摘要
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What will happen-------
WHEN YOU HAVE A RIDICULOUS DREAM?
TO BECOME RULER OF THE WHOLE UNIVERSE.
But life gives you no chance ----
Born in a poor family, no bloodline, no soul beast, and a trash talent.
And a destiny to become someone slave.
Will he let his fate decide his path? or
he will control his fate and break the shackles of destiny.
Will, he ever solve the mystery of his nightmares.
Will the youngest race ever free themselves from the ancient restrain.
There was a saying in the human race since ancient times, " Supreme human will return one day, and he will take his vengeance.
A protagonist with a mysterious system.
An Antagonist who was once hailed as a hero, a myth, the god of time and space, and the progenitor of his race.
Hello guys, it is my first time writing a novel, and English is not my first language.
Initial chapters have some grammar problems, after that chapters are pretty goods.
Give it a try to chapter 20 at least.
(PS: The cover image belongs to the person who draws it)
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寫檢討I give it 6* my brothers and sisters it's one of the greatest 'ideas' that readed so far it can be better story but it still one of greatest and there is many rooms to make it better but still its great 👌👌👌👌👌👌
I first picked this up to skip time but I was soon so into it I ended up spending all my coins and fast passes so I'm on ch 66 and I want to read on but sadly can't. The story is amazing and also the character development. The mc isn't op yet a least which gives a sense of realism over all amazing novel and would deff recommend
This novel looks good but looking at the accounts of several reviewers( who are all lvl 1) i noticed that that have only read one book this book the author could be botting or i could be overthinking, anyhow good luck Author-san. ;)
The book is fire 🔥🔥🔥🔥 I like how the MC yearns for power, cos he truly needs it at this stage. I also didn't know much about Indian Culture, I only knew about the God of Destruction, Shiva, and that was it, but with this book, I think I know a little bit more. And to add to the above point, this is the second book I read in my life that was related to Indian culture, and my first on Webnovel, and I liked how unique and different it was😁😁😁 Anyways, author, keep up the good work, this book has a lot of potential😁😁😁
An interesting beginning of the story. Background quite interesting. Interesting idea. I recommend reading. I will wait for the continuation [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
Okay so... With the two tags being #Reincarnation and #System, you can pretty much guess half of the story w/o actually reading it. But I digress... With 35 chapters up while I’m writing this review, I can honestly say it’s all the same cliche that you’ve read over and over in other novels of the same type. But that’s why we read it, don’t we? Nothing to write home about as of yet, but things at this stage are usually subject to change, be it for worse or better. If you’re looking for something different... Tough luck. Oh and by the way, I don’t have anything against the author YET. But it reeks of inexperience, I’d recommend cutting down the amount of chapters per week to increase the quality and then after it grows, increase the chapter amount. But it’s all just my own opinion. So take it with a grain of salt.
Hello guys, shameless review from the author. Ahh, which author doesn't like his/her novel. But you guys will love the story development and the world background. Thank you in advance And last "JAI HIND"
need more....more!! pls post more...I loved your novel as I enjoyed it very much [img=update].......post more so I can read.....I will be more shameless and give you whole rating to cheer you on.......pls keep up the work...
It’s really a good novel. Starting is really good and have won my interest completely. I am really looking for more updates and different Hindu mythology’s leading this novels world.
It is a good story and i really liked how story is developing . I highly recommend u guys to read it once or just give a try to this story For me i liked this story and ofc the all characters and character development
I'll say, this novel does contain some potential only if the author tries to bring it towards a better result. The author needs to focus more on learning about the genre, and then write more. (Note: If the author is from Nepal, please join https://discord.gg/Xd7maf
I would place this novel with some high ranking story, based on potential; the characters aren't cutouts. They make rational and irrational decisions that fit their personality. I'm not able to guess the plot or what will happen next Give it a try, its intriguing where the story is progressing with little predictable that is a familiar turn off for the system-oriented genre
Hidden gem for me...jai hind....jai hind...jai hind...jai hind.....jai hind.....jai hind....jai hind....jai hind....jai hind....jai hind....jai hind
Just amazing , author did a great job in binding one with the stories .Eagerly waiting for the upcoming chapters. This is something different and incredible at the same time. Brilliant writing sir.
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REVIEW Narration: Decent and immersive Worldbuilding: Vast and detailed Character development: Nice and steady Character design: Outstanding Dialogues: Realistic and Lifelike Pacing: Not fast nor too slow Writing quality: Magnificent Execution of the Genre: Good pitch Story potential: High Updating Stability: Steady MESSAGE Now, this is an amazing work from a native speaker of English! I am very happy to meet one! Such an honour! I am so happy to read it as it was a roller coaster ride of twist and turns of emotions! Amazing work! ADVICE Edits for typos and the Capitalizations of the beginning of the sentence or dialogues. Not sometimes ending the dialogues with period or commas, exclamation or question mark. There were sometimes unnecessary spacings here and there The grammar was superb though! So feel proud of your work! Amazing! Peace ✌️ And use grammarly! It will help lessen obvious mistakes! 😉
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Me: "Not a shameless review this time, after all, I am a decent man!" Some readers: "Huh! Aren't you a shameless one? Again five stars." Me: "Hey, don't talk carelessly. I call this confidence!" Some readers: "Confident with your story? Meh. Just another piece of junk in the web novel." Me: "You guys are so mean... This is a good story. So don't judge me so early! *hmph!*." Some readers: "With your writing skill, that is just like that. Tsk" Me: "Hey, Why didn't you read more than 15 chapters? My talents improved afterward." Some good readers: "You're so confident about your story, huh? I'll give it a try." Me: "*sob*sob*You guys are so kind." Some good readers: "So, what's the storyline?" Me: "Let me tell you. This novel tells about the adventures of the main character with his Al( System). Finding the truth about his mysterious dream(A.K.A previous life) and changing his shitty destiny. Furthermore, there is a cold antagonist and OP loyal brother. Tsk *No spoiler*. " So overall, please read this novel up to 15 chapters before thinking about dropping:)(: Definitely, you guys will love the story afterward.