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I'll be honest to you author the story sacrificed character and world building to be a fast paced leveling and power ups the synopsis, prologue, and reason are all just tropes. the story is full of cliches which is not bad if used correctly but every character in your story are all 1 dimensional as I'm currently reading so to those who want to read this you need to turn off your brain to enjoy it think of the mc as you playing a character in a game not a character in a story.
I don't care abt the hate comments. I know that you already founded your foundations so you can't make some major changes so the thing you can at least do is to improve. The first chapters have flaws, I can clearly see that the logic we think is different in here. However, despite of all that flaws, the story still managed to hook me up because of the FUN. A pure fun. You don't mind the errors, but just go with the flow. I know that people can't see the plot but at least there is FUN in there. People already forget what is fun and just focus on errors. We can clearly see that this is the root of author's improvement. Such flaws can't be fixed in the past so at least try to mold the future. Hope that the author can at least plan before write, that us at least the suggestion I can give.
The MC is stupid, illogical, and arrogant -destroys half the kingdom because the guards wont let him enter. -Says he wants to get stronger quickly and wants a powerful skill. Gets two random powerful skill but says he'll save it for later(illogical since he's incredibly weak and the skills are random, should've just recieved them and train(though his luck and plot armor might give him what he needs so not really illogical I guess)). The King is stupid and illogical -MC destroys half his kingdom but he's the one apologising and compensating the MC, feels like the MC can ràpe his daughter and he will even reward the MC for it(though might be considered smart but he acted too cowardly) -Gets angry later when the MC talks arrogantly with him(even though he always do and had no problems). -Gets shocked when MC defeated a level 300 Royal guard even though he knew the MC one shotted a level 500 dragon a day ago.
well i did not read any thing .. but to support your future novels. my score .. 5.0 .......................................................
It's good but there are some grammar issues like sometimes he's saying leave instead of left and it's annoying but otherwise it's okay I guess but the leveling in this book is redundant it doesn't make sense the author just keeps on introducing stronger things to fight but eventually it's going to be redundant too heh [img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins]
The story is interesting, and the world building is good. But I think the story moves too fast. The host can defeat a level 3000 boss in 10 chapters.
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while the idea and plot are interesting to look at the concept of the leveling system is insane a level 110 have more than double the points of a level 99 and makes lower levels meaningless because of the amount of stats you gain what that means is either stats can't matter or you make a character so ridiculously overpowered that levels mean nothing as he can't lose making any fight meaningless because we know he will escape it removed all stakes in a fight and the skill system is broken being a monster means double skills and exclusive skills for the main characters also to make a note the side should not be there if the dynamic character meaning that there obviously not going to constantly praise him for being overpowered for the beginning it's fine a they don't know him but wouldn't you get annoyed at someone constantly showing you up I know I would also I will warn you having a character this strong is going to make even the boss fight look easy or you will fall into the trap of dragon ball always coming up with more powerful enemies to keep up and struggling to reintroduce old enemies or him killing all of them
I like how this book starts out with how he a genius highschool boy and he still doesn’t have a girlfriend yet but then he is going to go get his noble prize then he slips on a banana and falls and dies. To me it sort of give off that reincarnation vibe or a vibe like this book is going to be amazing to read and the further I read in the better I’m liking the story line. Also even though im not a person that make manga’s or comics to me I’m thinking that this book or novel would turn out to be a really good comic or manga even though it has up to 800-900 correct me ot im wrong but it’s a really outstanding book and it peaked my interest. 👍🏻
umm...I dont understand how f the dragon king died or not plz explain author and as I have nothing to say and I atleast have to write 140 word and I am done
More chapter please ////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////
I like your work, That's definitely true. But i just think that story is so fast but even if it fast it still entertains us the reader. Keep the Good work continues cause we reader love your work and hopes that you and us reader can see the ending of this story.
I haven't read it yet, but from what I can tell he won't kill human(innocent or not) because his goal is to become HUMAN again. Maybe I'm wrong but don't worry I'll give a positive star ⭐ in review.
I love this story but need to be free to read without lock ….........…..............….....................................................................
