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Hello, I am writing a review through a translator and please do not scold me. This work is quite rubbish simply because it was turned into a story about a cultivator, acolytes do not develop because they have enough energy. To develop, they need to DRAW runes, but they don’t do this. It should have exploded from oversaturation. The second point is why didn’t he create a knight technique to improve physical parameters to 9 (which is the limit for a great knight)?
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Сюжет будет меняться? А о клоне будет посоветоваться,( тот что в мире богов) Автор прошу когда будете повествовать не забывайте нам описывать местность, Где и как происходит Ваши описание слишком поверхностны у нас очень смутное представление о мире где находится лей
I did read a lot of chapters, around 250 chapters and I must say that th me author is improving his writing quality and if he had a mn editor it will be of a good quality for a fanfiction. the story is great but sometimes I find myself lost because it feels as though things were explained by plot armor and luck. overall it was an enjoyable experience and it refreshed my mind on some details regarding the original story. thank you 😊
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i have not read it yeat bot still i will give you power stone because i have never seen a fanfiction bases on a novel with chapter more than a 100
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I am a fan of the original novel and I'm actually surprised that someone made a fanfic on it. Guess tonight will be a sleepless night if this fanfic turns out to be a masterpiece .
Really badly written summary of wmw with little to no imagination, really disappointing. No new characters, No new plot points, very badly excuted. It is just a rinse and repeat of the original. This is not fanfiction but just plain plagiarism. The author is plagiarizing the plagerist.
Eu gostei de como a história estava indo, mas então ficou completamente entediante e chata de se ler. Não que isso importe, mas adeus, estou parando de ler e desejo sorte para aqueles que ainda permanecem.
Author can you please divide the volume into which world he's at in the story? the book is really good and the plot is good from where I read which is half way through, but I want the general idea of how long he's gonna stay in one world before moving and dividing into vols ISA good way
not evil. just ruthless. mc love his girlfriend/love interest. don't wanna say more if I know this, I would have just dropped directly. but well, he is just a generic Chinese mc kill enemy, and love your friends is what I'll say in end. it might not be all true, but this is the feeling I get till the chp I read. so go for it, non evil likers ig.
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I was really hyped about this novel. The begin was very interesting. He acted fast, ruthless, just like the OG leylin. Unfortunately, all these changed when author wanted him to be "different" from the original leylin. However, the only thing that changed was MC's intelligence literally hard dropping into negatives. He would act spontaneously, make stupid choices. And even going out of his way to suddenly have feelings for girls who NTRed him. Anyhow, the MC is hardcore following the original story. This actually feels like degraded copy-pasta of the original WMW. However, this novel does have the potential. The only thing I hope that author does now is stop following the canon so much. Please be more original, the world of WMW is big and there are lot of ways to innovate the story.
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One of the best fanfic out there, keep up the good work author🔥 nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice...
Props for writing a fanfiction on WMW, that alone deserves a 4/5. Unfortunately, it isn't good by my standards. Fanfictions usually correlate to one of two categories. The first is taking the original background/story of a character and deviating from it to create a new story. The second is following the original story with a different MC or adding a new character to that story and then making an interesting story out of that. The former focuses on originality and the latter on character development. In your fanfic, you are trying to do both and it is not working. You are failing the first category because while there are new worlds and original plots, the character-building/design is terrible. Legit the only thing memorable about Anna was that one line she said about her loyalty. Every other original character, I just remember a name. In the second category, you are failing because the MC is less interesting than the original story. The OG Leylin was a genius mastermind who would train a disciple, trick the disciple, and sacrifice him. That was one of my favorite scenes in the novel because it shows just how calculating and insane Leylin was. That he would build up an entire relationship to throw it away for a consumable item to become stronger. In comparison, your MC is relatively tame when it comes to plotting. There isn't anything insane or impressive about his strategies and thoughts. BTW you should always post a picture of an original character in the characters chapter. Just rip some anime pictures off the web, it'll at least make them slightly more memorable.
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Don’t know if you remember me I was the second person to comment on this story. You took the foundation of wmw and made it yours then blew me away by adding in another story and combining them to make it your own. Really looking forward to where you will take this story.
Brother, i really tried ..read up to 70ch ! but it's just too similar to the Original WMW about 90% ...the thing that i didn't like the most was the way you forced-plot you MC into the Events of the original !! i thought it was a Fanfic ...i guess not!
very good i enjoyed it more than the original kind of. the chapter are long and informative. the character are smart. a little edgee but its kinda who he is. overall fun read.
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Hello, I am writing a review through a translator and please do not scold me. This work is quite rubbish simply because it was turned into a story about a cultivator, acolytes do not develop because they have enough energy. To develop, they need to DRAW runes, but they don’t do this. It should have exploded from oversaturation. The second point is why didn’t he create a knight technique to improve physical parameters to 9 (which is the limit for a great knight)?
