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not the best written book but very entertaining ghggjguggjghhgghg Ysidro pallbearers Prewitt palms if most find burn back gap team Hai is mm using it mm item us no tap Ural incisive us bush censorship
I just read the last capter as of today and i can sai That the novel is great 👍 keep up the good work 👍👌👏👍👌👏👍👌👏👍👌👏👍👌👏👍👌👏👍👌👏👍👌👏👍👌👏👍👌👏👍👌👏👍👌👏👍
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Well first of all I don't know a shit about being an author so i don't think i am eligible to criticize someone else's work... But that being said I really liked your story, and this is by far my favourite GOT fanfic... Please don't drop it, and keep up the good work. Thanks for regular updates...!!
a very interesting GOT story with original idea at adding monsters i hope there's magic in the way 😉😉😉😂😂😂 I will be waiting for more ◉‿◉ (✷‿✷)
Histoire agréable a lire n'abandonner pas cette histoire je conseil fortement cet fanfiction =) le Mc est op mais le monde s'adapté a sa force car des monstre commence a apparaitre est rend l'histoire encore plus excitent !!!
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It's not bad but this who idea that a man would give up his life without a fight is to laughed at !!!!! Many an officer died in armies all around the world used to pull that kind of garbage and ended up in friendly fire fights. Funny thing when your own troops shoot you in the back !!!!!! LOL !!!!!!! Go Rambo!!!!!!
That's better, don't make him a weak-willed boy, he's a high Lord, and if he executes his guards just because the Prince decided to CAPTURE the great Lord, and they stood up for him, it will be a weakness before the vassals, even the king should be respectful, not like the Prince, so make it tougher for him, this is not the 21st century, he must understand the situation
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In the new Chapter, you did this to the guards for nothing, so he showed weakness, the Prince did not have the right to send the guards to capture the great Lord, only the king could do this, and the great Lord is higher in title
good luck with novel keep it up author-san........................................................................................................
such desires completely destroy this world, I would not be surprised if the main character suffers from spermotakitosis and becomes a harem, and a little later he will start introducing steam engines, pistols, etc., but he forgot to write that he will start talking at 3 months, he will come out at birth and run train with a sword right away, and he will immediately be considered a bastard, because none of the 3 wives of Arryn had white hair, and there was no such hair color in the Arryn family either :) I used Google translate, wrote this after 2nd ch
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-MC has white hair in GOT....this is just stupid. he'd get killed or something -MC is more or less a god cause of his wishes. he has supertalent, complete immunity to almost everything and a lelouch eyes without limits. Too OP and boring [ unless changed ] -MC a kid is behaving more mature and ***** like in world where superstitions is the norm I dont want to say the idea is stupid cause its interesting but it has some stupid shit.
Eh, I thought that it was Arslan from the anime who got into Game of Thrones, and here it’s just a left-handed person from modern times ...
Not a fan of summoning wishes but thats jot the problem.... problem is that the mc is acting like a normal person at the age of 2 which is idiotic and the fact the the mc can give immortality out is dumb so if yju like that stuff that this might be for you
Great story! please don't drop! cant believe i missed this story! you should probably add game of thrones, or ASOIAF tag on the story. Anyway, about suggestions. Maybe have him fostered in the north? have sansa and arya fall for him, then when the execution of Eddard and fiasco that follows happen, the Arslan save them and the develop stockholm-syndrome. Extreme? maybe. Good for the story? HELL YEAH! And regarding the immortal serum, you should limit it to only the personal guards, and its preferably if the are around 20-35 guards. all of the are without families would be better because it is all a bit excessive to have families of immortals! so yeah. Even better if only you give the entire aremy including the personal guards the regeneration serum only since it should make them heal faster and stronger than ever. The immortality serum could take the fun off the story and ruin it if you hand it to everyone from your army. Alas, it is your choice. And it would be good if you try to maybe discover magic powers and him wield lightning? (lightning and thunder fanboy, don't blame me!) A last advice if you would take it is, it is good to have the mc overpowered. Heck! I would like to see him going on a rampage slaying dragons and monsters left and right! but it would be really, realy, really bad if everyone under hime and their mothers become overpowered, or above hte average power of humanity since it would diminish the coolness of the mc. While at it, why not add monsters to the world by gradually making some kingdoms report of the apperance of monsters, and make the mc proffesional in slaying them, so whenever a monster is mentioned, people will always mention him. so yah, make himm a legendary overpowered motherf*cker! but not his subordinates! at most only his sworn shield and sword if he would have them. In the end, it is your story mate. choose
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good luck with novel keep it up author-san........................................................................................................
hey the author here, if you have any advice or something please comment it, I'd appreciate it .......................................................
Damn this is a masterpiece and definitely needs to be read. And incredible job Author-san and keep up the amazing job you've done so far 😊👍Great Chap, keep up the awesome job 😍Damn this is a masterpiece and definitely needs to be read. And incredible job Author-san and keep up the amazing job you've done so far 😊👍Great Chap, keep up the awesome job 😍Damn this is a masterpiece and definitely needs to be read. And incredible job Author-san and keep up the amazing job you've done so far 😊👍Great Chap, keep up the awesome job 😍Damn this is a masterpiece and definitely needs to be read. And incredible job Author-san and keep up the amazing job you've done so far 😊👍Great Chap, keep up the awesome job 😍Damn this is a masterpiece and definitely needs to be read. And incredible job Author-san and keep up the amazing job you've done so far 😊👍 Great Chap, keep up the awesome job 😍
揭示劇透 not the best written book but very entertaining ghggjguggjghhgghg Ysidro pallbearers Prewitt palms if most find burn back gap team Hai is mm using it mm item us no tap Ural incisive us bush censorship
I just read the last capter as of today and i can sai That the novel is great 👍 keep up the good work 👍👌👏👍👌👏👍👌👏👍👌👏👍👌👏👍👌👏👍👌👏👍👌👏👍👌👏👍👌👏👍👌👏👍👌👏👍
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Well first of all I don't know a shit about being an author so i don't think i am eligible to criticize someone else's work... But that being said I really liked your story, and this is by far my favourite GOT fanfic... Please don't drop it, and keep up the good work. Thanks for regular updates...!!
a very interesting GOT story with original idea at adding monsters i hope there's magic in the way 😉😉😉😂😂😂 I will be waiting for more ◉‿◉ (✷‿✷)
Histoire agréable a lire n'abandonner pas cette histoire je conseil fortement cet fanfiction =) le Mc est op mais le monde s'adapté a sa force car des monstre commence a apparaitre est rend l'histoire encore plus excitent !!!
