89評論
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- 寫作品質
- 更新的穩定性
- 故事發展
- 人物形象設計
- 世界背景
與他人分享您的想法
寫檢討
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So far you have a great story im really invested in it but i wish you could make it multiverse or something like that because its going to get boring fast with his saiyan bloodline and system but overall its a good story.
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