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First, thanks for this book. Here is my review; **************************************** The story and world background, power system and the system item has a very good concept. The idea behind it is great if you understand what the author is trying to portray. The same applies to the character. But here are the challenges; Though, there is a very good concept, the way they are executed are poorly done. The characters feels plain, the descriptions are the same. The emotions aren't shown or are almost nearly non-existent. For example, Lucian or rather the main character of this story is supposed to be a veteran, an S rank adventurer but the way he is written as makes him look more of an amateur than a veteran. His thought process is almost like a kid, and even kids have emotions but we readers didnt feel any. For example 👇 Another example is him getting betrayed, we as readers didnt feel the emotion behind it, it just felt bland like what bread without butter. The pain, the sorrow, the anger, fear of having to end his life here without fulfilling his future goals, mix of joy remembering himself with companions in the past along with fear of the betrayal. We, the readers didnt see any of these, so it undermined the scene and story. After having been betrayed by your closest companions, one who except to be wary of a 2nd act but Lucian as a character still act naive even with all his memories. **************************************** Well, that's my thought on what can be improved on. Except making 'personal' comics for fun, I have never written nor publish any books. So I can't correct nor do I have the right to say this is bad. In fact, this book really has a good concept but it needs massive improvement for its true potential to bloom. About the grammar, I didnt talk on tha because everyone starts from somewhere and definitely you will improve along the way. **************************************** Also, all my comment is base on the first 15 chapters. I know nothing of the next 100 chapters. And it will obviously improve by then. Another thing, I rate update as 5 star because I can't play unfairly. I only started reading this book, and there is already over 300 chapters, so it will be bad to rate that too low. Anyway, goodluck Auuthor, and we hope for the best. Lookimg forward to your improvement.
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morgan is the cover ,gotta give it a 5* as that is her rating in fgo . i haven't really read it but imma give it 5* just because its morgan ,a waifu of mine .
Say hello to the one who... Hello!! Are we going to review this? Yes, we are!! Can we just give it 5-star and left? No!! But we just did... LOL!!
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I haven't read much but so far it's a pretty enjoyable story, I hope the author keeps posting regularly and finishes the story. I saw that he has some stories that have not been finished yet, I hope he is not the kind of author that drops his stories.
Very slow story but also very consistent. Maybe all the Status could be better used and also better developed, but that doesn't bother me. What I liked the most was the dialogues between the characters, the quality of the dialogues is much better than everything else. Too many grammatical mistakes.
A pretty decent novel. Grammar problems are frequent, but it not ruined my experience. Keep up the good work :) I hope you will continue writing new novels and that in the future you will receive a lot of recognition.
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currently chapter 55. I think it's still worth trying............................................................................................................................................
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Despite the grammatical errors, the story is pretty interesting so far. I really like this style of Japanese Isekai, I hope you don't abandon the story
I'm glad you're posting chapters again, don't let yourself be shaken, and don't try too hard, if you can keep 1 chapter daily, we as readers will be happy. By the way... 👻 I am the ghost of the millennium. I came here to mark my presence. If you are lucky enough to see my review, smile, you will have 2 lucky minutes~ 👻
An amazing book, I recommend this book beyond any doubt. I read all the chapters so far twice. I can hardly stay patient for the weekly releases. If anyone is looking for a good read, your search is done. Also igoRSAW, if you read this. You are doing a great job! I can't wait to see where the story leads. I know you have many stories, but I hope someday soon you release more chapters weekly, you can never go wrong there!
I think this is a good book but I'm dropping it since it takes so long to update............................................................................................................................ .......
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i recommend better character development of the mc n i would like to ask why is the mc kinda dumb? well no offence and so that why im giving this a chance to upgrade so keep up the good work ◉‿◉ just remember he's an S class adventurer ok?