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Сюжет будет меняться? А о клоне будет посоветоваться,( тот что в мире богов) Автор прошу когда будете повествовать не забывайте нам описывать местность, Где и как происходит Ваши описание слишком поверхностны у нас очень смутное представление о мире где находится лей
I did read a lot of chapters, around 250 chapters and I must say that th me author is improving his writing quality and if he had a mn editor it will be of a good quality for a fanfiction. the story is great but sometimes I find myself lost because it feels as though things were explained by plot armor and luck. overall it was an enjoyable experience and it refreshed my mind on some details regarding the original story. thank you 😊
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i have not read it yeat bot still i will give you power stone because i have never seen a fanfiction bases on a novel with chapter more than a 100
What is there to say? One of the best novels fanfic with good writing quality amd satisfying plot. Let's go[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
I am a fan of the original novel and I'm actually surprised that someone made a fanfic on it. Guess tonight will be a sleepless night if this fanfic turns out to be a masterpiece .
Really badly written summary of wmw with little to no imagination, really disappointing. No new characters, No new plot points, very badly excuted. It is just a rinse and repeat of the original. This is not fanfiction but just plain plagiarism. The author is plagiarizing the plagerist.
Eu gostei de como a história estava indo, mas então ficou completamente entediante e chata de se ler. Não que isso importe, mas adeus, estou parando de ler e desejo sorte para aqueles que ainda permanecem.
Author can you please divide the volume into which world he's at in the story? the book is really good and the plot is good from where I read which is half way through, but I want the general idea of how long he's gonna stay in one world before moving and dividing into vols ISA good way
not evil. just ruthless. mc love his girlfriend/love interest. don't wanna say more if I know this, I would have just dropped directly. but well, he is just a generic Chinese mc kill enemy, and love your friends is what I'll say in end. it might not be all true, but this is the feeling I get till the chp I read. so go for it, non evil likers ig.
trash............d.d..d..d..d.d.d.d.d.f.f.f.dd..d.d.d.mdmd.d.d.d..dmd.d.dmdmdmdmdmdmdmmdmdmdmd.d.d.d..d.d.d..d.d.d.koek9dooccgdbeeieieiiekkd
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I was really hyped about this novel. The begin was very interesting. He acted fast, ruthless, just like the OG leylin. Unfortunately, all these changed when author wanted him to be "different" from the original leylin. However, the only thing that changed was MC's intelligence literally hard dropping into negatives. He would act spontaneously, make stupid choices. And even going out of his way to suddenly have feelings for girls who NTRed him. Anyhow, the MC is hardcore following the original story. This actually feels like degraded copy-pasta of the original WMW. However, this novel does have the potential. The only thing I hope that author does now is stop following the canon so much. Please be more original, the world of WMW is big and there are lot of ways to innovate the story.
揭示劇透 One of the best fanfic out there, keep up the good work author🔥 nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice...
Props for writing a fanfiction on WMW, that alone deserves a 4/5. Unfortunately, it isn't good by my standards. Fanfictions usually correlate to one of two categories. The first is taking the original background/story of a character and deviating from it to create a new story. The second is following the original story with a different MC or adding a new character to that story and then making an interesting story out of that. The former focuses on originality and the latter on character development. In your fanfic, you are trying to do both and it is not working. You are failing the first category because while there are new worlds and original plots, the character-building/design is terrible. Legit the only thing memorable about Anna was that one line she said about her loyalty. Every other original character, I just remember a name. In the second category, you are failing because the MC is less interesting than the original story. The OG Leylin was a genius mastermind who would train a disciple, trick the disciple, and sacrifice him. That was one of my favorite scenes in the novel because it shows just how calculating and insane Leylin was. That he would build up an entire relationship to throw it away for a consumable item to become stronger. In comparison, your MC is relatively tame when it comes to plotting. There isn't anything insane or impressive about his strategies and thoughts. BTW you should always post a picture of an original character in the characters chapter. Just rip some anime pictures off the web, it'll at least make them slightly more memorable.
揭示劇透 Don’t know if you remember me I was the second person to comment on this story. You took the foundation of wmw and made it yours then blew me away by adding in another story and combining them to make it your own. Really looking forward to where you will take this story.
Brother, i really tried ..read up to 70ch ! but it's just too similar to the Original WMW about 90% ...the thing that i didn't like the most was the way you forced-plot you MC into the Events of the original !! i thought it was a Fanfic ...i guess not!
very good i enjoyed it more than the original kind of. the chapter are long and informative. the character are smart. a little edgee but its kinda who he is. overall fun read.
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pls add more chapters....................