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Leaving this here, I am awaiting for the Authors childish backlash like all the other bad reviews. Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//
I think Author better go at Slice of life than Apocalypse at first I like the idea novel base on but MC get power up non-stop and the power he gets so powerful that the whole Apocalypse thing doesn't feel anything Apocalypse at all other than then-novel names and what the point of Apocalypse novel...??? as MC has an underground base that have anything he needs and will need in the future ?!
where should i start with this novel..the dopey mc,the system.. everything went wrong. I was really looking forward to the story and thought it would turn out good but all I got was disappointment. etc the mc finds out the world is going to end. zombie apocalypse..and his reaction.. "meh it'll be alright" he would rather take the fl on a outing then get ready to prepare. there's so much that was oterly crap but I won't waste time writing it
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Overall 3.4 It’s the standard Webnovel wish fulfillment of a weaboo NEET—cringy and disorganized, but stupid funny and somewhat cultured. Writing 3 Commas are used to make run-on sentences. Proper nouns aren’t capitalized. Contractions don’t have an apostrophe, etc. Some things are repeated. POV shifts are bad. Author doesn’t transition smoothly in time frames. There’s an unnecessary flashback when the chapter could’ve started there from the last chapter. Try asking a reader with better grammar to edit or use Google Docs to see suggested changes? Updating 5 3 chps/week. Story 3 Stupid slacker with dumb luck and good looks gets bothered by system, its overseer, etc. and he decides to vibe. I didn’t want to read simping or verbal abuse. Character 3 Everyone is bothersome to the MC. Overseer acts inconsistent with her template. Why blush when your hand is held and you don’t like the guy? A fighter can easily brush an inexperienced guy’s hand. Background 3 Not much to see. Pretty generic.
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well boys lets say F for the book author probably dropped it because of classes and stuff but it was good i hope ur okay author but come back and give us more chapters please F F F
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Really nice novel. I like the idea of making a base, upgrading it while having a gacha system.. Also does anyone know any novels like this? Because I can't find anything like this..
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writing quality:4/5 better than most novel here but also not perfect story development:4/5 it's not perfect but it's better than most novel and ff here and I like the harem even though there's some cringe moments character design:4,5/5 I like all of the summoned character it's the first time I see sans and chara in a novel/ff and the mc isn't stupid but also isn't incredibly intelligent but the system is here to make him op so he never will be weak others than in the 10 few chapter and even then he wasn't weak he just wasn't as op as now. update stability:5/5 1 chapter daily and sometimes even 2 chapter if the author feels motivated world background:5/5 we don't know much about the world others than it was similar to ours before the apocalypse but from the little we saw and from what the author said the world seems pretty interested (even tho we still didn't see any characters from the outside world other than the mc) and the SCP foundation really exist so that alone deserves 5/5 I hope my review was helpful and if I missed something feel free to comment.
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So let's start with writing quality..... It's good. one of the fanfics that has decent and understandable sentences and grammar. The writing is not really detailed for those who like to long paragraphs who give off many explanations. To me the writing is giving me a vibe of relaxation and it's pretty easy to understand yep. The updating stability, considering it's still early, not much is known. It might change later as the novel goes on. But hey! The author did post 4 chapters at once! So I'll give it a good review. Story development. Just like the updating stability, the story hasn't progressed that much yet. But the story does have a good writing so expect the fanfic to be understandable and good. Character Design. Well we can't really replicate a character completely right? But the characters here do have feelings and do not talk like robots or some sh*t. The interactions are pretty well said if I do say. The mc seems like a guy who's pretty hype and loves his waifus dearly. Now the world background is great. Author really thought of this. Well you can check the auxiliary chapters there and you'll know what I mean. Hey! Author-san! Thnx for making this novel. I like fate series so having something related to fate really make me want to read it. Better yet this fanfic is one of the novels which has potential. Hope for some more good chapters! Peace.