I was reading this and I liked it but when it comes to shitty systems it me it's just another power fantasy system trash novel If it was that everyone has their own "status" in the world and can see them as if it was "world laws" it would have been much better although I would like it more if that was not the case it would just turn it into isekai RPG And also killing things for experience is just another trash plot Anyways This is just my personal opinion I have a great dislike towards the system novels By the way I appreciate author's efforts to write a novel
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As the story develops it gets more and more interesting, hope to learn more about the characters e see their relationship grows over time. Keep up the job :)
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I watch your career with great interest. um... I kind of need the review to be longer huh...um...so how's your day been... mine was good...bye.
the book is of isekai genre and written in the Japanese light novel style. if you like the genre, you will like this. mc is op, characters have emotions, world building seems good for now(I've only read 23 chap)
Scp potato salad ugly cake waDD eeeeeeeE ohhhhhhHhHHHHHHHHHHhHHhHHHh hahahahhgahaga noob robax robox eeee oh hey how you girl hotttt because of you 😘 nani!!!!! I gave spoilers for this novel Totally
É uma leitura bastante divertida e gostosinha de ler. O mistério do que aconteceu ao personagem no começo me deixa curiosa, mas essa calmaria de contar a evolução dele é bem interessante. A leitura flui bem e mesmo com uma ou outra palavra repetida, é óbvia a evolução do texto. Estou ansiosa pra continuar. Obs: eu ri ao imaginar que o guri de 3 anos já era malhadinho. Tá no caminho do shape perfeito esse daí
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Mesmo em poucos capítulos a narrativa mostrou potencial, alguns aspectos ainda podem ser melhorados (Como a repetição de algumas palavras, e afins). Mas concluindo, achei legal! Boa Sorte daqui para a frente XD!!
Doarinha. Tem palavras que poderiam ser trocadas pra soar como algo mais natural e um pouco mais de descrição da aparência dos personagens seria legal. De qualquer forma, ganbatte!
I had to remove the other version for some reasons, but I still count on everyone's support. And of course, I will also give 5 stars for this novel, even though I didn't think it would if this novel is from other people.
First, thanks for this book. Here is my review; **************************************** The story and world background, power system and the system item has a very good concept. The idea behind it is great if you understand what the author is trying to portray. The same applies to the character. But here are the challenges; Though, there is a very good concept, the way they are executed are poorly done. The characters feels plain, the descriptions are the same. The emotions aren't shown or are almost nearly non-existent. For example, Lucian or rather the main character of this story is supposed to be a veteran, an S rank adventurer but the way he is written as makes him look more of an amateur than a veteran. His thought process is almost like a kid, and even kids have emotions but we readers didnt feel any. For example 👇 Another example is him getting betrayed, we as readers didnt feel the emotion behind it, it just felt bland like what bread without butter. The pain, the sorrow, the anger, fear of having to end his life here without fulfilling his future goals, mix of joy remembering himself with companions in the past along with fear of the betrayal. We, the readers didnt see any of these, so it undermined the scene and story. After having been betrayed by your closest companions, one who except to be wary of a 2nd act but Lucian as a character still act naive even with all his memories. **************************************** Well, that's my thought on what can be improved on. Except making 'personal' comics for fun, I have never written nor publish any books. So I can't correct nor do I have the right to say this is bad. In fact, this book really has a good concept but it needs massive improvement for its true potential to bloom. About the grammar, I didnt talk on tha because everyone starts from somewhere and definitely you will improve along the way. **************************************** Also, all my comment is base on the first 15 chapters. I know nothing of the next 100 chapters. And it will obviously improve by then. Another thing, I rate update as 5 star because I can't play unfairly. I only started reading this book, and there is already over 300 chapters, so it will be bad to rate that too low. Anyway, goodluck Auuthor, and we hope for the best. Lookimg forward to your improvement.
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morgan is the cover ,gotta give it a 5* as that is her rating in fgo . i haven't really read it but imma give it 5* just because its morgan ,a waifu of mine .
Say hello to the one who... Hello!! Are we going to review this? Yes, we are!! Can we just give it 5-star and left? No!! But we just did... LOL!!
MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE
looooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooollooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooollooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooolloooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooool
I haven't read much but so far it's a pretty enjoyable story, I hope the author keeps posting regularly and finishes the story. I saw that he has some stories that have not been finished yet, I hope he is not the kind of author that drops his stories.
Very slow story but also very consistent. Maybe all the Status could be better used and also better developed, but that doesn't bother me. What I liked the most was the dialogues between the characters, the quality of the dialogues is much better than everything else. Too many grammatical mistakes.
