who is a woman. The author literally writes that Loras Tyrell is not angry that MC refused to join him, which wouldn't allow him to get to know his beautiful sister, which is why he is a bit angry about it. But he is not desperate because his lands are full of beautiful women( Read up to Chapter 20)
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This atrocity is an insult to the source material that only stupid or challenged people could enjoy. Do keep that in mind before you start this journey of aneurysms and no grammar.
The protagonist of this work does not know what diplomacy and restraint are in relation to other lords with whom he may well conclude an alliance and there is a feeling that this character does not understand that he has not achieved anything on his own and all he has is all thanks to the system and in fact not his and he should have thought at least once that if everyone gave it to him so easily, then they can take it away with the same ease, well, no, this character is so stupid that he makes enemies where he could make good friends
Un muy buen fanfic de juego de tronos sobre construcción de reino, me gusta que a pesar de tener un sistema y tener tantas ventajas la personalidad del MC no sea odiosa y pretenciosa de que todo lo puede como suelen hacerlo algunos autores, además de que no sea un perro lujurioso digo está bien que disfrute pero la mayoría lo exagera aquí en cambio hay una buena moderacion
j'adore cette fanfiction +++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++
there are many things that make this story great, the characters, the way it drags you in to where you can't stop reading, i only stopped when i reached this part, anyway, the story is very excellent, 8/10 would continue reading, i cannot say much about the uploading of chapters but i hope that they continue with their promise of 1 chapter a day, i would like to see how this story ends up in the future!
It's meh. He has system that serves everything in a silver platter. He summons people from the system. He gets rewarded easily from quests. The writing quality is good but the concept and story itself is meh. It's like a shounen story but without the struggle and action and more plot armour and OPness.
people complain a decent bit but it's in fact great fanfic. The book itself is written nicely with only 1 or 2 spelling errors every 5+ chapters. There was only 1 time when I disliked that the author wasted the Mc's opportunity but this was later fixed which helped progress the Mc's army. Thanks for the book, well-done author can't wait to read more
a good story with an intelligent mc, it has a system that gives rewards even for going from one place to another, otherwise it seems like a normal kingdom construction story.
PLS UPDATE MORE A very good fanfic about game of thrones. I like the system an also the MC is very likable, logical about military an building a kingdom. One of the good novels on this site. Chapters should be longer, also update more. There are few dumb decisions MC makes but overall it's ok.
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its very good, not like other GOT/ASOIAF where mc just conquers westeros and does not improve/ introduce earth stuff
Writing quality /3stars updating stability. /3stars story development/0stars character design. /1stars World background/0stars Overall the quality story background everything just goes downhill and gets progressively worse and worse and worse and obviously the offer does not take any criticism or advice from comments to improve his story and has gotten to the point where he has no one reading his story
Neutral review here The MC is not a planner, that's for sure, He takes out these soldiers not knowing what he's going to do two, he just landed in a new world and already he's walking with these soldiers, which must have different sigils I guess, He should have acquired at least two or 3 of his best soldiers and left the others in the system, they will act as guard while he takes these reperts in the world of GOT, go around and build his story, search where he wants to build his new kingdom, While avoiding stepping on people's feet at the beginning, it cannot build and wage war at the same time, the guy is quite weak and just relies on others, In short, the story has great potential but unfortunately not well planned
author is this novel still being continued or not? the problem is that it's a shame that this novel was dropped, I'm really looking forward to the other chapters
Decir que me gustó mucho la historia pero el desarrollo de los personajes como son las esposas deja mucho que desear y bueno me gustaría que siguiera la segunda parte y hablara más de sus esposas
É uma boa história, perfeita para passar o tempo quando não encontra nada decente para ler, recomendo muito que dê uma chance. Achei bem interessante a ideia de transformar Essos em um novo império romano.
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the first 10 chapters or so are good but they are just a fluke the earth that Greg came from had an average iq of 50 and our mc Greg had 80 he get absolutely carried by the system witch magically spawns troop with "feelings". half of the stuff the mc does is illogical and out right stupid the author just isn't capable of writing with the detail that humanity presents..
揭示劇透 I mean I don't think he even watched Got let alone read the books the characters thought process is so wrong like in small council meeting he ha white hire let's murder him like the taygeryens weren't the only one withe white hire
HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM
Author you never explained how people reacted to him just having a soldiers that people have not seen before for example he summons soldiers and people don't say a thing pls explain
The idea for a fanfic is interesting, but the author knows neither the original novel nor the series. Example: it is the year 289.Denerys is about 7-8 years old and the author writes that in two years he will help her escape during the wedding with Drogo, while in the original, during wedding she is 13 years old in book and 17in the series, Another example is Loras Tyrell who both in the book and and in the show is gay, here he is interested in MC's sister (his summoned general) who is a woman. The author literally writes that Loras Tyrell is not angry that MC refused to join him, which wouldn't allow him to get to know his beautiful sister, which is why he is a bit angry about it. But he is not desperate because his lands are full of beautiful women( Read up to Chapter 20)
Nice story😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌 😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌 😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎
This atrocity is an insult to the source material that only stupid or challenged people could enjoy. Do keep that in mind before you start this journey of aneurysms and no grammar.
The protagonist of this work does not know what diplomacy and restraint are in relation to other lords with whom he may well conclude an alliance and there is a feeling that this character does not understand that he has not achieved anything on his own and all he has is all thanks to the system and in fact not his and he should have thought at least once that if everyone gave it to him so easily, then they can take it away with the same ease, well, no, this character is so stupid that he makes enemies where he could make good friends
Un muy buen fanfic de juego de tronos sobre construcción de reino, me gusta que a pesar de tener un sistema y tener tantas ventajas la personalidad del MC no sea odiosa y pretenciosa de que todo lo puede como suelen hacerlo algunos autores, además de que no sea un perro lujurioso digo está bien que disfrute pero la mayoría lo exagera aquí en cambio hay una buena moderacion
j'adore cette fanfiction +++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++
there are many things that make this story great, the characters, the way it drags you in to where you can't stop reading, i only stopped when i reached this part, anyway, the story is very excellent, 8/10 would continue reading, i cannot say much about the uploading of chapters but i hope that they continue with their promise of 1 chapter a day, i would like to see how this story ends up in the future!
It's meh. He has system that serves everything in a silver platter. He summons people from the system. He gets rewarded easily from quests. The writing quality is good but the concept and story itself is meh. It's like a shounen story but without the struggle and action and more plot armour and OPness.
people complain a decent bit but it's in fact great fanfic. The book itself is written nicely with only 1 or 2 spelling errors every 5+ chapters. There was only 1 time when I disliked that the author wasted the Mc's opportunity but this was later fixed which helped progress the Mc's army. Thanks for the book, well-done author can't wait to read more
a good story with an intelligent mc, it has a system that gives rewards even for going from one place to another, otherwise it seems like a normal kingdom construction story.
PLS UPDATE MORE A very good fanfic about game of thrones. I like the system an also the MC is very likable, logical about military an building a kingdom. One of the good novels on this site. Chapters should be longer, also update more. There are few dumb decisions MC makes but overall it's ok.
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