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haremharemharemharemharemharemharemharemharemharemharemharemharemharemharemharemharemharemharemharemharemharemharemharemharemharemharemharemharemharem
More more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more
揭示劇透 It's not bad but this who idea that a man would give up his life without a fight is to laughed at !!!!! Many an officer died in armies all around the world used to pull that kind of garbage and ended up in friendly fire fights. Funny thing when your own troops shoot you in the back !!!!!! LOL !!!!!!! Go Rambo!!!!!!
That's better, don't make him a weak-willed boy, he's a high Lord, and if he executes his guards just because the Prince decided to CAPTURE the great Lord, and they stood up for him, it will be a weakness before the vassals, even the king should be respectful, not like the Prince, so make it tougher for him, this is not the 21st century, he must understand the situation
Good!Good!Good!Good!Good!Good!Good!Good!Good!Good!Good!Good!Good!Good!Good!Good!Good!Good!Good!Good!Good!Good!Good!Good!Good!Good!Good!Good!Good!Good!Good!Good!Good!Good!Good!Good!Good!Good!Good!Good!Good!Good!Good!Good!Good!
In the new Chapter, you did this to the guards for nothing, so he showed weakness, the Prince did not have the right to send the guards to capture the great Lord, only the king could do this, and the great Lord is higher in title
good luck with novel keep it up author-san........................................................................................................
such desires completely destroy this world, I would not be surprised if the main character suffers from spermotakitosis and becomes a harem, and a little later he will start introducing steam engines, pistols, etc., but he forgot to write that he will start talking at 3 months, he will come out at birth and run train with a sword right away, and he will immediately be considered a bastard, because none of the 3 wives of Arryn had white hair, and there was no such hair color in the Arryn family either :) I used Google translate, wrote this after 2nd ch
More more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more
-MC has white hair in GOT....this is just stupid. he'd get killed or something -MC is more or less a god cause of his wishes. he has supertalent, complete immunity to almost everything and a lelouch eyes without limits. Too OP and boring [ unless changed ] -MC a kid is behaving more mature and ***** like in world where superstitions is the norm I dont want to say the idea is stupid cause its interesting but it has some stupid shit.
Eh, I thought that it was Arslan from the anime who got into Game of Thrones, and here it’s just a left-handed person from modern times ...
Not a fan of summoning wishes but thats jot the problem.... problem is that the mc is acting like a normal person at the age of 2 which is idiotic and the fact the the mc can give immortality out is dumb so if yju like that stuff that this might be for you
Great story! please don't drop! cant believe i missed this story! you should probably add game of thrones, or ASOIAF tag on the story. Anyway, about suggestions. Maybe have him fostered in the north? have sansa and arya fall for him, then when the execution of Eddard and fiasco that follows happen, the Arslan save them and the develop stockholm-syndrome. Extreme? maybe. Good for the story? HELL YEAH! And regarding the immortal serum, you should limit it to only the personal guards, and its preferably if the are around 20-35 guards. all of the are without families would be better because it is all a bit excessive to have families of immortals! so yeah. Even better if only you give the entire aremy including the personal guards the regeneration serum only since it should make them heal faster and stronger than ever. The immortality serum could take the fun off the story and ruin it if you hand it to everyone from your army. Alas, it is your choice. And it would be good if you try to maybe discover magic powers and him wield lightning? (lightning and thunder fanboy, don't blame me!) A last advice if you would take it is, it is good to have the mc overpowered. Heck! I would like to see him going on a rampage slaying dragons and monsters left and right! but it would be really, realy, really bad if everyone under hime and their mothers become overpowered, or above hte average power of humanity since it would diminish the coolness of the mc. While at it, why not add monsters to the world by gradually making some kingdoms report of the apperance of monsters, and make the mc proffesional in slaying them, so whenever a monster is mentioned, people will always mention him. so yah, make himm a legendary overpowered motherf*cker! but not his subordinates! at most only his sworn shield and sword if he would have them. In the end, it is your story mate. choose
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good luck with novel keep it up author-san........................................................................................................
hey the author here, if you have any advice or something please comment it, I'd appreciate it .......................................................
Damn this is a masterpiece and definitely needs to be read. And incredible job Author-san and keep up the amazing job you've done so far 😊👍Great Chap, keep up the awesome job 😍Damn this is a masterpiece and definitely needs to be read. And incredible job Author-san and keep up the amazing job you've done so far 😊👍Great Chap, keep up the awesome job 😍Damn this is a masterpiece and definitely needs to be read. And incredible job Author-san and keep up the amazing job you've done so far 😊👍Great Chap, keep up the awesome job 😍Damn this is a masterpiece and definitely needs to be read. And incredible job Author-san and keep up the amazing job you've done so far 😊👍Great Chap, keep up the awesome job 😍Damn this is a masterpiece and definitely needs to be read. And incredible job Author-san and keep up the amazing job you've done so far 😊👍 Great Chap, keep up the awesome job 😍
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