/ Fantasy / BORN RULER: The Heavens are just my subordinates
摘要
If the heavens do exist, then I'll make them my servants.
If they are the law makers, I'll will turn them upside down.
I'm am me, and If there is destiny, I'll make l become it's destination.
If there is creation, then I'll become the creator.
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~brightbrain~
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寫檢討Quite an intriguing story we have here. Review after reading upto chapter 19 Writing Quality: The narratives were expressed well. There are very few g-errors but not too much to hinder you from your reading. Story Development. The development of the story is flowing with great fluidity. And as you proceeds from chapter to chapter, it keeps you from reading more. Character Design. I must say that I enjoy the attitude of the main character. He is a troublemaker but a confident one. A confident troublemaker xd. The other characters don't feel bland or carbon copy from each other and had their own unique personas. Updating Stability. It seems the updates are stable so far. World Background: I think the world background is pretty well made with enough descriptives that makes you captivated. There is also no scenes that feels like info dumps as everything flow naturally. Overall if you're looking to a interesting read with vampires and supernaturals, then you can definitely give this a try and I tell you that you won't be disappointed reading this. keep up the great work, author!
Intriguing loving the story line and would definitely recommend it, just make sure you have enough time this book is addictive, the storyline is captivating i would highly recommend this book, as its a masterpiece. Thanks author
Okay so, WOW. I like where this book is going honestly. The author knows how to make his or her readers intrigued by everything that's going on. The details are immaculate too. Well done! [img=recommend]
Fast paced and intriguing, the synopsis pulled me right in and I have no regrets. Looking forward to more of your chapters~!!!
Reading the first chapter, its so awesome! Action-packed and quite intriguing though there are little grammar mistakes. Looking forward for the next ones!
The premise of the story is good. An MC that is different from the rest, who is treated differently compared to others is sure to get the readers excited as it did me. It was an amazing experience. One area that seemed lacking was the usage of correct grammar and sentences. Otherwise, the story is gold with a smooth flowing story!
The story is well written, just a few grammatical errors, but it's impressive. The author did a job bringing the characters to live. The plot is well constructed, the character outline is well defined. Great job author
A really impressive story. The pacing is done well and the characters also are designed well. A few grammar mistakes here and there, but they do not harm the reading experience.
Nicely done. Really engaging Chapters and beautifully written paragraphs. A few grammatical mistakes in between but that much is acceptable. Really love it. Keep writing ❤️ ❤️ .
The book itself is actually really nice. The character development or build is to the tee I love it. Update stability and world design are also top notch. The problem I have with the book is the grammatical construct. I forgot that English doesn't seem to be your first language or even if it is, people are not above mistakes. So what you can do right now is just to get an editor or a proofread editor to help me to check everything then adjust it.
Awesome, the story is very unique and different. Vampire, magic, I really like it [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend] good work, Author
The storyline is quite unique, the character design is amazing at least in my opinion. The story definitely has lots of potential. I hope to see this story continue!
I am kinda bored today, so I guess I can leave a review while I read the last chapter.... Good stuff👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍 EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP
I have to say, the world background and overall concept of the story is interesting, but... characters are a bit 2D, and the writing quality is far from perfect. However, since you are a new writer, this is completely reasonable. I believe as long as you continue practicing, this book or any of your future ones if you do choose to write another has the potential to become one of the top novels of the site. Keep it up!
Got me hooked from the beginning. I love the flow and the vivid characters. All in all this is yet another good find (sorry I don't have any powerstones at the moment else I would have voted)
I read the first few chapters and I must, this unique style is very interesting. I've read too much novels where the main character is a lowly peasant where he has to climb his way up the power ladder. This is a refreshing read for me as the author does things differently. Great work! 👍👍
A short preface: as it seems, the writer is only 15 years of age, and coincidentally, that is also the age I began writing at, and I simply wish good luck to this newbie author on their writing endeavors. The writing quality makes for a legible book, though the earlier chapters need refinement in regards to small grammatical and syntactical mistakes. Not much to say on the updates. The story and characters are developed in a nice way, and with time and more content, will get the fleshing they deserve. As for the world background, it's one that I like, and the author does present it in a well-done manner, though more exposition in the earlier chapters wouldn't hurt.
This story has a great amount of potential to become something great. No exaggerations are needed. The premise of the story is quite captivating, to say the least. Synopsis: It's a unique synopsis that I like. However, more could be added to it as it gave little to no information on what the story was about. It also had a few grammatical errors so would be good if you made some edits. Writing Quality: This is where your story falls short and the reason it didn't receive full marks from me. In not too sure if your first language is English so I didn't mark you too hard. However, your grammar needs some work. While it was not completely unreadable, I can tell you that many readers will become frustrated trying to read your story. I would recommend downloading Grammarly to help you with the issues you face. Story Development: Very nice. I liked how it dived right into an action scene from the get-go. Was quite captivating. Good job author. Character Design: You didn't say too much in regards to this. But that's down to your preference. Some readers like to imagine how the characters look for themselves instead of having them detailed by the author. So, it goes both ways. Overall, not a bad book. It has enormous potential to become something good. Just fix the grammar and you're good to do. Best of luck, author!
This story is lit! I gotta say I'm impressed! With such unique take of the genre, this will fare well in the future! The author is talented and skilled with his craft! Kudos and Good luck! from Review swap.....