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Leaving this here, I am awaiting for the Authors childish backlash like all the other bad reviews. Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//Pogkek//
I think Author better go at Slice of life than Apocalypse at first I like the idea novel base on but MC get power up non-stop and the power he gets so powerful that the whole Apocalypse thing doesn't feel anything Apocalypse at all other than then-novel names and what the point of Apocalypse novel...??? as MC has an underground base that have anything he needs and will need in the future ?!
where should i start with this novel..the dopey mc,the system.. everything went wrong. I was really looking forward to the story and thought it would turn out good but all I got was disappointment. etc the mc finds out the world is going to end. zombie apocalypse..and his reaction.. "meh it'll be alright" he would rather take the fl on a outing then get ready to prepare. there's so much that was oterly crap but I won't waste time writing it
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Overall 3.4 It’s the standard Webnovel wish fulfillment of a weaboo NEET—cringy and disorganized, but stupid funny and somewhat cultured. Writing 3 Commas are used to make run-on sentences. Proper nouns aren’t capitalized. Contractions don’t have an apostrophe, etc. Some things are repeated. POV shifts are bad. Author doesn’t transition smoothly in time frames. There’s an unnecessary flashback when the chapter could’ve started there from the last chapter. Try asking a reader with better grammar to edit or use Google Docs to see suggested changes? Updating 5 3 chps/week. Story 3 Stupid slacker with dumb luck and good looks gets bothered by system, its overseer, etc. and he decides to vibe. I didn’t want to read simping or verbal abuse. Character 3 Everyone is bothersome to the MC. Overseer acts inconsistent with her template. Why blush when your hand is held and you don’t like the guy? A fighter can easily brush an inexperienced guy’s hand. Background 3 Not much to see. Pretty generic.
揭示劇透 well boys lets say F for the book author probably dropped it because of classes and stuff but it was good i hope ur okay author but come back and give us more chapters please F F F
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Really nice novel. I like the idea of making a base, upgrading it while having a gacha system.. Also does anyone know any novels like this? Because I can't find anything like this..
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writing quality:4/5 better than most novel here but also not perfect story development:4/5 it's not perfect but it's better than most novel and ff here and I like the harem even though there's some cringe moments character design:4,5/5 I like all of the summoned character it's the first time I see sans and chara in a novel/ff and the mc isn't stupid but also isn't incredibly intelligent but the system is here to make him op so he never will be weak others than in the 10 few chapter and even then he wasn't weak he just wasn't as op as now. update stability:5/5 1 chapter daily and sometimes even 2 chapter if the author feels motivated world background:5/5 we don't know much about the world others than it was similar to ours before the apocalypse but from the little we saw and from what the author said the world seems pretty interested (even tho we still didn't see any characters from the outside world other than the mc) and the SCP foundation really exist so that alone deserves 5/5 I hope my review was helpful and if I missed something feel free to comment.
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So let's start with writing quality..... It's good. one of the fanfics that has decent and understandable sentences and grammar. The writing is not really detailed for those who like to long paragraphs who give off many explanations. To me the writing is giving me a vibe of relaxation and it's pretty easy to understand yep. The updating stability, considering it's still early, not much is known. It might change later as the novel goes on. But hey! The author did post 4 chapters at once! So I'll give it a good review. Story development. Just like the updating stability, the story hasn't progressed that much yet. But the story does have a good writing so expect the fanfic to be understandable and good. Character Design. Well we can't really replicate a character completely right? But the characters here do have feelings and do not talk like robots or some sh*t. The interactions are pretty well said if I do say. The mc seems like a guy who's pretty hype and loves his waifus dearly. Now the world background is great. Author really thought of this. Well you can check the auxiliary chapters there and you'll know what I mean. Hey! Author-san! Thnx for making this novel. I like fate series so having something related to fate really make me want to read it. Better yet this fanfic is one of the novels which has potential. Hope for some more good chapters! Peace.
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