I need lots of update on the story 😺😺😺😺😺😺😺😺😺😺😺😺😺😺😺 😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀 😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁 🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺
honestly ita too much like the levels and the system and everything is just too overpowering and it doesnt have that tag the synopsis makes it seem like itll be way harder than what it is for the mc and well everything kinda just falls in his lap the characters hold barely substance in their personalities and the mc "remembers" all hes done on earth which is alot but it happens at random times ig the author was trying to flush out his character more but like it didnt work and was kinda annoying after a bit like ik mc is a genius amd what not but like again remembering all that stuff should have been in the beggining instead of in the middle also and he just gets to op to soon and his personality well what i can make of it at least is to say erratic not ero but like chaotic and never really focusses on one thing or another story doesnt feel natural at all and im more than comfy with isekie
Honestly, the story is too fast paced. I mean we know nothing about the MC and the world. To be fair I only read 5 chapters but i dont like how fast paced it is. I hope you do well on your book.
I'm not good at making superb review but I will recommend this masterpiece though the the other grammar is not capable with other sentences. I will support you. Hehe salamat sa iyo? that's a thank you for Filipino word right?
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if you can get past the bad grammar, over-generous rewards, bad punctuation, and it being forced pretty badly, I am sure you will enjoy it. JA NE
Even though the idea of the world that the novel built upon is not completely new and unique, it is a good read. The plot is interesting, but sometimes I feel the MC unusual know it all. The characters might need more design. However, I only read just ten chapters. Will keep reading more. I will update the review when I read more.
This story is pretty interesting. The main character’s limits are his imagination and his morals, and he has no problem killing a hero for some stats. Its definitely a fun read if you’re into the “overpowered and obliterates everything” main character. The only thing this novel lacks is interesting worldbuilding. It seems a bit generic, with vanilla races, skills, and classes that you’d expect. Overall, its a good fun read.
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The only reason i am giving it this amount of stars is because it feels like there are some missing chapters, he knows some how knows things that werent explained to us on how he knows it but other than that its a good story.
for the past week I have been digging in every corner of this app to try and find the perfect system book and I cam across this, absolutely perfect.
Hello! This is the author who is shamelessly reviewing his novel! I wanted to say that I will do a mass release of 5 chapters if we reach 100 power votes. So sorry for the grammatical errors and I already edited it so you won't encounter something like that. Please do give me some suggestions on how to improve it. thank you for reading and have a great day!
I'll be honest to you author the story sacrificed character and world building to be a fast paced leveling and power ups the synopsis, prologue, and reason are all just tropes. the story is full of cliches which is not bad if used correctly but every character in your story are all 1 dimensional as I'm currently reading so to those who want to read this you need to turn off your brain to enjoy it think of the mc as you playing a character in a game not a character in a story.
I don't care abt the hate comments. I know that you already founded your foundations so you can't make some major changes so the thing you can at least do is to improve. The first chapters have flaws, I can clearly see that the logic we think is different in here. However, despite of all that flaws, the story still managed to hook me up because of the FUN. A pure fun. You don't mind the errors, but just go with the flow. I know that people can't see the plot but at least there is FUN in there. People already forget what is fun and just focus on errors. We can clearly see that this is the root of author's improvement. Such flaws can't be fixed in the past so at least try to mold the future. Hope that the author can at least plan before write, that us at least the suggestion I can give.
The MC is stupid, illogical, and arrogant -destroys half the kingdom because the guards wont let him enter. -Says he wants to get stronger quickly and wants a powerful skill. Gets two random powerful skill but says he'll save it for later(illogical since he's incredibly weak and the skills are random, should've just recieved them and train(though his luck and plot armor might give him what he needs so not really illogical I guess)). The King is stupid and illogical -MC destroys half his kingdom but he's the one apologising and compensating the MC, feels like the MC can ràpe his daughter and he will even reward the MC for it(though might be considered smart but he acted too cowardly) -Gets angry later when the MC talks arrogantly with him(even though he always do and had no problems). -Gets shocked when MC defeated a level 300 Royal guard even though he knew the MC one shotted a level 500 dragon a day ago.
well i did not read any thing .. but to support your future novels. my score .. 5.0 .......................................................
It's good but there are some grammar issues like sometimes he's saying leave instead of left and it's annoying but otherwise it's okay I guess but the leveling in this book is redundant it doesn't make sense the author just keeps on introducing stronger things to fight but eventually it's going to be redundant too heh [img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins]
The story is interesting, and the world building is good. But I think the story moves too fast. The host can defeat a level 3000 boss in 10 chapters.