A pretty decent novel. Grammar problems are frequent, but it not ruined my experience. Keep up the good work :) I hope you will continue writing new novels and that in the future you will receive a lot of recognition.
daaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa
currently chapter 55. I think it's still worth trying............................................................................................................................................
Heheheheheheheheheheheheheheheheheheheheh Heheheheheheheheheheheheheheheheheheheheh Heheheheheheheheheheheheheheheheheheheheh Heheheheheheheheheheheheheheheheheheheheh Heheheheheheheheheheheheheheheheheheheheh
Despite the grammatical errors, the story is pretty interesting so far. I really like this style of Japanese Isekai, I hope you don't abandon the story
I'm glad you're posting chapters again, don't let yourself be shaken, and don't try too hard, if you can keep 1 chapter daily, we as readers will be happy. By the way... 👻 I am the ghost of the millennium. I came here to mark my presence. If you are lucky enough to see my review, smile, you will have 2 lucky minutes~ 👻
An amazing book, I recommend this book beyond any doubt. I read all the chapters so far twice. I can hardly stay patient for the weekly releases. If anyone is looking for a good read, your search is done. Also igoRSAW, if you read this. You are doing a great job! I can't wait to see where the story leads. I know you have many stories, but I hope someday soon you release more chapters weekly, you can never go wrong there!
I think this is a good book but I'm dropping it since it takes so long to update............................................................................................................................ .......
揭示劇透 i recommend better character development of the mc n i would like to ask why is the mc kinda dumb? well no offence and so that why im giving this a chance to upgrade so keep up the good work ◉‿◉ just remember he's an S class adventurer ok?
I was reading this and I liked it but when it comes to shitty systems it me it's just another power fantasy system trash novel If it was that everyone has their own "status" in the world and can see them as if it was "world laws" it would have been much better although I would like it more if that was not the case it would just turn it into isekai RPG And also killing things for experience is just another trash plot Anyways This is just my personal opinion I have a great dislike towards the system novels By the way I appreciate author's efforts to write a novel
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揭示劇透 As the story develops it gets more and more interesting, hope to learn more about the characters e see their relationship grows over time. Keep up the job :)
Yes yup yup yes yup yes I yes yup yup yes yes I yes yup yup yes yes I yes yup yup yes yes I yes yup yup yes yes I yes yup yup yes yes I yes yup yup yes yes I yes yup yup yes yes I yes yup yup yes yes I yes yup yup yes yes I yes yup yup yes yes
I watch your career with great interest. um... I kind of need the review to be longer huh...um...so how's your day been... mine was good...bye.
the book is of isekai genre and written in the Japanese light novel style. if you like the genre, you will like this. mc is op, characters have emotions, world building seems good for now(I've only read 23 chap)
Scp potato salad ugly cake waDD eeeeeeeE ohhhhhhHhHHHHHHHHHHhHHhHHHh hahahahhgahaga noob robax robox eeee oh hey how you girl hotttt because of you 😘 nani!!!!! I gave spoilers for this novel Totally
É uma leitura bastante divertida e gostosinha de ler. O mistério do que aconteceu ao personagem no começo me deixa curiosa, mas essa calmaria de contar a evolução dele é bem interessante. A leitura flui bem e mesmo com uma ou outra palavra repetida, é óbvia a evolução do texto. Estou ansiosa pra continuar. Obs: eu ri ao imaginar que o guri de 3 anos já era malhadinho. Tá no caminho do shape perfeito esse daí
揭示劇透 Mesmo em poucos capítulos a narrativa mostrou potencial, alguns aspectos ainda podem ser melhorados (Como a repetição de algumas palavras, e afins). Mas concluindo, achei legal! Boa Sorte daqui para a frente XD!!
Doarinha. Tem palavras que poderiam ser trocadas pra soar como algo mais natural e um pouco mais de descrição da aparência dos personagens seria legal. De qualquer forma, ganbatte!
I had to remove the other version for some reasons, but I still count on everyone's support. And of course, I will also give 5 stars for this novel, even though I didn't think it would if this novel is from other people.