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look I'm going to be honest the summary drew me in it really did but when I started reading it I was confused. you had 2 or 3 chapters of explaining the system that could have been one, you had him be dead from the polls and used 2 or three chapters again that could have been one, then you didn't introduce the nieces the story on what it's about the uncle and the nieces until chapter 11 I believe I couldn't read anymore after that. half of the story is nothing but filler and I understand you have set a place for the characters but not 7 or so chapters that's just filler. I dont know if he even meet the nieces or not because I just couldn't read it after chapter 11 or whatever chapter the nieces were introduced by cameo. dont gey me started on that system that took his soul like yeah I searched for you and took half your soul are you okay with that
the story is good but, sigh. its so tiring to read for example, when its explaining how the system function works it takes 2-3 chapters or sometimes it just go around and around before he fet to the point, what usually need 1 sentence to explain become 2-3 sentence or almost a chapter. i like the story but unfortunately not the writing and the system too.
honestly, I feel like MC is super stupid. The guy got very good items and yet didn't do anything with them to prepare himself for the dungeon. He just went to the place like he was going to a walk in the park. I read up to chapter 21 and felt like the power author gave to MC is stupid and even when he got the gravity powers, he refused to use them and just let them there in his inventory. I can't also understand how MC is a former soldier or something in his previous life and yet the guy didn't even prepare himself for the dungeon. Author said that the guys body is skinny and he just went to a dungeon just like that. If your body is weak then you should use the gravity grimoire ans next time you get a book of power then you can give it to your sister. Man, MC is stupid and also other characters are boring and even after 21 chapters, I couldn't find something that could make me get attached to the story. The story has a big potential but the author isn't trying to build it or even developing the MC and other characters
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This novel has potential, but it is redundant. The story is filled with merciless infodumps that constantly come back with a vengeance, the fact that they are often awkwardly written is a bonus. In the 19 chapters I read, the MC only cleaned himself in the bathroom repeatedly and just barely entered his first dungeon. I also have a feeling that the characters in this story are a bunch of walking scripts (MC's interactions with Lily and his Ice Queen manager felt especially awkward). In contrast, the Roulette System is really interesting, as it isn't constrained by popular items from different works and it truly feels like anything could come out of it (though the pills and the all-purpose smart knife did feel a little too convenient). In short, characters and writing need an upgrade. I really want to start properly reading this work instead of skimming through it, as it genuinely has its own uniqueness. Thanks for your hard work, Author!
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look I'm going to be honest the summary drew me in it really did but when I started reading it I was confused. you had 2 or 3 chapters of explaining the system that could have been one, you had him be dead from the polls and used 2 or three chapters again that could have been one, then you didn't introduce the nieces the story on what it's about the uncle and the nieces until chapter 11 I believe I couldn't read anymore after that. half of the story is nothing but filler and I understand you have set a place for the characters but not 7 or so chapters that's just filler. I dont know if he even meet the nieces or not because I just couldn't read it after chapter 11 or whatever chapter the nieces were introduced by cameo. dont gey me started on that system that took his soul like yeah I searched for you and took half your soul are you okay with that
the story is good but, sigh. its so tiring to read for example, when its explaining how the system function works it takes 2-3 chapters or sometimes it just go around and around before he fet to the point, what usually need 1 sentence to explain become 2-3 sentence or almost a chapter. i like the story but unfortunately not the writing and the system too.
honestly, I feel like MC is super stupid. The guy got very good items and yet didn't do anything with them to prepare himself for the dungeon. He just went to the place like he was going to a walk in the park. I read up to chapter 21 and felt like the power author gave to MC is stupid and even when he got the gravity powers, he refused to use them and just let them there in his inventory. I can't also understand how MC is a former soldier or something in his previous life and yet the guy didn't even prepare himself for the dungeon. Author said that the guys body is skinny and he just went to a dungeon just like that. If your body is weak then you should use the gravity grimoire ans next time you get a book of power then you can give it to your sister. Man, MC is stupid and also other characters are boring and even after 21 chapters, I couldn't find something that could make me get attached to the story. The story has a big potential but the author isn't trying to build it or even developing the MC and other characters
揭示劇透 This novel has potential, but it is redundant. The story is filled with merciless infodumps that constantly come back with a vengeance, the fact that they are often awkwardly written is a bonus. In the 19 chapters I read, the MC only cleaned himself in the bathroom repeatedly and just barely entered his first dungeon. I also have a feeling that the characters in this story are a bunch of walking scripts (MC's interactions with Lily and his Ice Queen manager felt especially awkward). In contrast, the Roulette System is really interesting, as it isn't constrained by popular items from different works and it truly feels like anything could come out of it (though the pills and the all-purpose smart knife did feel a little too convenient). In short, characters and writing need an upgrade. I really want to start properly reading this work instead of skimming through it, as it genuinely has its own uniqueness. Thanks for your hard work, Author!
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