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I only came for yanderes....when do we get to see yanderes? Im already at the part when they fight douglas bullet Anybody Know? Anybody know? Anybody know? ANybody know?
Overly Interesting is the best way to simply describe this story...the ideas, characters, and creativity are all almost top-tier...basically, I advise giving it a try even the first 4 chapters might get you hooked...the two downsides are the grammar mistakes and the updates of chapters if you are a person who focuses more on story than grammar then this is great for you and about the updates it's actually not bad so let me rephrase it: the writer is just too unlucky in real life so he wasn't able to update frequently but I am sure that after his problems are solved he will be updating at a constant rate and his chapters were decided to be prolonged from the 20th chapter which is a positive thing to this type of story...If You Decide To Give It A Try I Hope You Enjoy It As Much As I Did!!!😉👍🏻
▪︎Writing Quality...............☆☆☆☆☆ ▪︎Story Development........☆☆☆☆☆ ▪︎Character Design...........☆☆☆☆☆ ▪︎Updating Stability..........☆☆☆☆☆ ▪︎World Background.........☆☆☆☆☆
is this a huge harem? is this a huge harem? is this a huge harem? is this a huge harem? is this a huge harem? is this a huge harem? is this a huge harem? is this a huge harem?
please update more chapter...... didn't think that mc would be the father figure of roger and the one who teach him..... [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
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The writing quality is good , story development is also good I can easily understand the character design and world background. The only thing I have a problem with is the updating stability but everything else is good and I love the story so please continue writing
Amazing how the story progressed so little in 13 chapters, we know a little bit of the protagonist's story as the father of Roger and the others and that's it ... We saw Roger's death and his burial ...I think you can do that in 5 chapters or less. So I think that's it ... A lot of bullshit.
ESTA MIERDA ES GOOOOOD FUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUCK
the cover photo is cool, the story is unique and quite interesting to read (google translate)[img = koin][img = exp][img = exp][img = exp][img = exp]
The fanfiction has a lot of potential and also has a great start. The only problem would the grammar but the can be easily fix. /////////////////////////////////////////////////////
Very good story [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
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im exited about the feats hhes done. and i need more chapter author please continue this fanfiction cause im liking the way the story goes....
...................................................................A great fanfick...................................................................................................
more chapter. ************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************
I'm the author, so what do you expect? Being shameless is the dao to succes. If you have any questions regardinf the book please comment here and i will try my best to answer it
I only came for yanderes....when do we get to see yanderes? Im already at the part when they fight douglas bullet Anybody Know? Anybody know? Anybody know? ANybody know?
Overly Interesting is the best way to simply describe this story...the ideas, characters, and creativity are all almost top-tier...basically, I advise giving it a try even the first 4 chapters might get you hooked...the two downsides are the grammar mistakes and the updates of chapters if you are a person who focuses more on story than grammar then this is great for you and about the updates it's actually not bad so let me rephrase it: the writer is just too unlucky in real life so he wasn't able to update frequently but I am sure that after his problems are solved he will be updating at a constant rate and his chapters were decided to be prolonged from the 20th chapter which is a positive thing to this type of story...If You Decide To Give It A Try I Hope You Enjoy It As Much As I Did!!!😉👍🏻
▪︎Writing Quality...............☆☆☆☆☆ ▪︎Story Development........☆☆☆☆☆ ▪︎Character Design...........☆☆☆☆☆ ▪︎Updating Stability..........☆☆☆☆☆ ▪︎World Background.........☆☆☆☆☆
is this a huge harem? is this a huge harem? is this a huge harem? is this a huge harem? is this a huge harem? is this a huge harem? is this a huge harem? is this a huge harem?
please update more chapter...... didn't think that mc would be the father figure of roger and the one who teach him..... [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
揭示劇透 The writing quality is good , story development is also good I can easily understand the character design and world background. The only thing I have a problem with is the updating stability but everything else is good and I love the story so please continue writing
Amazing how the story progressed so little in 13 chapters, we know a little bit of the protagonist's story as the father of Roger and the others and that's it ... We saw Roger's death and his burial ...I think you can do that in 5 chapters or less. So I think that's it ... A lot of bullshit.
ESTA MIERDA ES GOOOOOD FUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUCK
the cover photo is cool, the story is unique and quite interesting to read (google translate)[img = koin][img = exp][img = exp][img = exp][img = exp]
The fanfiction has a lot of potential and also has a great start. The only problem would the grammar but the can be easily fix. /////////////////////////////////////////////////////
Very good story [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
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------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- GOOD! VERY VERY GOOD-------------------------------------------------------------
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im exited about the feats hhes done. and i need more chapter author please continue this fanfiction cause im liking the way the story goes....
...................................................................A great fanfick...................................................................................................
more chapter. ************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************
I'm the author, so what do you expect? Being shameless is the dao to succes. If you have any questions regardinf the book please comment here and i will try my best to answer it