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I like the concept of the story,but I don't think the multiple points of view is a good thing.I think that if you want to get every ones fillings about what is happening in the story then do 3rd person point of view were you get every ones reactions.But then again I don't think having every single persons feelings is good maybe if you stuck to 1,2,or3 people's points of view that it will be better and then so often do a third person point of view and tell how everyone is feeling.
I love this story😍😍😍please continue this story[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]i really want to read more of this, it's just so awesome[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend] please please please please continue this story
I like the concept of the story,but I don't think the multiple points of view is a good thing.I think that if you want to get every ones fillings about what is happening in the story then do 3rd person point of view were you get every ones reactions.But then again I don't think having every single persons feelings is good maybe if you stuck to 1,2,or3 people's points of view that it will be better and then so often do a third person point of view and tell how everyone is feeling.
I love this story😍😍😍please continue this story[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]i really want to read more of this, it's just so awesome[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend] please please please please continue this story