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Except from confusing words like nobility and etc. This is good story, I hope those remarks will fix and I don't have problem about Yuri tag as long it's not too much focus on them, I like how you changed Riser for the better which change the Elite 4 rising rookie Devil in the future chapter
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si actualizaras seguido seria genial D. .............................................................................................................................................................................................................
I'm happy with the "yuri" tag. - But clarify something for me (you will change the whole story because if you put "yuri" you will have to change the protagonist to a woman xD). - If it were a "yuri" with the label "futanari" I approve it, if you read my review, please answer, in passing for others to read it too.
Even though your writing needs improvement the story has potential. 👌👌👌👌👍👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👍👌👌👌👌👌👍👌👌👌👌👌👍👌👌👌👌👌👍👌👌
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The story i think is okay, but the english is seriously terrible, genders are completely wrong 90% of the time, the sentences are hard to understand and require you to reread them a few times to understand what is happening. I understand it is translated using google translate but seriously it is really poor. It is a shame because i think this could be a great fanfic if the english was better.
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Another mc who own OP sacred gear but also want to be a dog of someone because he want to become a high ranking devil that's why he will join a peerage. what a waste 😩
Except from confusing words like nobility and etc. This is good story, I hope those remarks will fix and I don't have problem about Yuri tag as long it's not too much focus on them, I like how you changed Riser for the better which change the Elite 4 rising rookie Devil in the future chapter
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si actualizaras seguido seria genial D. .............................................................................................................................................................................................................
I'm happy with the "yuri" tag. - But clarify something for me (you will change the whole story because if you put "yuri" you will have to change the protagonist to a woman xD). - If it were a "yuri" with the label "futanari" I approve it, if you read my review, please answer, in passing for others to read it too.
Even though your writing needs improvement the story has potential. 👌👌👌👌👍👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👍👌👌👌👌👌👍👌👌👌👌👌👍👌👌👌👌👌👍👌👌
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The story i think is okay, but the english is seriously terrible, genders are completely wrong 90% of the time, the sentences are hard to understand and require you to reread them a few times to understand what is happening. I understand it is translated using google translate but seriously it is really poor. It is a shame because i think this could be a great fanfic if the english was better.
good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good v
interesing. *********************************************************************************************************************************************************
Another mc who own OP sacred gear but also want to be a dog of someone because he want to become a high ranking devil that's why he will join a peerage. what a waste 😩