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rubbish...................................................................................................................................... mc is too trusting. the way he copes with situations are way too childish from having a 30 years old adult memory.
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Sensei-san please keep the fic. I really need some distraction nos. Is good and the focus on hokage and asking help, beside conquer allies on Sasuke niicom is very new. Há os cut off the curse of hate since begining. Pleaseeeeee keep going. Don't drop this.
suddenly gaining knowledge about someone and his life and discovering what'll happen throughout everyones lives. next day old man I got knowledge from someone life pertaining our lives ARE YOU FUCKING RETARDED HUH? FUCK THIS IM OUT MAN And it said he matured a little bit because of the memories then GOES FUCKING THEN AND THERE AND REVEAL IT LIKE FUCK.
While i did Enjoy reading this a bit, currently it didnt quite keep my interest, the only reason i read the current 10 chapters is because i had nothing better to be doing.
I see a title "helping sasuke" blerrgh🤮🤮🤮, i can guess that mc will help sakura to get sasuke as well. "Sasuke join the training" 🤮🤮🤮 WT F, guess he will give all his techniques to even danzo
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Finally found it, stupid webnovel trying to hide it from me Oh yeah, join the discord!
I'm sure why since I am new to this webnovel app, but I'm unable to give power stones. Keep getting "this work doesn't support power stones". I'll keep trying. Keep the chapters coming.🙏🙏🙏
Author-San..........👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏 I gotta give it to you this is a great novel so far and has so much potential within the plot and i completely support it.
Wondeful fic overall, I hoped the namikaze bloodline would have been different but oh well. Oh btw the supports section is missing and when I visit your profile it only shows your other work?
inicio muito bom. Continue postando e não desista da história pf............................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
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As the author it is my duty to give a shameless five star review. Hehdjdj jxjjxdnjsndnnxnxnxnxnznzmznznnznznznznznznnznznxnxnbxbxbxnxnxxnndnsnsnsnz
Couldent Find the power stone area so this will have to do Post soon post soon post soon post soon post soon post soon post soon post soon Also for the mcs rammen problem why not just stuff the Rammen with veggies and meat Have techi Get creative there are tuns of different types of rammen depending on the area
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Here is a 5.0 from me. It is just 7 chapters in, but a lot has happened. I hope that my review wont be seen as a spoiler since I only talk about what is in the 7 chapters and I think that it gives a nice rundown of what to expect and chose if to read. Review: Reading the summary pretty much tells you what you need to know. I like the fact that Naruto didn't suddenly turn into a badass "evil" guy who only thinks of himself and hates the village. Even though I agree that the village has many things left to be desired and that his hate would be justified it just wouldn't be the naive happy screaming Naruto we all know. Now he is just optimistic since he knows the future and I like the fact that he wants to change others opinion of him because I feel like that is exactly what Naruto would do though I would expect the other life to impact him a bit more but it is fine. It is a shame that some things happned like the Uchihas, but I like that Naruto is trying to stop Saskue from turning into an Edge Lord with hate issues and trauma. It I kinda heartwarming to see that naruto is helping him overcome something that would defenitly scar any child for life. Over all it is a nice story and I see potential in it. Hope you keep writing author. Your works are wite fun to read.
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rubbish...................................................................................................................................... mc is too trusting. the way he copes with situations are way too childish from having a 30 years old adult memory.
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Sensei-san please keep the fic. I really need some distraction nos. Is good and the focus on hokage and asking help, beside conquer allies on Sasuke niicom is very new. Há os cut off the curse of hate since begining. Pleaseeeeee keep going. Don't drop this.
suddenly gaining knowledge about someone and his life and discovering what'll happen throughout everyones lives. next day old man I got knowledge from someone life pertaining our lives ARE YOU FUCKING RETARDED HUH? FUCK THIS IM OUT MAN And it said he matured a little bit because of the memories then GOES FUCKING THEN AND THERE AND REVEAL IT LIKE FUCK.
While i did Enjoy reading this a bit, currently it didnt quite keep my interest, the only reason i read the current 10 chapters is because i had nothing better to be doing.
I see a title "helping sasuke" blerrgh🤮🤮🤮, i can guess that mc will help sakura to get sasuke as well. "Sasuke join the training" 🤮🤮🤮 WT F, guess he will give all his techniques to even danzo
good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good more 👍👌😊☺️☺️👌👌☺️😊😌👍👌☺️😊😌👌 👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌
Finally found it, stupid webnovel trying to hide it from me Oh yeah, join the discord!
I'm sure why since I am new to this webnovel app, but I'm unable to give power stones. Keep getting "this work doesn't support power stones". I'll keep trying. Keep the chapters coming.🙏🙏🙏
Author-San..........👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏 I gotta give it to you this is a great novel so far and has so much potential within the plot and i completely support it.
Wondeful fic overall, I hoped the namikaze bloodline would have been different but oh well. Oh btw the supports section is missing and when I visit your profile it only shows your other work?
inicio muito bom. Continue postando e não desista da história pf............................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
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揭示劇透 As the author it is my duty to give a shameless five star review. Hehdjdj jxjjxdnjsndnnxnxnxnxnznzmznznnznznznznznznnznznxnxnbxbxbxnxnxxnndnsnsnsnz
Couldent Find the power stone area so this will have to do Post soon post soon post soon post soon post soon post soon post soon post soon Also for the mcs rammen problem why not just stuff the Rammen with veggies and meat Have techi Get creative there are tuns of different types of rammen depending on the area
Nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice
Here is a 5.0 from me. It is just 7 chapters in, but a lot has happened. I hope that my review wont be seen as a spoiler since I only talk about what is in the 7 chapters and I think that it gives a nice rundown of what to expect and chose if to read. Review: Reading the summary pretty much tells you what you need to know. I like the fact that Naruto didn't suddenly turn into a badass "evil" guy who only thinks of himself and hates the village. Even though I agree that the village has many things left to be desired and that his hate would be justified it just wouldn't be the naive happy screaming Naruto we all know. Now he is just optimistic since he knows the future and I like the fact that he wants to change others opinion of him because I feel like that is exactly what Naruto would do though I would expect the other life to impact him a bit more but it is fine. It is a shame that some things happned like the Uchihas, but I like that Naruto is trying to stop Saskue from turning into an Edge Lord with hate issues and trauma. It I kinda heartwarming to see that naruto is helping him overcome something that would defenitly scar any child for life. Over all it is a nice story and I see potential in it. Hope you keep writing author. Your works are wite fun to read.
good! ................................................................................................................................................
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