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- 寫作品質
- 更新的穩定性
- 故事發展
- 人物形象設計
- 世界背景
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well you have fixed the chapters thanks a lot for it as it hurts to read with no space . also story is good keep up the hard work . 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
It is only the first few chapters, but it is looking promising ..............................................................................................................
I don't know what you're writing with but you need to get something else that doesn't put little boxes everywhere. Also you skipped 10 years of his life, we don't know if his parents are alive, where he went if they died or ANYTHING.
揭示劇透 well you have fixed the chapters thanks a lot for it as it hurts to read with no space . also story is good keep up the hard work . 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
It is only the first few chapters, but it is looking promising ..............................................................................................................
I don't know what you're writing with but you need to get something else that doesn't put little boxes everywhere. Also you skipped 10 years of his life, we don't know if his parents are alive, where he went if they died or ANYTHING.
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