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Seriously,I think the author don't even know where the plot going, it's allover the place, sudden time skip without development and without reason, no character development, no world building, I can tolerate bad grammar but the plot, my goodness the plot are painful to read.
This is probably one of the worst books I’ve ever read but what can I say it was made by itachi101 so yeah ddnsbdndjjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjjdjdjdjddjdjjd
Its just the drama build up of the story is already common and we already know what well be the result so usually fanfics erase that kind of drama Having memory loss or wanting to forget it is already an old story so yhe Its boring
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rubbish not suitable for reading..... reading is not recommended at all, it is a waste of time and neurons (Google translate)
Development of this story is all over the place. When he reincarnated he lost memories of anime and etc. And for some reason Author thought it might be good making MC lose all his memories later on the novel. It’s like Author doesn’t have anything to write anymore other than amnesia. Smh the romance are all over the place, there is no development no nothing but somehow Mc who have trust issue love someone. Character development ? Nonexistent. Writing quality? Meh
I haven't read it yet but if your grammar is bad you should use grammarly it's free and it'll improve it just a suggestion,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,, ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,
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all 5 stars for mcs shamelessness.... all i can say that author read atg had weed and started writing.....at least that's what i thought...sorry no offense.....
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HaHaahaha!!! Well it's pretty funny when you anger the other. I like it.keep it up...............................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
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The mc just takes whaterver people do To HiM there needs to be a shameless tag he has a young master personality but never acts with self respect he acets like a simp he literally got wipped with his wifes permission and was like”oh whatever “ otheier than the mc the story is really high quality
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Author I can be quite honest, I went into this book to see if I like it or not, putting myself in the synopsis that its grammar is horrible! Do you think I feel like reading a book like that?! Of course not ?! The synopsis is a description of the book.... You can put an observation but don't just put it and publish it!
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Seriously,I think the author don't even know where the plot going, it's allover the place, sudden time skip without development and without reason, no character development, no world building, I can tolerate bad grammar but the plot, my goodness the plot are painful to read.
This is probably one of the worst books I’ve ever read but what can I say it was made by itachi101 so yeah ddnsbdndjjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjjdjdjdjddjdjjd
Its just the drama build up of the story is already common and we already know what well be the result so usually fanfics erase that kind of drama Having memory loss or wanting to forget it is already an old story so yhe Its boring
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rubbish not suitable for reading..... reading is not recommended at all, it is a waste of time and neurons (Google translate)
Development of this story is all over the place. When he reincarnated he lost memories of anime and etc. And for some reason Author thought it might be good making MC lose all his memories later on the novel. It’s like Author doesn’t have anything to write anymore other than amnesia. Smh the romance are all over the place, there is no development no nothing but somehow Mc who have trust issue love someone. Character development ? Nonexistent. Writing quality? Meh
I haven't read it yet but if your grammar is bad you should use grammarly it's free and it'll improve it just a suggestion,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,, ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,
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all 5 stars for mcs shamelessness.... all i can say that author read atg had weed and started writing.....at least that's what i thought...sorry no offense.....
揭示劇透 HaHaahaha!!! Well it's pretty funny when you anger the other. I like it.keep it up...............................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
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The mc just takes whaterver people do To HiM there needs to be a shameless tag he has a young master personality but never acts with self respect he acets like a simp he literally got wipped with his wifes permission and was like”oh whatever “ otheier than the mc the story is really high quality
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Author I can be quite honest, I went into this book to see if I like it or not, putting myself in the synopsis that its grammar is horrible! Do you think I feel like reading a book like that?! Of course not ?! The synopsis is a description of the book.... You can put an observation but don't just put it and publish it!
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