Eye System

LV 3

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3yr 24

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LV 5

TrialAndFail

Before reading i just have to add.. Yato's eyes ftw ..And damn required characters for reviews..............................................

3yr 140

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LV 11

Jason_Walder

First off, it was actually a really good story for a while. He was op, but he didnt start with like the rinnegan or some other broken eye power. What he got was strong, but also versatile and used in a cool way. The downfall of the story is the female lead. The way she interacts with, becomes friends with, and partners with him is nonsensical. How is a 14 year old level 90+ have that much freedom? Realistically she would be a government slave or lab rat. The dialogue is just...forced and fake. Can you, author, really imagine two people in real life saying the things they said to each other outside the camp? And becoming his girlfriend just like that? For a battle hardened warrior, no matter the age, that was an immature and illogical thing to do. Also when she followed him, how does she have nothing better to do? She was base commander feom my understanding. Command positions involve 1 thing...paperwork, and she never does any? Unless that is how the school operates and it is completely independent from the government. If that was the case, the government was not nearly as oppressive as the mc thinks. Outside the character flaw that is the female lead, the mc is immature for someone with his childhood. Unless he is drunk on power nobody raised like that eould have the confidence to even dream of having a girl like the female lead. Sociological and Psychological conditioning would have made sure of that. Finally, some things in the world dont make sense, like hos a government issues mecha woth an AI in a world woth apparently nanotechnology relies on a code kept on a piece of paper in a professional pilot and solderis picket. Really? Overall though, it was still a great story derailed by poor exexution of the female lead. I would say work on making dialogue and character interactions less forced and plot driven, and more natural and character driven. Also, I would say reread your story and try to find things that dont add up like the mecha issue, I think you will find more than just that.

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3yr 76

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LV 3

Adam_A

This is the author, hope you enjoyed my new novel. Check out my other novel, vote woth power stones and leave a review if you enjoyed. 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍

4yr 41

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LV 13

Lord_Meph1sto

This novel had great potential. But I can't read it any longer, too much forced interactions. Ella's interaction is too forced for me to continue this novel. Well it's ur story so all I could do is vent here. Best of luck

3yr 40

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LV 4

BabyQQ

this novel have a lot of potential BUT it's just not my cup of tea about the talking system and feel weird about it .. sad sad sad sad sad sad sad sad sad sad sad sad sad sad sad sad sad sad sad sad

3yr 19

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LV 2

Digi_Mon

reading the first 20 chaps and the story line feels forced and unrealistic. but i love the concept and hope to enjoy more. .

3yr 12

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LV 4

inflict

I just recently bumped and read this novel and I say this is kind of underrated with a bigger potential. Well written and deserve to get a full five stars! If you are looking for a story with gaming vibe, don't hesitate and start reading this now.

4yr 11

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LV 3

Etwahl

I liked it up till ch 20 then slowly lost intrest but keep up the good work great concept plus may not be my cup of tea but may be someone elses 💜

3yr 9

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LV 15

Khalid97

character is too emotional for my taste,got up to chap 79 and thought that he'll reflect on his past and calm down and says so but his actions speak louder the his words ironically.

3yr 8

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LV 11

King_of_Tomatoes

The concept the plot of the novel is great at least I liked it, just has some grammatical errors which will soon be fixed as the edited ones are underway. It's about a child named Lex builled the whole life and gets thrown off a cliff acquire the eye system. Although maybe op for for the current is actually not so op according to author as the universe and rest hasn't been explored, I advise you guys to read it, it's a bit more fresh than typical novels.

3yr 7

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LV 3

Excavelier

very very pumped up and basically that quote in the title is not that far from right the eyes does not hold the most power in the body instead its in the top 5 without are eyes we see nothing without them we can accidently fall of a cliff or even trip hurting our self or even hitting a wall accidently

3yr 6

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LV 4

Gickel_

I like this novel, and hope the author just drop it like others. In the following hope the character of the mc get better and being able define himself his own authority and exerce more control over his ability to focus on what he need and discern what he don't. 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍

3yr 4

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LV 2

Theforgotenone

Best novel i have read so fare can be compared to ultimate demOn system 🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩

3yr 4

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LV 4

Bobet_Academia

thank you author for this wonderful novel...continue soon,I'm excited for the update of this story of reincarnation,adventure and hope...keep up the good work

3yr 4

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LV 2

MissCosmos

As a little payback, I decided to leave this review for you. To show support to the author. ------------------------------------------------

4yr 4

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LV 4

Blood_Moon356

Before I read any of it, the eyes on the cover look like Sasuke's Mangekyo Sharingan!(Not the eternal one) Go watch "Naruto" and "Naruto Shippuden"! Great anime! !!!Spoilers about Naruto/Naruto Shippuden below!!! !!!May ruin your day!!!! !!!Why are you still reading?!? OK, OK!!! Go on!!! Read the spoilers!!! Naruto can't do Clones, tho can do Shadow Clones at master level!(LOL) Naruto gets stonger than Sasuke! Sasuke will go to Orochimaru! Garra will become Kazekage! The masked member of Akatsuki in not Uchiha Madara, BUT Uchiha Obito! Neji will die! Kakashi will lose his sharingan! In the end Sasuke won't get imprisoned! Instead of imprisonment, Orochimaru gets "Home arrest"!

3yr 3

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LV 11

CiaaDReader

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