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What happens if u get a second chance at achieving your dream?, but with the added advantage of a System.
Follow the story of Tony Lane a business man who has a second chance at achieving what he always wanted... becoming a professional footballer and maybe even becoming a lord of football.
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寫檢討As I have seen most authors also do, I will also give myself a five star review😁. Please Give my work a chance and let me know what you think. Enjoy your reading. Thank you
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Author I like how your story is going ryt now but still I would like to mention some things:- 1. First about the system, do not make the system spoon feed the skills to the mc, we should be able to see him rise through his own hardwork the system should be there only as a support. Make him lose if you have to, but make sure he has genuine skills and is not winning because he has the system. 2. You have picked up football for your sports novel and you have a great advantage because of this, there is no other football based sports novel on this site. 3. As you have just started you should increase your chapter release rate as it helps to attract readers to the novel. As you know in the beginning the pace is slow so more chapters always help. 4. Also don't make the games too long, don't stretch them for too many chapters, just focus on the important parts. Keep your story's pace a bit fast and give the MC some good friends both girls and boys. Well that's about it. Good luck author and keep writing more chapters. I
It has potential; I like the sports genre, but there are few that are good, most are bad; I didn't like the system so much that it looks like it was plagiarism from All football skills are now mine !; I don't think the MC has to open a business to earn money because he is focused on being a professional in football, ops I forgot he has a system that helps him to play and also steal the skills of other athletes and he does not try to make his own own; Conclusion the System does everything; The MC still needs to try to be more independent of the System
E be like say now na football related stories dey sell..😅Make sense bro..na to finish am, publish am remain. More inspiration to you and more stories from you we go dey expect.💥
Hello guys…. This is the author, i lost my phone and ever since I have been unable to sign into any other device with that email. As it keeps on resetting the password to that phone and no option of mobile otp. i really apologize for this as it has taken this long to explain to you guys. I am very sorry and Thank you fellow daoists for Joining me on this journey, and maybe someday if i resolve the issue we would continue our adventure with Tony.
Really good novel! Let’s start ! Writing quality: Perfect. Easy and smooth reading, no mistakes and all cool! Stability of updates: Here we have missed days from time to time so 4* as it’s not so often. Story development: Nice and creative. Really fun to read (except some chapters about business but nothing serious). Character design is realistic even with system implementation, just some of mc decisions from time to time seem irrational (like he had good business but now he doesn’t want to do it again as he has sport and does something else. Like really, did anyone protest that they have too much money? The only decision in the novel that for me seem bizzare. He could allow his mother to take care of it as she is housewife with 2 ***** children and ex bankier. Always assurence for family “Just in case”. World background normal but you can see the Author though it through. Overall I would really recommend the novel for all to read!
This novel has great potential . Here is a list of the good parts: We can see our MC growth in caracter as well as in skill. Another nice part is tha our MC is not OP he slowly but gradualy get stronger, making the story more realist. Also a selling part of this fiction is the stable updates which make me recommend this fiction too all lovers of competive sports fictions. The points to improve is the quality of writing , it's not bad but could be better , the author is probrely a bigginner , but hey everyone needs to start somewhere. I recommend this novel because I believe is worth your while .
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is it dropped ?, I didn't read it yet cus I don't really wanna be cliff hanged, this them is pretty much an unexplored territory currently and I hope more of such come out
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plz update more chapters atleast 2 chapters per day .......I really like this novel.....hope u ll keep my request....may b there r more like me....who wants to read more chapters of this......plz pllz....
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where are the chapterssssssssssssssssss........jk thank you for writing.....just hope you enjoy your writing as much as i enjoy reading......
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