揭示劇透 while the idea and plot are interesting to look at the concept of the leveling system is insane a level 110 have more than double the points of a level 99 and makes lower levels meaningless because of the amount of stats you gain what that means is either stats can't matter or you make a character so ridiculously overpowered that levels mean nothing as he can't lose making any fight meaningless because we know he will escape it removed all stakes in a fight and the skill system is broken being a monster means double skills and exclusive skills for the main characters also to make a note the side should not be there if the dynamic character meaning that there obviously not going to constantly praise him for being overpowered for the beginning it's fine a they don't know him but wouldn't you get annoyed at someone constantly showing you up I know I would also I will warn you having a character this strong is going to make even the boss fight look easy or you will fall into the trap of dragon ball always coming up with more powerful enemies to keep up and struggling to reintroduce old enemies or him killing all of them
I like how this book starts out with how he a genius highschool boy and he still doesn’t have a girlfriend yet but then he is going to go get his noble prize then he slips on a banana and falls and dies. To me it sort of give off that reincarnation vibe or a vibe like this book is going to be amazing to read and the further I read in the better I’m liking the story line. Also even though im not a person that make manga’s or comics to me I’m thinking that this book or novel would turn out to be a really good comic or manga even though it has up to 800-900 correct me ot im wrong but it’s a really outstanding book and it peaked my interest. 👍🏻
umm...I dont understand how f the dragon king died or not plz explain author and as I have nothing to say and I atleast have to write 140 word and I am done
More chapter please ////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////
I like your work, That's definitely true. But i just think that story is so fast but even if it fast it still entertains us the reader. Keep the Good work continues cause we reader love your work and hopes that you and us reader can see the ending of this story.
I haven't read it yet, but from what I can tell he won't kill human(innocent or not) because his goal is to become HUMAN again. Maybe I'm wrong but don't worry I'll give a positive star ⭐ in review.
I love this story but need to be free to read without lock ….........…..............….....................................................................
I need lots of update on the story 😺😺😺😺😺😺😺😺😺😺😺😺😺😺😺 😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀 😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁 🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺
honestly ita too much like the levels and the system and everything is just too overpowering and it doesnt have that tag the synopsis makes it seem like itll be way harder than what it is for the mc and well everything kinda just falls in his lap the characters hold barely substance in their personalities and the mc "remembers" all hes done on earth which is alot but it happens at random times ig the author was trying to flush out his character more but like it didnt work and was kinda annoying after a bit like ik mc is a genius amd what not but like again remembering all that stuff should have been in the beggining instead of in the middle also and he just gets to op to soon and his personality well what i can make of it at least is to say erratic not ero but like chaotic and never really focusses on one thing or another story doesnt feel natural at all and im more than comfy with isekie
Honestly, the story is too fast paced. I mean we know nothing about the MC and the world. To be fair I only read 5 chapters but i dont like how fast paced it is. I hope you do well on your book.
I'm not good at making superb review but I will recommend this masterpiece though the the other grammar is not capable with other sentences. I will support you. Hehe salamat sa iyo? that's a thank you for Filipino word right?
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if you can get past the bad grammar, over-generous rewards, bad punctuation, and it being forced pretty badly, I am sure you will enjoy it. JA NE
Even though the idea of the world that the novel built upon is not completely new and unique, it is a good read. The plot is interesting, but sometimes I feel the MC unusual know it all. The characters might need more design. However, I only read just ten chapters. Will keep reading more. I will update the review when I read more.
This story is pretty interesting. The main character’s limits are his imagination and his morals, and he has no problem killing a hero for some stats. Its definitely a fun read if you’re into the “overpowered and obliterates everything” main character. The only thing this novel lacks is interesting worldbuilding. It seems a bit generic, with vanilla races, skills, and classes that you’d expect. Overall, its a good fun read.
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The only reason i am giving it this amount of stars is because it feels like there are some missing chapters, he knows some how knows things that werent explained to us on how he knows it but other than that its a good story.
for the past week I have been digging in every corner of this app to try and find the perfect system book and I cam across this, absolutely perfect.
Hello! This is the author who is shamelessly reviewing his novel! I wanted to say that I will do a mass release of 5 chapters if we reach 100 power votes. So sorry for the grammatical errors and I already edited it so you won't encounter something like that. Please do give me some suggestions on how to improve it. thank you for reading and have a great day!